Star wars: Selfish virtue.

by greed128

Fan Fiction ONGOING Action Adventure Sci-fi Anti-Hero Lead Male Lead Portal Fantasy / Isekai Space Opera Strong Lead
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''He's broken, are you sure this is a good idea?''

''It's gonna be alright, it'll become a different timeline. I will supply the power for it myself, wont cost you anything and you can watch it play out with me.''

''If you're sure dear, the last time we did this it didn't turn out so good for the world though.''

''It's gonna be fine! ...Probably.''


A man yanked out of our world is put into another one on the whims of beings out of his comprehension or knowledge. 

Journey with him as he tries for the things that were ever out of his reach in his last life, enjoyment, fullfillment, happiness... and maybe even love.


This is my first time writing anything. I'll be taking it as a learning experience, though obviously i'd hope that people enjoy it.

When you find something to critizise, and you will. I atleast hope you'll word it in a way that's constructive so i could remedy and/or learn from it.

Enjoy.

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Let me start this off by saying two things: First off, this review is as of chapter 3, and will probably be updated as the story progresses, assuming it isn't dropped.

Secondly, thus far it's a fairly standard self-insert wish fulfillment Star Wars story, and for that it's going to start off with a rather low score in my book. HOWEVER: This does not necessarily mean it's a bad story. In fact, I'll be following it for a good while.

This is because, at chapter 3, it's hard to know which direction this story will go. Maybe it'll be a steaming pile of crap, or maybe it'll be on par with the Original Trilogy, quality-wise.

Maybe we'll get a really great story where the MC tries desperately to keep the galaxy from shattering into war and madness, bringing its own unique trials

Maybe their next stop will be Kamino, where they'll take command of the clone army, cure their accellerated aging, and give them better equipment and training, to use as a policing force and, more importantly, integrate them into a society where they can live fulfilling lives.

Maybe droids will be freed from their compulsions, no longer considered second-class citizens (or non-citizens entirely).

Maybe the Yuzan-Vhong will make an appearance as the Big Bad Evil Guys, or maybe the Sith will experience a resurgence and tear down everything the MC is trying to build.

Or maybe, just maybe, none of the above will happen, and this story will devolve into insignificance and poor writing like so very many before it.

I know what I'm hoping for, at least.

I guess we'll wait and see.