The only places I have posted the story and allow it to exist are on RoyalRoad, Scribblehub, and my Patreon.

So the world ended. Whoopsie? We didn’t even see it coming. Quite literally as it came at us faster than the speed of light. Don’t worry though, it got better. Also, I am not joking about the world ending. Most people say that and mean humans are inconvenienced for some reason. Nope, all matter disintegrated at the atomic scale there for a few moments. Apparently the local universe wasn’t actually stable? Don’t ask me to go into too much detail. It would require both of us to have a few more college degrees than sense, and I at least lack them (both the degrees and the sense). Anyway, the energy/matter/wibbly wobbly strings were at a local minimum and not the universal minimum. Basically, what we took for sea level was actually a nice little mountain lake and when the dam busted so did, well, everything.

Now here is where things go a bit off track with what normal meant before. You see magic is real, qi is real, gods are real. Not on old Earth mind you but souls pay little attention to time and space so we dreamed of it. In fact, the closer the shift in reality got to Earth, the closer our dreams got to the new reality. This is basically me tip toeing around the fact that it was a ‘System Apocalypse’. Reality became a video game, I became a dungeon, and this is my story.


Doyle Huxley just wanted a normal life but as the above might clue you in on that just isn’t in the cards. He gets to experience a “Path Based System Apocalypse” and some early paths he takes, both literally and figuratively, lead to him becoming a dungeon.

The aim is to release chapters once a week on Friday.

Cursing will be avoided and no naughty adult action will take place in the story.

