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It's a story about a demon that owns a dungeon. 

The dungeon has a core. The demon is a low-ranking member of an army. 

Expect a fun story, way too long chapters, and a mildly emotional demon.

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Mister Bill
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Fun so far with long chapters

Reviewed at: 6. Floors

Good dungeoncore. I thought it would be a random demon walking around controlling the dungeon but it's a core story, instead. 
Good work on the worldbuilding and such. Some nice original points in there that I've enjoyed. 

Definitely worth a read if you like dungeoncore.

Alex Storm
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A good read

Reviewed at: 5.

 An encouraging review for the most part as it is only 5 chapters in,

But so far it has proven to be an enjoyable read, has litRPG elements, levels, tiers, skills,  and a well defined system, what i can so far infer.

The usage of grammar is good, and any minor mistake didnt much from my enjoyment of reading it.

The charactets seem nice and well thought out, and here may say that...

At least so far, a considerable amount of background information has come out for some of the characters which I am not sure if it is quite relevant or will become in the upcoming chapters, but then again it is still quite early in the story so cant give a good judgement for it yet, but remaining optimistic.

 

 

 

Now a bit of a spoiler? Maybe? 

 

 

The story is about a demon turned dungeon yes, so if want to read about it its quite a good read, although so far have yet to see the demonic part of the dungeon, but its still early and reasons are given why it is progressing in the way that it is so far, and I find them believable if my high score didnt quite show it off 

 

Will end it as I started it, a good read so far, andthe review is encouraging mostly as it is still in the early chapters but I am liking it.

rulerhades
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An enjoyable read

Reviewed at: 6. Floors

I was considering letting this sit on my read later list to gather some more pages and ratings before picking it up and I'm glad I didn't. It's a quality story that I enjoyed reading. It has its flaws, but I'm still eager for more despite that, and the issues aren't huge ones that will doom the story.

Style: Could use a bit of work, the shifting in time and time skips can be disorienting to read through if they aren't differentiated from the rest of the text. There are a couple other issue like that I noticed along the way but can't come to mind since its 3am.

Story: A dungeon core story, but with it's own unique twist. I've really enjoyed the way the story has progressed so far, and I await to see the way the bigger plot elements presented tie themselves together later in the story. I have a bit of an issue with chapter 5 that I commented on but it's more of a preference than something that will bring the story down. 

Grammar: This would be my biggest problem area for the story at this point. The first couple chapters especially although it seems to get better as more content comes out. Sentences can run quite long, amd there are times where commas are used to continue where the sentence should instead end. There was even once where a paragraph was just one big sentence, although it seemed to be the only time I'd seen it. Either way it could use a bit of cleanup

Characters: The characters actually feel real, which is already a step in the right direction. There isn't much in the way of a supporting cast at the moment and I feel like that will need to be worked on to get a better worldview and perspective into the dungeon. It's not a real impediment to the story though since there still isn't a lot out and dungeon stories tend to be stingier when it comes to supporting cast. 

GreenKing
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A different type of dungeon core

Reviewed at: 6. Floors

6 LONG chapters and it has 4 floors. Which is a nice change of pace. The author could easily write adventure stories. This book already contains two lol. Honestly want more chapters so I can read more. I enjoyed it but it needs a massive amount of details added to it :P