Bookworld Online: Marsh Man
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Welcome dear friends, to the Virtual Reality Full Immersion System called Bookworld Online!
Your name is David Drake and you are a 10 year old slave to the Marsh Hag. You were bought from your parents when you were only a small child at two years old. You don't really remember your old family at all. That's a good thing, since you would hate them on sight for selling you to her. All you've know for your whole life is pain. You are usually quickly healed and receive a lot of training and experience as her unofficial apprentice.
It's unofficial because she would never pay to have you registered as an actual apprentice. To everyone else, you are just the boy she took pity on and brought into her home. What they don't know is that you are much more than that. So much more.
You are her food. She uses you as her own personal buffet and she indulges herself quite often. You even have the permanent scars to prove it. You have learned many things from her, mostly without her knowing, since you have been helping more and more with her spell work the last few years and her potion making. The only parts you can't do are the magic condensing rituals that her potions require and the mana infusions that a lot of her other creations need.
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Please Note: I publish daily.Second Note: I changed this story to a fan fiction. It is based on Swamp Boy. The old story is about 4 years old and was dropped after 19 long chapters. The author hasn't been online since then, so I figured it was safe to do my own take on it.
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I just could not continue after Chapter 200.
The second arc changes in style so much from the beginning, and practically all females the MC comes across want to have sex with him, plus he became too knowledgeable too fast imo.
First arc 4 1/2 stars, second arc 1 star.
Don't let the tags fool you. This story is hard-core. It starts by tricking you into thinking this is slice of life, but this is as grimdark as it can get. Extreme psychological abuse, some of the most fcked up torture, child abuse, and a hint of pedophilia. Reader be warned.
We read about the experiences of a 10 year old boy who is held prisoner by a swamp witch, The Hag.
The story is about some very deep dive VR game or experience the main character is living. The prologue introduces us to it. And here comes one the first gripes with the plot. Its not clear who the person who went under is. Is it the narrator, who tells the story, or is it the boy, who lives it. There are a lot of inconsistencies here, especially when it comes to the knowledge possessed. Sometimes, the boy behaves and has the knowledge of a 10 year old child. Other times, he has the knowledge of an adult who is experiencing the story.
I mentioned earlier a narrator. His presence is felt via a set of choices the main character is presented with. And this is my 2nd biggest gripe with the story. In the middle of a good flowing narration, we get slapped with the most obnoxious wall of text: the choices the main character has to make. They come every so often, a couple of times per chapter, in the form of A B C single choice. It breaks all immersion. Its bad to watch. And it seems it takes away from the identity of the character.
The idea of a make-your-own-adventure-book that's transferred into VR is quite interesting. The fact that the royalroad story "Swamp boy" was chosen as the 'book' in question is the icing on the cake.
Unfortunately, the cake's foundation is quite screwed up. After a while, the MC ends up in the army (just like in swamp boy, no big spoiler here) and proceeds to break basically all the rules possible (here we diverge),
up to and including maiming his fellow soldiers. Yet nothing ever happens to him.
Yes, he didn't get an education but come on. When did that ever stop anyone, let alone the military from punishing people?
The first few times I was "OK, guess he'll know what to do next time or get the book dropped onto him", but nope. Insulting and disobeying base commanders, assaulting and injuring other soldiers, nothing is punished, all is waved away for various reasons.
That's simply not how a hierarchical institution works! Either punish him or transfer him into a special position outside of the chain of command FFS. But no, his various commanders keep getting replaced before jumping into the puddle themselves.
After a dozen times, I just started skipping the chapters to see when this army arc is finally finished. We're in the 80th now and still no end in sight.
The Grimdark tag isn't for show, the story starts out with torture, cannibalism and paedophilia. It gets lighter later on though. Not very light, casual murder and maiming still remain but that's kinda normal for for fantasy stories, isn't it?
The writing itself is quite good, few typos and the ones that exist are cleaned up quickly.
