Evil Overlord: The Makening

by NotGodot

Original ONGOING Comedy Fantasy Satire Magic Male Lead Villainous Lead

If evil was easy, everybody would be doing it, and there would be more Dark Lords running around than you could shake a stick at. But the road to Utter Domination isn't easy, smooth or straight, as the boy who will one day become Gar the Pitiless will discover.

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As an Ovallord of Evil, I approve

Reviewed at: Chapter Seventeen: Did You Piss Blood?

A fresh and good story from the perspective of an evil overlord, I mean what do you want more from this. 

Characters are interesting pieces of work, especially the MC. We tag along for his journey of failures, misfortunes and triumphs and see how he became an evil overlord. 

Grammar is immensely good and so is story progression. 

For the style, it is a good mix of dark fantasy and comedy. 

I hope you dear reader, would enjoy this villainous story as much as I do. 

Jefferymoonworm
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Delightfully fresh dark fantasy comedy!

Reviewed at: Chapter Six: I Know What You're Thinking

A brilliant start to a new series.

So far, we've been introduced to our future (and suposed) dark lord and taken through the first few years of his life. A few stories have done the whole comedic story about a dark lord's rise, but so far this is my favourite. Our evil overlord is not destined for his eventual rule, nor does he have a inborn skill or apetite for domination. While cunning with very lose morals (and a bit murderous, understandable considering his family), our main character doesn't set out to become an evil overlord, that just seems to be where he ended up in life, he is honestly a little bit pathetic. And it's hilarious (for all of you out there that don't like it when a character starts out like this, do not worry, there's still plenty of murder planning and cunning). This is defiently one of the funnier stories on royal road.

The narrator is our main character telling us the story of his uprising, as well as giving us some advice about how to start our own dark reign. This type of narration would normally annoy me, but here it is great and use for great comedic effect. There's a hilarious bluntness and honesty to how the relavtively dark elements are presented. The story isn't afraid to make the main character the butt of the joke, surprisingly rare in a lot of comedy stories, which gives a lot of fresh jokes and funny moments that aren't just characters dishing out snark as is often the case.

The prose and grammar are aboslutely pefect. This is the kind of writting level and pose I would expect from a published book, so I sincerly hope it becomes more popular (so stop reading this review and go read it, random reader!)

As of writting this, only a few chapters are out, so this review will probaly change later and its clear the author will keep posting (please do, Mr Author!).

 

 

Nomad1791
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Mc is good, people are actually believable, the way they talk isn't robotic or forced as ether too good or too ass-holish. It's a rare find and a good mix I like this story give it a shot. 

Skollseye
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While the story can be quite funny at times, other reviews gave me the impression it was a comedy. It's not, it's quite serious actually. But it's not the grim setting I'm use to - I mean sure bad and awful stuff happens all the time but the people of this world are just kind of use to it? The evil of their world is just a fact of life, and they treat it as such. It's a fairly dark yet charming setting that puts a lot of effort into understanding the mindsets of the people in it. There's something not off-putting about someone being an a**hole when literally everyone is an a**hole. I just didn't realize there was so many flavors of a**holery.

But the real kicker is the narrative style and storytelling techniques. Everything is woven together by the web of Utter Domination - the story of how our villain came to be an Evil Overlord. Everything feels well-thought out and intentional, and the pacing is perfectly in tune with the development of Gar. The excerpts at the beginning of each chapter are definitely worth the read (I've seen this technique used before to lesser effect, the way it's written here is just so much more informal yet much more relevant to the chapter).

Good chapter length, release schedule so far is good, and there's enough to look forward to that I plan to wait for the next chapter to come out.

EdwinJ
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A very fun and compelling "memoir" of THE Evil Overlord

Reviewed at: Chapter Fifteen: My Ax is Sharp Now

This is pure genius. The way this novel is structured, the pacing the author chose, along with the tidbits of information the narrator throws the reader once in a while is well done.

