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So the world ended. Whoopsie? We didn’t even see it coming. Quite literally as it came at us faster than the speed of light. Don’t worry though, it got better. Also, I am not joking about the world ending. Most people say that and mean humans are inconvenienced for some reason. Nope, all matter disintegrated at the atomic scale there for a few moments. Apparently the local universe wasn’t actually stable? Don’t ask me to go into too much detail. It would require both of us to have a few more college degrees than sense, and I at least lack them (both the degrees and the sense). Anyway, the energy/matter/wibbly wobbly strings were at a local minimum and not the universal minimum. Basically, what we took for sea level was actually a nice little mountain lake and when the dam busted so did, well, everything.

Now here is where things go a bit off track with what normal meant before. You see magic is real, qi is real, gods are real. Not on old Earth mind you but souls pay little attention to time and space so we dreamed of it. In fact, the closer the shift in reality got to Earth, the closer our dreams got to the new reality. This is basically me tip toeing around the fact that it was a ‘System Apocalypse’. Reality became a video game, I became a dungeon, and this is my story.

Doyle Huxley just wanted a normal life but as the above might clue you in on that just isn’t in the cards. He gets to experience a “Path Based System Apocalypse” and some early paths he takes, both literally and figuratively, lead to him becoming a dungeon.

The aim is to release chapters once a week on Friday.

Cursing will be avoided and no naughty adult action will take place in the story.

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Chapter Name Release Date
So the World Ended - Chapter 1 ago
Just Like Community Service - Chapter 2 ago
His Soul has WiFi Turned Off - Chapter 3 ago
Meeting the Boss - Chapter 4 ago
A Giant Ritual Circle - Chapter 5 ago
Wait, You're Not Insane? - Chapter 6 ago
Dungeon's Tutorial - Chapter 7 ago
What Type are You? - Chapter 8 ago
Starting Monsters and Their Stats - Chapter 9 ago
Calling Mother and then Tech Support - Chapter 10 ago
Dungeon Skills - Chapter 11 ago
Dungeon Territory - Chapter 12 ago
Cubes for Days - Chapter 13 ago
Soul Deep Relaxation - Chapter 14 ago
Making Rooms - Chapter 15 ago
Dungeon Design - Chapter 16 ago
Placing Plants - Chapter 17 ago
Monster Layout - Chapter 18 ago
Opening Up for Business - Chapter 19 ago
A Groups First Dungeon Dive - Chapter 20 ago
Clothes for the Kobolds - Chapter 21 ago
Goat Armor - Chapter 22 ago
Jock in Charge - Chapter 23 ago
That Girl You Hate - Chapter 24 ago
You Can Get A Ne - Chapter 25 ago
Spiky Goat Helmets - Chapter 26 ago
Tale of Two Towns - Chapter 27 ago
Jim Causes A Ruckus - Chapter 28 ago
Artistic Expression - Chapter 29 ago
Path Divergence - Chapter 30 ago
Inspirational Speech Time - Chapter 31 ago
Jack Hammer - Chapter 32 ago
You're A Healer, Heal Already - Chapter 33 ago

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The beginning of this story is relatively slow but quite manageable as far as I'm concerned, though it might be worth expiditing the part about becoming a dungeon.

As of exiting the tutorial stge of the story and establishing as a dungeon proper I can feel the story building up momentum. The set-up of potential invaders and dungeon town politics right outside of the current dungeon is quite interesting and I can see it leading to some interesting conflict. There have been a few adventurers in already in various compositions and with varying motives and I've already gained interest in some of them as well as being entertained by the throw away characters to a suitable extent.

This novel seems to be turning out to be what I call a restrained murder dungeon. Still a lot of advetnurer killing but only to a completely reasonable degree so far instead of being a murder hobo dungeon. It's also one of the creative design dungeon core stories and it tries to make the design and rpg progression of the dungeon structure and abilities interesting and creative. The slow exposition tutorial stage at the beginning of the story seems to be helping out with this dungeon creativity as well, so it wasn't worthless filler at least.

The main character is a partly bland "blank slate" type protagonist with his interesting quirks being unique rpg traits rather his personality as a character, which so far hasn't been too much of a problem for the main focus of the story: dungeon design and messing with adveturers.

Yes there is a dungeon pixie companion, but she seems to be turning out with an interesting backstory at least, one which isn't told through an extra chapter and boring exposition even. She hopefully will end up as a character with depth in the future.

Finally we have the adventurers (and other assorted human characters outside the dungeon) who are largely side characters, throw away characters, antagonists, and side protagonists for the dungeon to spy on. A lot of them are clearly based on archetypes, but their conflicts and politics are enough to make a good dungeon core novel if things continue as they are. As for the dungeon inhabtants they do not yet have character status and the dungeon seems to be developing at a more reasonable pace rather than ballooing into new floors left and right as other dungeon core novels do. This one is going to be a slower paced one, and let things happen in their own time rather than rushing the plot.

It will probably be a good slice of life read as things are.

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Lot's of info, not enough happening. The plot has great potential though.

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 This feels like a slow burn dungeon core novel, absolute boatload of setup with a deep dive into the mechanics of the world/system, not a lot to get invested in yet but things are starting to get rolling and it is lookin good.

heres hoping the author can manage to contine to the book and not go into the void like so many others, definitely worth keeping an eye on.


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This has a slow build up. Yeah, that isn't necessarily a bad thing. But it is a really slow build up. If you aren't a particularly patient type I recommend skipping ahead - Chapter 23 is a good point.

Felix Helixihare
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I have to say that the story is getting more enjoyable post-chapter 10. The grammar is atrocious but tolerable. The paragraph structure certainly needs some tweaks.

The throwaway character parties are a bit too flat. The first party was certainly an enjoyable bunch, and I hope to see them again in story.

Overall, I saw a great improvement.

Royal Butterfly Force
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 I usually have a problem with stories that have too little dialogue, but this story is the complete opposite. Way too much dialogue.

The dungeon fairy spews out paragraph after paragraph of infodumps to the point that i've started skipping the majority of a lot of chapters.

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 This story has great potential and ok grammar. It is still better than half the grammar on this website, and dispite the info-dumpy nature of the story so far, (still in the tutorial after 8 chapters) it just screams great story. If Aurthor can keep up the pace, then this story will stand tall with the best of the fictions on this site. Here's hoping the plot will be as good as the rest of the story.

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As has been said, this is an eight chapter long info dump. The fist in your face kind. I've read textbooks that are more exciting ~.~ Probably gets better later on, we'll see.

Writing is good though.

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Has some charm and a dash of uniqueness to it making for an enjoyable read. If you're into Dungeon Core stories give this one a go.

Mister Bill
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A pretty original take on dungeoncore. A bit slice of life style at the beginning but the pace is really consistent. 

It has lots of dungeon elements and only a couple of segues about parties running the dungeon. I'm current as of chapter 28 and I'm really liking what I see so far. 

Definitely worth a read, especially if you like this sub genre.