The Broken System: What Bred the KING

by Aree Edan

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Tragedy High Fantasy Magic Male Lead Non-Human lead Reincarnation Ruling Class School Life Strategy War and Military
Warning This fiction contains:
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Kinoya an ordinary research fellow, was bitten by a genetically modified spider. Did he become next SPIDERMAN?

Of course, NO. He died just to become an object of research himself. Being a fascinating subject, he was researched extensively and he had died again but not until he killed them all.

He got a loving family on the next time he woke up. A Gift? Of course No. His family was devastated in front of very eyes and he was sold as Sex SLAVE. What should he do? Of course, Kill them all.

And then

[Ceremony successful…

Tribute accepted…

Connecting the soul...]

[Connecting to the world…

Activating the system…

Error...

Modifying…

Connecting to the system…

Error...]

[THE BROKEN SYSTEM activated.]

He had no intention but the destiny had chosen him. Willing or not he was led to the path of KING armed with a broken system. BUT ascendancy and demise are the two side of the same coin...

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue ago
The Unsuccessful Project ago
Even I don't deserve this much happiness ago
Price of Happiness ago
Is this a life?! ago
The Broken System ago
The New Beginning ago
First Battle ago
The Apprentice General ago
The new era ago
One lucky day!! ago
12. A boy dyed in red... ago
13. Army recruitment ago
14. Infantry training begins ago
15. The System is BROKEN!? ago
16. [Intermediate Sword Mastery]!? Really!? ago
17. Enemies, fated to meet ago
18. The Vanguard ago
19. Victory on the first day ago
20. The Warm and Cold Feelings ago
21. Lost!!! ago
22. The Plan ago
23. The Counterattack ago
24. Lost again ago
25. The Awakening ago
26. Rewards ago
27. New Troop ago
28. Atrocity... ago
29. The Punishment ago
30. The Vishnugupta ago
31. Underestimating the enemy ago
32. Fighting a magic knight. ago
33. The Conclusion ago
34. Generation Purge ago
35. A price to pay ago
36. Determination ago
37. A Devil indeed ago
38. A moment before war ago
39. Hand-dipped in blood ago
40. The stage is set ago
41. Unexpected Visitor ago
42. Winning war ago
43. the Bitter Truth ago
44. Unexpected reward ago
45. Nus & Fret ago
46. Especially, if it is you ago
47. Failed attack ago
48. [Magic Perception] ago
49. I don't understand you ago

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rahul1307
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A story worth reading

Reviewed at: 26. Rewards

Though still too early to say for sure, here are a few important points.

Pros:

1. what I like most about the book is the character development. The thing (though there are three) inside him is OP for sure, yet the MC couldn't tap into its power. That is more like his last resort and once he did he had to start up new. So he has to strive to make himself stronger. He had many hidden stat but he trains harder than others.

2. Well planed story: it was not like the author talked about a character and he comes to fight at the next. Rather the charters have been introduced long before they have appeared (moon general and Akai). Yet the story doesn't go as MC had already planned to create an unexpected situation for him.

3. the side character: Mc had arrived when the war is changing from the battle of personal strength to strategy. but it was not the mc who is driving the strength rather, it is moon general, west general even Nus (An enemy character.). MC even taught strategy to other people.

4.Good flow: One thing I like most is the flow of the story. the pace is just perfect. not like one fight is going too long nor ended without struggles (Though first few chapters are like that). From chapter 7 or 8, it seemed the author had found his rhythm.

Cons.

1. the biggest problem is the first few chapters. One has to read carefully to understand. I felt that those incidents of past help to shape his character. My verdict is to try until chapter 20 if you don't like it then just give up.

2. The author left loose ends here and there. Though I don't know much about the military I like reading about it. And I kind of agree with Gerald (Though a rating of 0.5 is not justified). but whether it is the badge or the son of a senior army officer, that wouldn't have happened in reality and it is fantasy after all. I would have liked to learn about the training under the old man.

3. the author had given up on the story once. 

 

I will update again.

 

Ok, for those who are interested, there is a book called 'The Broken system' in QI. it is the same book but stopped at chapter 40. you can read it through many minor details have been changed in the new version.

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The story was good but only if you're not looking for mistakes. The MC is a bit OP (I mean, the thing inside him). It would be better if the story includes the short battle scene rather than saying "kill them" everytime they encounter a crisis... And after saying "kill them"... then that's it, everyone dead,.. chapter is done.

Speaking of military, they're all well-trained... And of course, as a soldier, they have their pride, and only rank power can control them. But sadly, they recognized the kid commands as their... General? just because of the badge?  Really?? 

Imagine if you're a soldier in a middle of terrorist attack then some random unknown kid started shouting some nonsense, trying to make your whole team to follow his orders??? Seriously? Even though he got a badge from the recruitment doesn't mean they have to obey the kid, he's just an unexperience one(in the eye of military) vs a well-trained soldier! It's exaggerated man...

And age really matters in term of experience if you ask those military officers in the chaos. It's one sided dude. What if some capable soldier says, "get that kid, he's a theft, get the badge... I'll rather command my peers than to listen on some unknown child gibberish

Maybe, it is more reasonable if it's an adult son of some well known military noble general.