The author chose to tell his story through a subjective point fo view, that of the main character, Gar, reminiscing about his, albeit random, rise to overlordship. The novel is, therefore, a "memoir", in the words of the main character itself.

The author doesn't shy away from using his narrator to make fun of and ridicule the main character. The narrator, Gar the Pitiless, tries to keep the reader entertained, skimming over details like:

Spoiler: Spoiler

 By skimming over, I mean giving the reader the most important details along with the thoughts of current Gar.

 

The main character doesn't set out on a journey at first, his only objective being that of survival. The rise to evil is just a byproduct of his choices, choices that progressively get more and more immoral, in line with his continuously evolving personality.

 

Gar the Pitiless, the Gar that is reminiscing as a narrator tries to teach the reader about the proper ways of Utter Dominance, as he likes to call it in the form of random advice at the beginning of every chapter, tidbits of information spread across the paragraphs.

 

 

Overall, I think that this novel is not a waste of time, is truly enjoyable and although you do need to get over the fact that the main character is and is going to continue doing amoral things this should be expected, after all, you are reading a book called Evil Overlord: The Makening.

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BY THE GODS ALL HAIL THE OVERLORD!

Reviewed at: Chapter Eighteen: Slaves or Soup

This story is different is good way. I like the flaws in the charcter and the ordeals the great overlord finds himself in. When life give you lemons you make lemoande and when life gives you a lemon tree you make a Whole Wheat Lemon Chia Seed Yogurt Cake for the fam. I reccamend reading this if you want to try something a bit different and fresh. This story is a fun read. 

GoldenredDragon
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I've been thoroughly enjoying reading new chapters as they come out. This is high quality writing, with hilarious dialogue and situations. I imagine the narrator narrating with this deadpan tone and it's even better. Anyway, would recommend. Will probably restart at some point just for more giggles.

 

Also catapult is amazing.

Scott Fenton
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I have been enjoying the story 14 chapters in. I have high hopes for this story from what I have read so far. 

Comedy in general is difficult to write, and comedy in fantasy exceptionally so. The comedy in "Evil Overlord: The Makening" is both lowkey and clever. Most stories that try to be funny end up forcing it. An advantage that this story has going for it is the main storyline is also interesting. The "evil overlord" angle feels additive, rather than hackneyed. 

The main character, Gar, is a laidback person. It complements the comedic aspect of the story, and makes the death and destruction more believable. One common complaint from "serious" fantasy novels is about how quickly the main character gets over killing people, or doing other immoral acts to survive. Lucky the tone and style of the story make it easy to ignore such aspects of the story. 

The interactions between Gar and the demon is well developed. The author has done a great job with devloping secondary characters and giving them compelling backstories or motivations. You don't really see any 2 demensional characters unless the author intended for them to be that way. 

With the format of the story, it has a lot of room to transition from serious moments to slice of life moments. Right now I can see myself enjoying the laid back nature of the story, and seeing Gar become a man and find his meaning in life. I can also see myself enjoying if the story added more serious elements and Gar develops into a person that takes action and makes the world a "better place".

The conceit of a story like this is that Gar is "evil" when he is actually the hero. From what we saw from the first chapter, the world is not a good place to live in. Even more so after getting a glimpse of the greater world Gar inhabits. There are a lot of different directions that this story can take, and it with the quality seen so far, it is exciting to think how everything develops. 

 

Killer_Whale
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The evil overlord story I didn't know I needed.

Reviewed at: Chapter Fifteen: My Ax is Sharp Now
Spoiler: Spoiler

 This story is the anti-hero's journey.

Blorgh the muppet
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there is a reason its rated this well, Its hilarious, simple as that and it doesnt need anymore than that. Read it and youll find youll agree with me.

it has ofcourse tons more, but you want an enticement to read not an explanation. now stop reading here ffs i was done after the first sentence why are you still wasting your time with the rest of this drivel? also somebody spam the author for a patreon to be set up, didnt think he read mine