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156 Chapters
Chapter Name Release Date
So the World Ended - Chapter 1 ago
Just Like Community Service - Chapter 2 ago
His Soul has WiFi Turned Off - Chapter 3 ago
Meeting the Boss - Chapter 4 ago
A Giant Ritual Circle - Chapter 5 ago
Wait, You're Not Insane? - Chapter 6 ago
Dungeon's Tutorial - Chapter 7 ago
What Type are You? - Chapter 8 ago
Starting Monsters and Their Stats - Chapter 9 ago
Calling Mother and then Tech Support - Chapter 10 ago
Dungeon Skills - Chapter 11 ago
Dungeon Territory - Chapter 12 ago
Cubes for Days - Chapter 13 ago
Soul Deep Relaxation - Chapter 14 ago
Making Rooms - Chapter 15 ago
Dungeon Design - Chapter 16 ago
Placing Plants - Chapter 17 ago
Monster Layout - Chapter 18 ago
Opening Up for Business - Chapter 19 ago
A Groups First Dungeon Dive - Chapter 20 ago
Clothes for the Kobolds - Chapter 21 ago
Goat Armor - Chapter 22 ago
Jock in Charge - Chapter 23 ago
That Girl You Hate - Chapter 24 ago
You Can Get A Ne - Chapter 25 ago
Spiky Goat Helmets - Chapter 26 ago
Tale of Two Towns - Chapter 27 ago
Jim Causes A Ruckus - Chapter 28 ago
Artistic Expression - Chapter 29 ago
Path Divergence - Chapter 30 ago
Inspirational Speech Time - Chapter 31 ago
Jack Hammer - Chapter 32 ago
You're A Healer, Heal Already - Chapter 33 ago
All The Herbs - Chapter 34 ago
Because Doctor Said So - Chapter 35 ago
I Didn't Plan the Number Out - Chapter 36 ago
Breakdown After the Dungeon Crawl - Chapter 37 ago
Someone Finally Gets Some Berries - Chapter 38 ago
Loot Time - Chapter 39 ago
Thats a Nifty Spell - Chapter 40 ago
Momentary Breakdown - Chapter 41 ago
She was Worried - Chapter 42 ago
New Worries for Ace - Chapter 43 ago
A Stats Worth - Chapter 44 ago
Basic Layout for the Second Floor - Chapter 45 ago
Goat Farm - Chapter 46 ago
What About the Hills - Chapter 47 ago
Levels of Knowledge - Chapter 48 ago
Second Floor Monster Placement - Chapter 49 ago
Second Floor Complete - Chapter 50 ago
Eternal Hivemind - Chapter 51 ago
Commanding Limits - Chapter 52 ago
They Noticed - Chapter 53 ago
The Other Founders - Chapter 54 ago
Yes, You Can Leave Jan - Chapter 55 ago
The Start of Ace's Dive - Chapter 56 ago
How to Leave the Dungeon - Chapter 57 ago
Derp Goes the Axebeak - Chapter 58 ago
Should We Turn Back - Chapter 59 ago
Half the Final Encounter - Chapter 60 ago
Climbing the Cliff - Chapter 61 ago
Nice Goat - Chapter 62 ago
Leave the Goat Alone - Chapter 63 ago
He Has a Reason - Chapter 64 ago
Axebeak Redemption - Chapter 65 ago
Why Pre-System Stuff Sucks - Chapter 66 ago
Sammy's Back - Chapter 67 ago
Sammy's Redemption - Chapter 68 ago
Following the Other Wall - Chapter 69 ago
Collecting Runes - Chapter 70 ago
Time and More Runes - Chapter 71 ago
Ten Wolves Enter - Chapter 72 ago
The Wolves Breakthrough - Chapter 73 ago
All the Wolves and Stats - Chapter 74 ago
New Floor, New Monster - Chapter 75 ago
More Mushrooms - Chapter 76 ago
Variable Sprouts - Chapter 77 ago
Cliff Goat Buff - Chapter 78 ago
Just a Little Debt - Chapter 79 ago
Shadow Bag - Chapter 80 ago
Stairs are New, Right? - Chapter 81 ago
Take a Sniff - Chapter 82 ago
Jimmy! - Chapter 83 ago
Lets Keep this to Ourselves - Chapter 84 ago
Everyone Thinks of That Nickname - Chapter 85 ago
I Didn't Mean For That to Happen - Chapter 86 ago
Easy Olive Harvest - Chapter 87 ago
Dead End Room - Chapter 88 ago
Fire Blender - Chapter 89 ago
And Then Spikes - Chapter 90 ago
Daisy's Tarot - Chapter 91 ago
Luck and Plans - Chapter 92 ago
Alchemist Vials - Chapter 93 ago
Golden Cow - Chapter 94 ago
She's Just Kind Of Lonely - Chapter 95 ago
Three Special Potions - Chapter 96 ago
About Godly Skills - Chapter 97 ago
Goat Licks Cow God - Chapter 98 ago
Cattle Pattern Bonanza - Chapter 99 ago
And Now Some Potions - Chapter 100 ago
Some Paths - Chapter 101 ago
And Some More Paths - Chapter 102 ago
Final Stat Description - Chapter 103 ago
Setting Up More Loot - Chapter 104 ago
You Can't Decide - Chapter 105 ago
What Jan Bought - Chapter 106 ago
About Recharge Bonuses - Chapter 107 ago
New Elemental Variant - Chapter 108 ago
So Many Wolves - Chapter 109 ago
What About The Spawned Items - Chapter 110 ago
Making A Box - Chapter 111 ago
Fourth Floor Map - Chapter 112 ago
Figuring It Out On His Own - Chapter 113 ago
The Argument For Bones - Chapter 114 ago
Psionic Horn - Chapter 115 ago
Having Jamie Along Is Practically Cheating - Chapter 116 ago
Potion Observation - Chapter 117 ago
Well That Happened - Chapter 118 ago
Jamie Takes It Hard - Chapter 119 ago
11 Coppers - Chapter 120 ago
A Goat Drops Some Loot - Chapter 121 ago
Oh Look, More Loot - Chapter 122 ago
That Hurt More Than Just Pride - Chapter 123 ago
The Start Of Her Troubles - Chapter 124 ago
The Cost Of A Boss - Chapter 125 ago
Just Let The Kobolds Do It - Chapter 126 ago
And He Wasn't Alone - Chapter 127 ago
Between KZZT and Uthlow - Chapter 128 ago
A Path Not His Own - Chapter 129 ago
Language of Intent - Chapter 130 ago
I Shouldn't Be That Rude - Chapter 131 ago
Where'd The Text Go - Chapter 132 ago
Tiring Fight - Chapter 133 ago
Like A Sphere, Not A Disk - Chapter 134 ago
New Idiots In Town - Chapter 135 ago
Tied Up Like A Holiday Ham - Chapter 136 ago
That Was Quick - Chapter 137 ago
Abusing Restock Rules For Information - Chapter 138 ago
Technically No Slave Collars - Chapter 139 ago
It Is Magic All The Way Down - Chapter 140 ago
Combat Shaping Vs Building - Chapter 141 ago
No Really, The Dungeon Is Tough - Chapter 142 ago
Can You Not Show Up For A Couple Days? - Chapter 143 ago
Hexagon Portal - Chapter 144 ago
Soul Plates - Chapter 145 ago
Almost The God Of Butchers - Chapter 146 ago
Why This But Not That - Chapter 147 ago
Orc In A Suit - Chapter 148 ago
It's Lily! - Chapter 149 ago
Guess What The System Took Away - Chapter 150 ago
Not Much There - Chapter 151 ago
Doyle Worries About His Presence - Chapter 152 ago
Two Spears - Chapter 153 ago
Everyone On The Planet - Chapter 154 ago
Upgrade Pack - Chapter 155 ago
Teleportation Reference - Chapter 156 ago

