Fire and Blood

by Cordamo

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Fantasy Female Lead High Fantasy Non-Human lead Reincarnation Strong Lead
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There are a lot of stories about people reborn into a fantasy world but most such individuals seem to be young, inexperienced and forced to start from the bottom up. But who attempts to summon a nobody, expending vast magical power to do so?

What if there is an effort to summon a champion of the celestial host and strip them of their free will, binding them by their True Names only to be foiled as they vacate themselves to follow possession by another? What if the one summoned from something approximating our own world is a veteran in her thirties who now finds herself in a form alien, powerful, but far from invulnerable?

It involves a whole lot of fire.

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ColdSteel
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Believable character.  Some small spelling errors, beg instead of bag for examplet, but nothing that detracts.

 

Grammer is well constructed and the story flows.  The main character is certainly overpowered as an angel, but deals realistically with being placed in another world.  

 

Worth the time to read, if only at chapter 12 as of the review.  

messschieber
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Overall a very interesting start of the story, mainly because of the somewhat unique setting: the main character is an angel, really tall and some kind of war veteran. However the story starts of with rather sparse exposition and the reader knows very little about the mc for a long time. The personality of the mc also isn't really memorable. She doesn't voice any interesting thoughts or statements and just goes with the flow. 
However the general setup with the mcs uncertain standing as an angel in the religous world and the conflict between the two known nations, is quite intriguing. 
Now to the main point of critique: the grammar. I only gave it two stars because it got a bit better in recent chapters. Especially in the first couple it is so bad that it gets almost hard to understand what is actually going on. The structure of many sentences is plain wrong, commas are missing, common english expressions are mangeld and distracting spelling mistakes are made. The author should really get someone to proofread the chapters and should think about revising the first couple chapters as this really can be quite the turnoff for a lot of people from an otherwise decent story.

Jadensyn
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I have read many, many stories that start off in a similar way, some good, most bad, this one i am unsure of, it starts rather abruptly, with very little background and a few glaring inconsistencies (marble does not melt, it burns and degrades, pending magic fudgery) BUT, the writing is solid, the world while not original seems interesting in the fantasy medieval style and as of chap 7, is shaping up quite nicely.

could use a grammar/spell sweep but nothing that takes away from the story overmuch, i see it developing into quite the read, i am looking forward to seeing how it progresses.

Keep up the good work.

Jade