Goes Unpunished

by AJ Golde

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Anti-Hero Lead GameLit High Fantasy LitRPG Magic Male Lead Mythos Portal Fantasy / Isekai Ruling Class Strategy
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content

In the wake of human-initiated Armageddon, Colin Callum will do anything to survive on the streets of fallout Buenos Aires. But when Colin is infected with a virus that will warp him from human to monster, the hard-core, never-wanted-to-be-a hero has only one choice left.

To fulfill a promise made to a dead friend. To enter Thorr’un, a fantasy world where Colin must choose a new name, a new identity and a new path. To figure out what the hell it even means to have Dexterity 20.

But as he encounters ancient kings, crumbling dungeons, active war zones and beautiful women whose names he can hardly pronounce, Colin must face two vital truths.

He never was much of a gamer.

And in the world of Thorr’un no deed, good or evil, goes unpunished.


Release Schedule: (Royal Road) As I can, building back up to 5x/week; (Patreon) Most weekdays

Cover Art by: crow-god


On Warnings: This is a high-octane, high-adrenaline, high-oxytocin story about mind-boggling adventure, terrifying monsters, a badass protagonist and, at times, the jaw-dropping women who fight alongside him.

Is there swearing? Hell yes.

Is there violence? Those monsters won't kill themselves!

Does he meet (and sleep with) gorgeous fantasy babes? Of course he does!

We live in a world of where many authors are afraid to include certain content for fear of scaring off their readers. I won't do that. I trust you. And if you trust me, you'll love my work.

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Magicor
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Started good but fell through.

Reviewed at: Chapter 19

Like many stories here it started off great. Unfortunately our MC makes poor choices, and the whole world is out to get him.

I'm going to save you because you have a vagina. I'm going to save you again(same moist reason).

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

It's too bad I really thought the story had potential. Sure make him face setbacks, give it suspence, but don't make the situation continually realistically impossible only to have him miraculously pull through.

Maybe if he was OP? Or gets the one true ring(yay I'm invisible) he would definitely die, and we all know he can't come back to life again.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

Anyways I'm sure some people would enjoy reading about a guy crawling over a thousand miles of broken class, and being like Adriooooon. GL

 

Signspace13
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Self pity is a poor character trait

Reviewed at: Chapter 19

I want to like this. It really is fun, so I'm not giving up on it yet, but it has a problem that I feel is worth addressing in a review.

MC has a habit of self pity. As the title of the review said, this is annoying, he is realistic enough and I understand why he is like this. It is just not enjoyable to read. So that is the purpose of the review, please have the character grow past this blind the near future, the site doesn't need another Savage Divinity, that series has enough self pity for all of us.

nickspaceman
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is in fact, not "goose Unpunished"

Reviewed at: Chapter 19

if you go into the story thinking its "goose Unpunished" you will be very, very disappointed. for not a single goose has been seen as of chp 19. however if you didn't miss read it, you'll find a fairly intresting story. as of chp 19, it hasn't gone very far, the start was very intresting to me but hasn't been able to follow through I feel so far. but I look forward to seeing more  

Ordinary_Failure
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Really Good , Just Some Minor Problems (Chapter 12).

Reviewed at: Chapter 18

Alright, I'll keep this one pretty short.

Style: The style is really good so far. It's a breath of fresh air compared to most other LitRPGs, however the character is quite common on Royal Road (More on the Character later, obv).

Grammar: The grammar so far is really solid, with hardly any mistakes. Great job on that one, author!

Story: Compared to almost every other LitRPG on RoyalRoad, the opening to the story was unique, and actually had some real tension as you read. So far, the author has done a great job at describing things vividly, but not making every little thing fleshed out. For that, I thank you author. Going into the actual LitRPG elements, it's pretty generic, but if it ain't broke, don't fix it. On top of that, the author already said in the Synopsis what the "core" elements of the story would be from the get go. Not much to complain about then.

Character: So far, the biggest drawback to the story is the MC. It's not terrible, and he may be fleshed out more later on, but he doesn't have any "true" flaws. The only flaw that you could find would be his need for a woman. There has been some hints about a sad past, but nothing from that has truly made an impact in his actions that would make him feel more real. If the author reads this, the main takeaway from this review is simple... Make the MC more human. Attempt to give him true flaws that influence his actions. Make him have trust issues, or something like that. Just make him feel more than a "Mary Sue, but not really" with getting women. If you can do that, the Character score would easily go up to a 4 1/2.

Ashcheul
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Two different styles of story

Reviewed at: Chapter 05

Chapters 1-4 were pretty neat, heart wrenching, interesting. Reading those was a treat.

Real LitRPG starts from chapter 5, and I've found it not to my liking. More than anything, the reason for my dislike is a matter of personal preferences.

Game mechanics hold all the tropes I quite dislike in many RPG systems - be it computer game or tabletop.

Amout of meaningless rewards is over the top. Boonies, boonies, and more boonies, and... yes hold this sack of boonies too... don't know why you'd need those but nevermind... take them!

Way that initial inventory is delivered to him is pretty strangely non-instant. It feels mighty against expectations.

Situation where he finds himself in chapter 5 is pretty inflexible and what rings "GM's fiat" and railroading bells in my head.

Hm. Overall it feels like during chapter 4 (more subtly), and from chapter 5 (non subtly) MC is being overly coddled by the plot. Yes, he gets his teeth fixed in by dwarven boot-dentist once, but it doesn't break overall impression, because it doesn't change momentum at all.

Omnis Ra
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Good but could be Better

Reviewed at: Chapter 01

The story is good but could be better. I didn't really get behind the character with all the pity, but their is a strong character to work with. Really did enjoy reading and can't wait to see what happens next

CyclopsSlayer
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Fascinating start as of chapter 2. I will wait for a few more chapters before giving a full review.

So far, the grammar, style, and character are excellent.

pantster
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FIRST IMPRESSIONS

Reviewed at: Chapter 02
At the moment of writing this, only two chapters have been released, but from what I have seen so far I can't wait for more. The writing quality is high, especially for RR. The amount of character development the author is able to achieve in two chapters is more than most authors on RR are able to achieve in multiple books, all that matters now is consistency. We're yet to see any gamelit but even without the fantasy aspects, it still worth giving it a try.
Wishyfishy
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Fantastic story. Writing style has a little to many cliff hangers for my taste but that is bound to happen when writing chapter to chapter. Grammar is on point, and while I haven’t exactly been looking for them, I have yet to notice any spelling mistakes or conversation disjointed ness, conversations flow smoothly and resemble an actual conversation rather than simply a way to get exposition across to the reader. There are a few things here and there that I could nitpick about but as it stands I am just happy to finally have a new decent novel to read, helped by the fact that the author genuinely cares for input and the opinions of his readers. I rate it 8/10, and would 100% give my recommendation for this novel.

Bombitor
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Hmmm... Hmmmmm...

Reviewed at: Chapter 11

Alright, so I will start off by saying that this is a great story, and everyone who likes the trope of being transported to a fantasy world will enjoy this read. 

Me like Tis' style. It's really good. Everything flows well, everything is explaind and well... It's good, I guess! Awesome even, in my opinion.

The story is taking a lot of different tropes and merging them together (speaking with god, VR, post apocalyptic earth, zombie.. kinda, isekai etc). But I think the author did a great work with this. It's engaging to say the least. So good work!

No problem with grammar. It's brilliant.

I like the characters, everyone has their own unique personality and no one's bland. The MC is also pretty relatable. 
 
I didn't read it until the last chapter that was published... Cuz I gotta sleep. So g'night