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Drakilian
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The dialogue is absolutely terrible, consistently goes on for far, far, faaaaaaaaaaaaaaaar too long and is always very skippable (looking at you, cow god sequence that lasted for 10 chapters that contributed literally nothing to the story and the fact that every single dungeon group just won't shut up while delving). Half of every chapter is an info dump and this does not change, ever. The paceing is too slow and the sentence structure is atrocious. Every sentence feels like a runon sentence because of the endless bad dialogue, even if they aren't.

But it's a dungeon core story about a dungeon core being a dungeon core, which is depressingly rare so it'll get a decent rating from me.

Arcanaabscondita#12
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I will preface this with a warning of spoilers, I will try to gloss over a lot, but I mean common its hard not to say anything x3.  
Many of us do not feel many connections to the people around them, personally I can pick up 'friends' like rocks at a beach, they are cool and unique but I will probably never look at them again once I am done with them.  That seems to be similar to the Mc of this novel, an average sort of Joe who just doesn't connect wanting to be left alone working a dead end job in the middle of some town. Nothing about him would ever make it into a history book or even a newspaper if something were to happen. 

Then the world ends. 

With it comes a system that is complex and advanced, and teachers to help people get their bearinngs, this is where most are going to drop the story, in the tutorial because there are info dumps, not as side notes or as author's notes or something that doesn't fit anywhere but the narrator's voice.  no it is in dialogue so you can learn about the character's personality and persective as they ask questions and look about.  This has been putting people out but just hang on, adventure, story, and stats are soon to come!

Without going into too much detail, the class system is amazing and unique, with the system encouraging people to level up skills more than their classes, with paths instead of strict classes, these paths being advanced with points you get from skills and levels? don't quote me on the levels bit. its fun and new to me and I can't wait to see where it goes, with unique paths being available to those who make the right choices. as for the rest of the style of this story? no monster is a grimdark horror, nothing will make you have nightmares, there is a cuteness to the creatures and a focus of farming the adventurer's rather than going out to kill them all, the mc knows what's up. 

