Inverted: A Dark Isekai Fantasy Novel

by NojaD

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Psychological Anti-Hero Lead GameLit Grimdark High Fantasy Magic Male Lead Portal Fantasy / Isekai Strategy Supernatural
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A desolate city, a frozen ruin, a relic of the past, were all appropriate descriptions of the place Liam found himself. Where was he? How did he get here? And why was he here? If he wanted answers, his only option was to survive. But how? With no distinct skills, the only thing that set him apart was his bitter past, which had shaped him into the cold, pessimistic and distrustful person he was.

‘So,’ Liam thought, ‘it isn’t any different.’

Starting with nothing wasn’t new for him, and as before, he would forge ahead into this unfamiliar land of abnormalities, monsters, and magic.

Release Schedule (Changed): 1-3 chapters per week. Chapter will be released on Monday/Wednesday/Friday.... Interlude chapters are released on off days as extra chapters (i.e. Tues, Thurs, Sat, and Sun).


A general note: This is my first time writing anything (outside of academic papers). So, there are many things I’m learning and working on improving as the progresses.

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Chevalier_92
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To many unbalanced reviews from people that only read 5 chapters

Reviewed at: Chapter 27: Fire in the Night (3)

Curently at chapter 27

First i will say that the first 2 top reviews are from people that have read only 5 chapters, reading those to reviews will create a bias towards the story, as such i recommand you skip them and read the first 20-25 chapters yourself or read multiple reviews.

The first chapters are indeed just the standard isekai with the addon of a somewhat cold mc. Also the interludes will paint an idea of the background of the side characters without cutting into the standard release rate mind you(realsed in off days), as such you cannot call them filler. The interludes also help with some payback and revenge on those anoying side character and some additioanal info.

At the end of the arc the MC is solo(at chapter 12 he is in the safe zone of the tutorial) and the story turns itself into a decent disadvantage MC, with the MC sheding some of the green of him by chapter 27. I already added a couple of spoilers in so i will stop with the details.

A couple of thing that could have been done better or simply missmatch:

- the MC training should have been better detailed, maybe an interlude from the side of an observer

- i liked the redhead sad you killed her, espeacialy since since you killed her in the early chapters when i started to lose some interest in the story, almoust missed her dieing(when i saw her being carried by the brunnete thought she was still alive)

- the brunette has to much character development as much or even more then the MC

 

So far i like he story, try to focus more on the MC and try to lose the brunnete I believe she and Isabela(liked the way you ended her story) are the reasons most of your audience has such a strong dislike for the first chapters.

Solsgon
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Unrealistic. Not something I recommend without some serious work.

Reviewed at: Chapter 5: Passing the Time

I've read until the very start of chapter 5, and I absolutely cannot recommend this story to anyone. 

 

Grammar:

It's fine. A typo here or there but other than that nothing to complain about.

Story

I can't really comment on it, since by the beginning of chapter five there is no story to comment on. There's been a whole lot of inner monologue/description of thoughts, but nothing has actually happened except one unremarkable violent encounter. As such, I'll give it the benefit of the doubt and give it a neutral score.

Style:

Again, a neutral score. The way the scenery and non-dialogue are written isn't what I would call smooth or particularly pleasant to read; it's choppy at times and doesn't flow very well. Other than that, it's readable and sufficient to tell an interesting story.

Character(s):

God-awful. I don't mean to be insulting towards the author, and he/she shouldn't be discouraged from writing, but the dialogue in this story feels like the author has never had a real conversation. Now perhaps there's an explanation for that (Maybe they're young, maybe they're not a native speaker, maybe they just don't like the way normal conversations usually go and prefers to have this kind of conversation...) but the result is an abysmal score simply because none of the characters are likeable in any way, and none of them act like remotely normal people except for Alexandra, Erika and maybe Dan (Although Dan seems to be relatively normal in personality, he's an EMT that thinks fighting a two-headed dog is less dangerous than trying to climb over a wall and his justifications for this opinion are moronic.)
Alexandra and Erika seem normal enough and not too dumb (although they speak like anime characters to a certain extent), but that might just be because they haven't actually done or said much so far.

I am all for artistic liberty, exaggeration for drama, suspension of disbelief etc. but it just goes too far. None of the characters seem panicked or even disbelieving of their situation, most of them act like dipshits, spoiled brats or worse for no reason, and no one calls them out on it.
Example: The group is voting on fighting the dog Vs climbing the wall. Even if you ignore the ridiculous, over-the-top, anime-style attitude that Claire exhibits that makes no sense whatsoever, there's still Isabelle. Isabelle votes to fight the dog, but when it comes to actually putting the plan into action she does nothing.

The MC, despite his rule of "not wanting to stand out" etc. or any of the other characters should have been smart enough and have enough self-respect to go "If you vote to fight, you gotta fight. If Isabelle and Claire vote to fight while the MC vote not to, they have to take an equal/more active role in it than he does". But no, nobody says anything while Isabelle stays behind and does nothing.

Then, when the fight is over, when two people have been wounded by the dogs and Dan asks for the jacket back from Isabelle and she refuses, no one does what they should do (Simply ordering her to give it up and smacking her before taking the jacket back if she refuses) except Claire who looks like she's about to but then drops it without a single word (completely out of character by the way) when Alexandra and Erika volunteer their own sweater.

Final comments:

Again, I don't mean to shit all over the author and their work, they definitely should keep writing because others do enjoy the story and my opinion is just one of many, but I really think they should rewrite the whole beginning of the story because it's a total turnoff for any new readers.

franktop
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More realistic than people think

Reviewed at: Chapter 10: Inside the Castle

Firstly, in my opinion the story is very well written. I haven't noticed any grammar errors (maybe a typo once or twice). I agree the story starts off slow but that isn't a negative in my view.

