Scaling Skeleton (Inside Online)

by JL Huang

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Mystery Sci-fi GameLit LitRPG Male Lead Secret Identity Strategy Strong Lead Virtual Reality
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Sean Fox needs money. 

Money to pay off loans. Money to pay rent. Money to live. 

Being a fresh college graduate, Sean moves to Raston City in hopes of landing it big. But it's been half a year and the only job he's been able to land is being a barista at a coffee shop downtown. The job keeps him alive, but it doesn't cut it. He needs more. Otherwise, he’ll have to move back home.

Then a big shot from the company that created the hit VRMMORPG, Inside Online, contacts him and offers him a golden opportunity. 

Could this change his life? Or did he take the devil’s deal?

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Updated first on Patreon, then on RR.

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TJ Reynolds
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So far at chapter four it reads clean and flows well. Looking forward to when the narrative begins to distinguish itself from others with a similar start. Stoked to see what Sean does once inside the game!

Darkdej
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This is the second book by JL Huang after finishing Book 1 of Execeed System (this is a seperate series FYI). The first chapter sets up the start of the story quite well and has a nice flow to it, something i think comes from the benefit of Huang having written a book already and having the practice that comes with that. The pacing in this book seems much better which leads me to be hopeful for more well-rounded character development and world building. Now I look forward to what will be written next and currently wait.

Andrew G
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A decent start so far. A bit cliche, but I'm willing to overlook that because the writing isn't as stilted and expositiony as the usual LitRPG opener.

I'll hold off on rating until the broader plot is underway.

My criticisms are focused around the gimmick: Spook is a skeletan, but that's isn't really used much. Outside of a dagger stab going between his ribs and failing to damage him, a lot of what I would expect from a skeleton is missing. He's a bit too similar to a regular player, just with a gimmicky "eat stuff to gain power" boost, which doesn't feel very on-theme for a skeleton.

Examples: He apparently still breaths. Does he have lungs? He can taste things. Does he have a tongue? So far, appearing as a skeleton hasn't had major consquences.

Does he tire less easily? Is he immune to some kinds of damage because he's fleshless? That sort of came up with the cursed helmet... which itself has a load of logic issues. Hopefully Shade get's a personality rather than being an exposition-dumper, as is usual with shoulder-buddies in LitRPG.

I hope to see more skeleton-approrpiate upsides AND downsides being incorporated. A lot of LitRPGs with monstrous MCs basically have the characters build completely divored from what they are. A skeletal pugilist has potential... but could easily end up being jsut as blase as many of the others.

 

I'll def continnue to read and will rerate once the plot is underway and the cast is more established.

EpsilonUndying
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I haven't read all of it yet, but already I like the premise. While nothing new it does the old concept in a new way. I love the referral code section. That was inspired. I'm excited to see what happens next now that we've gotten into the actual game section. I will be keeping my eye on this one while the author writes each chapter. 

Air Man6969420
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Only one chapter out at the time of review. Still too soon to really tell. Though i like JL Huang's other story, Exceed System, it was a bit too fast paced at times and was an OP character doing OP things. I didn't feel like there was really any chance Axel would or could fail. All of Axel's main setbacks took place prior to gaining his power and therefore isn't truely a setback in his journey. Of course it was just book 1 of an ongoing series, so those issues may be addressed later on. Since this one seems to be taking place in a game, i hope to see JL Huang play around more with failure and success both in the game and IRL. Really push Sean to overcome, accept, or find alternate solutions to problems and shortcomings, not just rely on OP skills to make the ordeal moot in the first place. Overall, the writing feels better and easier to read. Grammar is well written. will give a 3 star for now, but plan to change once more chapters are released as i feel I'm going to like this story more. Keep up the good work and hope to enjoy your stories for a long time to come.

ronlodelllahr
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This story is another example of how impressive the writers are on RR. The story is so original! It really grabbed me and pulled me in. I love it! Thank you!

Dicedimention
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Really perdictable and just nothing unexpected. No creativity in concepts/situtations or story. Has direct conflicting info given example being the mc has watched others play and knows about the game yet dosent know currency or game economy at all. Afterwards they get a best in slot for head that is over powered and is given as a first quest. This along with grammer and sentence structure mistakes makes this not a good or even an ok book its just below average.