Going into the characters themselves? the story focusses heavily on a small group (about thirty) of people once the main character leaves the tutorial, splitting timie between the dungeon's food and his building and development (lets be honest, no one wants to hear about him skill grinding forever and LOTS is going to go on in those first few weeks, would you want to listen to every change that he might make over a day as people keep coming and going? this isn't going to be your dungeon avatar story, the mc probably has no interest in communicating though he won't just let his food die, adapting to help their needs and make them more reliant, showing his devious and naive natures in turn when he gets excited over a change only for his tower of cards to come crashing down. The adventurers themselves and his dungeon fairy need more individuality and you can slowly see it forming as you learn about their pasts and desires, though it could be done a bit better with some more thought into word choice, overall the characters are enjoyable and I can't wait to see more of the two 'botanists'.

The story itself seems to be somewhat thought out, though I am waiting for more time to pass to see if the ripples of various events coalesce to create grand events or if the author is still creating the story board, either way it is bound to be etertaining, I can already see mentions and hints to early events having great reprecussions on the mc and those around him!

as for grammar, sorry I am not much of an english buff, I like to read and see a few mistakes, missing words here and there, but its no less enjoyable to read

PS not sure how legible this will be, for somme reason theletters are white on my white

Scarecro
Overall

Lot's of info, not enough happening. The plot has great potential though.

PaulTB
Overall

This has a slow build up. Yeah, that isn't necessarily a bad thing. But it is a really slow build up. If you aren't a particularly patient type I recommend skipping ahead - Chapter 23 is a good point.

bubbl
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As has been said, this is an eight chapter long info dump. The fist in your face kind. I've read textbooks that are more exciting ~.~ Probably gets better later on, we'll see.

Writing is good though.

Carson6319
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A Dungeon Plan Narratively Laid Out

Reviewed at: She was Worried - Chapter 42

The author, Akhier, has clearly put alot of effort in planning out a dungeon as well a set of rules to constrain its construction. For several readers exploring this plan in a narrative framework I imagine is quite entertaining. That said I could not recommend this work to every one primarily because I dont believe it really has a plot. 

42 Chapters in as of this review Dungeon's Path has yet to present any sort of goal or even adversity. Whilst things do happen they are often semi-detached from the MC and really feel like they are just there to provide a narrative to explain how the dungeon itself would develop. This is not neccesarily a bad thing but something to be aware of.

The work's style is fine and grammar is solid. The characthers do feel like they have some personality and life though they very much seem secondary to the work's actual focus. 

All in all, if you like dungeon builders specificly for the building this is definately for you. Same if you are simply interested in exploring a new 'system'. 

Tim McClain
Overall

short chapters make it seem like individual points are being dragged out, so seems slow to start, though it litterally says this is tutorial and things whould get faster.
has potential but author seems afraid to push ahead for fear of leaving anyone behind, though if reader doesnt understand certiant basics they wouldnt be here reading a dungeon novel.
i would love to come back and update my review once the story really takes off but for now limiting to 3 stars because i feel like a longer chapter covering more than a single point would actually shorten the word count.

Jadensyn
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 This feels like a slow burn dungeon core novel, absolute boatload of setup with a deep dive into the mechanics of the world/system, not a lot to get invested in yet but things are starting to get rolling and it is lookin good.

heres hoping the author can manage to contine to the book and not go into the void like so many others, definitely worth keeping an eye on.

Jade

Felix Helixihare
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Spoiler: Old Review

I have to say that the story is getting more enjoyable post-chapter 10. The grammar is atrocious but tolerable. The paragraph structure certainly needs some tweaks.

The throwaway character parties are a bit too flat. The first party was certainly an enjoyable bunch, and I hope to see them again in story.

Overall, I saw a great improvement.

Adven
Overall

I came here to read about the dungeon and the dungeon core. Building the dungeon and managing it, figuring out stuff about the magic.

I did not however, want to read 10 chapters in a row from the point of view of adventurers. 

So far I've seen only infodumps and long stretches of story with no input from the damn main character.

I am disappointed.