I like the idea of a make-your-own-VR-story, even if the interruptions to make a decision are somewhat immersion breaking. Would I want to read that in every story? No, of course not. But in this one, it's the entire premise, a feature not a bug.
I initially gave this tale 4.5 stars, but the army-arc is simply so unbelievable that I took it down to 3. Hope it gets better soon, haven't given up yet!
The division between who the character in the VR is supposed to be and who the player/person inhabiting that role are is extremely blurred, and not in a particularly good way. Several parts of beginning don't make much sense - the "boy" acts as though they had the actual psychological damage enforced slavery and torture might inflict, which is odd given that there's supposed to be a real person piloting the character. This was particularly prevalent when the 'boy' felt excited to be able to tease his captor by playing with bread soaked in his own blood.
Honestly, I couldn't bring myself to read past Chapter 7, with how chock-full of traumatizing content this thing was. The writing glories in the tortures, indignities, and abuses suffered by the main character, and unlike some other stories emphatically deserves its "traumatizing content" warning. In other stories where the traumatic content might be a single important occurrence, this one describes over and over how the main character is literally carved up and eaten by his captor, and how he came to largely accept that way of life due to the constant abuse. The hints towards paedophilia were where I ended up drawing the line, as by that point I was reading largely in order to hope that it got better for the main character, who is admittedly sympathetic. I realize that my critique is incomplete given my decision not to continue reading, and I hope that it did, but I'm not terribly optimistic.
I really don't like LitRPGs but I had nothing to read and started to read this story. A slow but steady start and a decent grammar with little to no mistakes.
The story turns around a man who had been bought by a witch from a village family. I don't want to give more spoiler than description so all I can say is most of the characters have an actual personality. Overall an interesting story with interesting elements.
Mc's ignorance and inexperience portrayed beatifully in the story
In my opinion if the story hooks you, you will binge read it up-to-date. If it doesn't, you probably will drop it in few chapters. I gave it a chance and I don't regret it. But in the end it probably will not one of your personal favourite stories. If you have time to give it a chance like me, I recommend it.
In first 30 chapter mc lives a hellish life. After chapter 30 or so the story turns into a full-fledged wish fulfillment story with a lot of useless details. Every chapter mc asserts his dominance(!) over everyone. Yes, we understand that he is faster, stronger, smarter than everyone in 10 chapters. The reason author continues to beating a dead horse is still a mystery to me.
Update: The mc is still beating everyone at everything. Nothing new.
This novel is a torture porn NO ONE should ever get subjected to unless your some kinda illegal rapist pedo. Its just bad, and its really sad because this novel started out with SO MUCH GOD DAMN POTENTIAL just like begining of the end before it veers off into one plot hole after another, one troupe right into another
Lets start with the plus sides- that is the style and grammer are perfect
then the real shit
Story- starts off as one hell of a torture porn, you thought melas was dark? Well the start was just mc as the authors chew toy. He is subjected to pedophilia, torture, cannibalism, getting taken advantage of, sold into slavery. Name one thing that brings a human nightmares, hes been there gone throguh them all. Im not complaining at this point cuz honestly this is what had me sold. The story was dark as hell sure, but you knew that he had to make the descisions and stay with his abuser as there was no other choices and the only thing he could do is work hard. It was realistic, there was no plot armor. This is what most of us would have done in his situation. Stick around long enough to gain strength to kill or escape your captors or kil your self and die early.
And after his abuser exits his life, he is forced to face his naivity about the real world. He gets cheated and conned and with his wits he is able to survive in actual society under farces and cunningness.
