Parasitic Sword Monarch.
Cultivators rule the multiverse, this is an indisputable fact, their ability to control the various elements and concepts grant the mightiest among them the right to stand tall above creation, dominating man and beast alike. Countless legends and mighty figures are spread throughout the multiverse, but none of this matters to the young boy born into a slowly declining clan in one of the larger universes. To him, all that matters is the safety of his clan and his family members, to reach that end, he would even wield the world itself as his sword and point the tip right at the throat of the heavens.
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I've been trying to get past the prologue for a week, but I read a paragraph and I know what's going to happen in the future, I see the structure of the story and I see how it's going to develop, following generic tropes with a twist.
Sentence structure and author wordchoice is by far the worst, it's like descriptions from a 10 yearold child. My mental imaging if I just use his words as a guide picture me such a generic sketch, not even a full picture, >>to the west this, to the east that, orderly city, you would think it would be an opulent city but it's.. (based on what? on assumptions based on previous xianxia reading?)
The Universe composition is without imagination too, 6 dominions, on the southermost dominion , on the third biggest planet, in the easternmost province of 18 provinces, and located at the eastern end of the province is the city of the Lang clan.--> So, the Universe (supposedly part of the MULTIVERSE) is orderly composed of these parts, without any differentiation, purely numerical. This doesn't create a sense of Vastness or wonder or anything whatsoever, this is just exposition for the sake of it. We as readers, would be better served spawning in the mind of the MC lacking any background and any knowledge of anything at all about this Universe, maybe with a few hints to create a sense of mistery or just stay local until the big picture is relevant, then, draw a good picture, this sketch of the Universe and planet is what a 3 year old boy that just wants to run would dump on his mom by teacher orders afterschool.
Then, Demonic beasts that can control of the elements (some, prob), ohh the tropes, and the blandness, anything but an elemental system! anything at all would be better, a tribe of dickslingers laser bwois would be better, even an ancient whatever whatever ruins whatever would be better. Anyways, it may be just me that's tired of the same repeated ad nauseum without twists.
I may have mischaracterized this story since I've read so little, but at this point, after wadding throught the prologue I find it matters little.
Having written 6 or more novels, I would expect the author to be capable enought to describe basic things like a city, or anything in the prologue really, but he is probably too muddled by xianxia tropes to be able to. I get it, if I was able to turn my mind of like I did in the past I would've probably been able to read this and like the little twists author probably has later on over the generic templates. Sorry can't turn of, it's better this way.
At some point, when I amass a great amount of Willpower I may come back to read more and will change this, acordingly.
Just for reference the world has a 43 kilometre circumference and the city is half a million kilometres wide????
Edit as of Chapter 32: The grammar continues to improve and the the story brought some of the characters into clear focus and gave them a few moments to shine, moments I really appreciated so I altered my score in response.
So far so good.
There is room for grammatical growth in small errors and sentence structure, while also the prose can be sometimes wonky but that part seems to have been improving as the chapters went along.
The story is in my preference zone so I might be biased but it's a great start to the story with good levels of future proofed world building in both the actual world itself and the cultivation and culture within. The main storyline itself is intriguing and the events are sometimes unexpected in a good way due to it sometimes avoiding the more 'trying' tropes.
The characters so far can be said to be a bit more underdeveloped compared to the world due to both how the events play out and the time skips but they're there and there are sufficient instances of their unique aspects to keep me entertained and looking forward to their growth.
Parasitic Sword Monarch, this is Shiranui's 5th proper book (excluding the Wandering Mage and the others under 300 pages) and like the other 4, it is set in the same big multiverse. So far it has looked really good and the world is quite well described.
The premise is different, but same. Unlike the others, the MC of this story starts in quite a strong Clan (compared to the others) it seems and it looks quite good.
The plot has only just started to kick off. As per my habit with Shiranui's stuff, proper advanced review will drop at ~50 and get updated every 50 chapters hence forth.
I like the story idea, kid trained by OP elders in the way of the sword, having 2 sisters theyr interactions are solid, time skips were good and skipped most of his 3-20 years period.
But the execution and use of words is like google translated novel i went with it for 30 chapters but it gets way too cringy.
So when his parents died he goes full chinese kowtowing to everyone and usual chinese cliches.
And here comes the basic thinking that we see : His sword is his soul and by that it means his soul is his sword so his sword that is his soul is best at cutting souls, but even so that soul is his sword and sword his soul he can absorb other elements into his sword that is his soul and so his soul that is his sword grows.
Like wtf stop repeating stuff another example :
He took his wine gourd and put it on the ground taking wine glass then picking wine gourd to pour wine into wine glass then putting wine gourd down and drinking wine from wine glass.
Thats just annoying !
Im pretty sure its worth a skim thro just for the good parts but thats like 5-10% of each chapter so idk, maby a eddit, deleting unnecessary words and itl be good.
Auther was going a long normally enough, but then out of no where decided to cram some SJW BS in your face for some reason.
Good otherwise though, if a bit of a slow start.