Anathum: Quest for the End

by Consolidate

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Fantasy Dungeon LitRPG Magic Supernatural
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As you wake up with no memories of your past, you are thrown into a world that defies all logic, will you be bested like all the others? Or will you...

Anathum is a massive universe that is governed by a mysterious System, within this world, Damien must grow stronger in order to uncover the true purpose of the game everyone is forced to play.

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I've always wanted to create a litrpg since I first started reading them a few years ago and today I decided what the hell, any feedback is graciously welcomed. I will try to do daily updates (I feel that if I put that into writing I will be forced to do it!)

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Delta00
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Really good litRPG so far

Reviewed at: 6. Training

I enjoy the story, and the litRPG is phenomenal imo but I feel there are a couple issues. 

For starters, we don't know the name of anyone other than our protagonist. Even if all the characters shown so far are minor and have no role they just feel hollow if they aren't named or introduced and almost feels as if they weren't there(for me anyway). It feels like early on, one good opportunity for dialogue and introducing characters was ignored and replaced with the acknowledgement that a conversation happened. 

Though the story is just started so I hope it improves with time. This is all just my opinion and I know nothing about writing so take this with a grain of salt. 

 

Droy17
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Lots of potential

Reviewed at: 6. Training

Damn, this was good I was skeptical at first but IAM hook now. There's some grammatical err but you can ignore those and still read. There's not much to characters but the mc personality is to my liking. And I think the story is intersting. 

Read it lads.

th30dor
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Bad grammar makes it hard to read

Reviewed at: 1. Welcome to a New World

Bad grammar, weird wording and confusing PoV changes are holding this novel back.

It's hard to get into the story when one has difficulties reading and understanding what is going on. 

The novel needs a round with an editor or a grammar tool.

gaparas145
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So this story starts off pretty much like the summary explains, and a sort of death game begins. There is plenty of things that can be done with this type of setup, and when you couple that with the underlying mystery of where these people are coming there or why, you get an interesting premise.

There hasn't been a lot of character development, but I think there's been some foundation built for a solid character. Just needs delivery.

Pretty interesting so far, definitely am going to keep reading.

Shady2163
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I know that this word gets used a lot in reviews but this story has real potential to go anywhere. The way this story is set up is so that there's an unknown number of level to go through, each with a world to explore and a test to pass. 

Right now we are stuck on the test for the first level so we haven't had the chance to explore those worlds aside from what characters have told us, I'll reserve my judgment on how these things will be flesh out.

One thing that was particularly good to me is how the main character is written. He is serious enough that I have no worries he will get a palpable goal to work towards. Doesn't hurt that a mystery is unveiling around him with the system. The way he studies people as he talks and observes them is pretty cool, he actually feels smart and deliberate in his actions.

Grammar is what you would expect from daily releases, an occasional typo or missed word can be found. Nothing too big.

Overall 5/5! I can't wait to read more.

Noah strand
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Has potential, BUT

Reviewed at: 2. Level 0

 

I couldn't get past the second chapter. The sentences are way too long and are tough to read. The author doesn't really undertsand when, or how commas are used.

The MC is alright. There's nothing really interesting about him. This story has potential, but it doesn't give you a reason to keep reading. There are better stories on this website. I would ignore this story for now. 

drengoa night
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Quite a good start here, there are only some minor things that hold it back. I am not a big fan of slower paced novels that have extra fluff in them, however we have a nice balance here so far and no repetitive sentencing, so that's a win. I would like to see some fleshing out on characters and more definitive advancements towards either a lone wolf style character or a team built story. All in all it is an excellent start and I am hoping for much much more to come out over time.

DragonZypher
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I really hope this doesn't get abandoned

Reviewed at: 21. Raging Fire

So far this has been an excellent litrpg adventure.  I've enjoyed following the MC from his initial introduction to the world, with all the confusion that went with it.  I'm enjoying the ever increasing plot lines and secret quests.  The MC falls just short of plot hole armor and being OP that makes this so fun to read.  Its been a few weeks since the last update and I really hope this story doesn't get abandoned.