Here is where everything starts going down hill. And from here on out there will be spoilers
First off, there is a women he meets- granted she is about 25 or someshit, older than him and almost an elderly sister figure to him.. She has a fucking son his age, and widowed. She watched him grow up and sympathized with his abuse in a sisterly or even a motherly way. WHY DID THEY HAVE TO FUCK???? it just gets disgusting as the one potential person in his life he could have looked up to or help himself heal with just becomes a fuck toy. And with this, i thought it was a stand alone case, i didnt look into it. But then it happens again, in the army- sexual tension that was unneeded. And again at the school library with some old ass grandma who gives him 10 min sympathy. And again when he has a fiance. It should be tagged harem. The worst thing about this is the fact that women LITERALLY get their panties wet becuase he is stronger? more magical? than them? one lady literally throws her panties at him after he demonstrates his prowress on a boat. So second arc, mc is just a literal sex magnet. there is no single women who doesnt wanna fuck him. hes so op that not even the military can touch him. he is so smart he learns what takes a normal person a year to learn in like 6 days. This is a pathetic self insert author, shame on you
Ok if that didnt make u drop this god awful plot, then as another reader mentioned, the awful military arc where he faces ZERO xonsequences for disobediance and literally maiming superiors. It doesnt matter which era, which country, what world- this is just unacceptable behavior. It typically goes unpunished and if they cant find someone to punish you , you best bet they will. But somehow the authors cop out for this is to layer on that thick juciy plot armor, and call it a day. Mc is too op, so fucking big dick that no one can stop this man, not even walls apparantly. And the miliary "needs him" cuz the marsh is "too dangerous" and swamp man knows best.
It just gets ridiculous in the academy arc- he ends up getting a fiance and more outrageously retarded bickering and drama.
its bad. do your self a favor and dont read this horseshit
The author does an incredible job pacing the story and manages to renew my interest with every chapter, if there are any grammar mistakes (I haven't caught any) the author either doesn't make any, or fixes immediately. This just shows the authors dedication and makes the story even better to read
The story itself is creative. Once you start to read you'll notice it's like a book within a book. From time to time you get humorous commentary, integrated into the story itself, about what's going on in the main plotline. It's also almost like an Isekai in that the main character knows nothing of his world he's shoved into once he begins to explore the kingdom.
My favorite part of the story, however, is its dependability. The author, Bokuboy, releases dependably every day. Usually hours before and a page or two longer than his self-set schedule. Moreso than all the other stories on this website, I look forward to this story's release every day.
Grammar-wise: I am usually a grammar-nazi, and even I don't notice many errors in the chapters. Bokuboy updates his chapters to correct grammar mistakes as people notice them.
So I'm at the latest chapter (chapter 61) and so far this story is quite good. Summary of the Story so far:
MC is sold to a Hag by his family as a baby and she basically eat's him to be young and beautiful, he is a mixture between slave/apprentice/livestock/boytoy and eventually he is on his own for reasons that are not yet known (Hag disappears). While he lacks a lot of common knowledge due to his isolation and upbringing he has pretty good instincts and common sense so his decision-making is satisfactory for the most part (although it can get a bit extreme due to his lack of social experience, and his decisions may annoy people as he frequently chooses his life over his pride while under the "care" of the Hag). MC also seem's to have the magic aura of a hentai protagonist and is attracting the attention of the fairer sex everywhere he goes (specifically MILF's - he is a man of culture!) - he has only banged 1 of them however so not sure if there might be a Harem later on.
I haven't noticed any grammar mistakes and the flow is good enough to get lost in, word choice is also pretty good with appropriate word's that belong in a story (doesn't read like a essay or something from a primary school). The style of writing is alright however one thing which may annoy people is that due to this being a sort of MMO Virtual Reality background he is frequently given choices in a A)B)C)+ setup and this may break the immersion for some (and his choices may also disappoint some more strongly as they see their prefered action listed). I binged it, and I liked it a lot and I suggest giving a shot at least - BEWARE the Hag parts if you are squemish as that is where this story earns it's grimdarkness, ex: many times MC is basically filleted like a fish with nothing to help the pain and is forced to also eat himself. Good story, not for the faint of heart.
This story is very engaging. The build up is perfect and the pay-off satisfying. Also I'm loving the culture shock between David and everyone he interacts with. Also I'm starting to emphasize with the hag a bit. She's a monster but at least she comes by it honestly. Seeing David interact with people is much more frustrating.