The major issue people seem to have is with the "annoying" characters and while I can't stand some of them, it would be foolish to think these types of people don't exist. I'm sure everyone reading this story has met people like the characters in real life.

What the author does well is giving the readers the back story of some of the characters. Once you read how they justify their actions it gives a sense of realism to them. You might not like how they act but at least it's consistent with their world view.

Overall this makes for a great story that I highly recommend.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

lightnoveleater
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Okay at the start very enjoyable now

Reviewed at: Chapter 27: Fire in the Night (3)

It goes from last man standing horror survival to self-improvement and progress, albeit still in a challenging environment. I enjoy the latter more so I am glad I continued reading it.

Atreivahavi
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Inverted: A "REALISTIC" Dark IsekaI Fantasy Novel

Reviewed at: Chapter 19: The Stench of Sweat and Blood

Well, the story's name mostly explains itself but let me give you a quick rundown about the story.

 

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

The story is fairly new so I will edit this review later on. In my opinion you should give it a chance.

Lord Soul
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A very real approach to isekai

Reviewed at: Chapter 15: Abandoned

As of chapter 15 : the story is moving in a very realistic and grim direction.
If you are somebody that likes reading isekai , but finds them too unrealistic this story is for you.

Tthe development of the MC is superb , with all interactions being explored to give  sufficient depth to the other characters.The MC not being a stuck  up idiot with a hero complex helps as well.

As far as grammar goes ,i couldnt find any obvious errors.

The world building soo far, is done somewhat adequately, But much of the outside world is still a mystery, but is done enough to give a picture of the current location of our MC.Hope it'll fill up it goes.


I have to say this is quite an excellent find on RL, and hope it stays that way =3

Normack16
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Disconnect from MC to enjoy, if not? You're gonna have a bad time.

Reviewed at: Chapter 5: Passing the Time

Was able to stick through to chapter 5 before dropping the story. Our MC describes himself as someone who lives by only four rules, with one of those rules being "don't make friends" then get upset a few paragraphs later as the SYSTEM describes him as to be cool and distant.

Either embrace the character you created or make them different from the get go.

The few "companions" he has at the first chapter reach levels of insufferable not seen since Jeoffy in GoT, and yet our "anti social, make no friends" MC doesn't call out the behavior that could get his entire group killed. Not long after that, he's joking around and playing with the conveniently attractive annoying one who not an hour prior almost let multiple people get ripped apart by mutated dogs.

Overall, grammer is fine, style is average, story type has potential, MC and "friends" are dog shit.

todd
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A bit excessive at the start, improves over time

Reviewed at: Chapter 23: The Hunter and the Hunted (3)

I always hesitate a bit with the anti-hero tag. Not because I don't enjoy their stories, but because they tend to either be great or go overboard with the edge. Fortunately, while this one starts a little shaky, the story smooths out until it's downright enjoyable by chapter 23. The teeters between unnecessarily cruel and decent if antisocial, with the starting cast being excessively unlikeable. After the intro though, the side characters move towards more reasonable depictions and the MC manages to work with a few of them. Another aspect in favor of this story is that the MC starts off relatively underpowered and slowly works to improve his stats and skills (no leveling on skills). Not to mention that it's nice to see a stealthy backline fighter for once. Not every protagonist needs to run towards danger with a sharp stick.

The writing itself flows well with few grammar or spelling issues, at least, if I noticed any they didn't stand out enough for me to remember them. The world itself is interesting, dark, and cruel, with summoned heroes being treated as useful mercenaries by the Association. It fits the aesthetic well, in addition to the bloody and dangerous fighting that even relatively low-risk creatures provide. Most of all though, the MC's selfish perspective on survival makes sense given the dangers and complete disregard of the natives for their well-being. One review argued that he intentionally left Isabelle to die, which in fairness he did hope for, but she was already stuck when he discovered the barrier. The only issue that stuck out to me was in chapter 23 when Claire shows up asking for help since presumably, they were hunting something worth coin and another team might want to take on the weakened target for the reward.

Otherwise, the world gels well with the dark perspective and the MC isn't so far gone that he can't interact normally with other characters. I hope that the author keeps the protagonist as a more self-interested mercenary personality and avoids the edgy antisocial trap of a trope, and until this point, they've been toeing the line relatively well. I'd recommend the story as it is, especially since it seems to be improving with only a bit over twenty chapters down. I look forward to seeing what the author makes of the world.

Jacksonion Democracy
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I'm at the lastest chapter (Ch.25 currently)

First off - if you are used to pyschopath MC's who kill irritants within seconds of being dropped in a new world you won't like this story. If you are used to instant power up MC's where they get OP quickly and rarely struggle, you won't like this story. There will be characters that piss you off, and if you can't handle their presence in the story for a few chapters then you won't like this story.

 

This story is a legitimate realistic take on a grim-dark isekai. There are likeable characters in this story who you want to play some CoD with, and there are characters you want to falcon punch in the throat. MC is pretty cold, but isn't someone who murders others no problem and he has his own principles (which make sense, just think about them when he makes decisions you think contradict them as up to this point they are easily justified). I have not seen any issues with the grammar, and the flow is good. The only complaint I have so far is that the Author has a talent in writing irritating characters who make you want to force liquid sandpaper down their throats to shut them up. This is a good story (especially considering this is the Author's first attempt at story writing), and while it has some issues such as continous irritating situations it's enjoyable to read. I recommend giving it a shot, and when you encounter annoying characters who you can't stand - take heart, most of them die. Can't win them all.

xcares
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It's still early to really review but.... it's been very good so far.
Really interesting use of the multiple POVs. Especially with people that end up dead XD