Legend of the Lost Star
[Completed the April Royal Road Writathon challenge]
In the world of Orb, steeped in history millennia old, how far can a nameless soul from another world go? Choices have consequences, no matter what, and in a world where butterflies can stir howling gales across the world, the boy's every step might just change the world forever.
Book 1: First Light
Synopsis: As a war of epic proportions enters a ceasefire, a soul from another world enters a dead boy's body. Without any memories of who he was, with only a little companion by his side, the lost soul begins his long, arduous journey to recover his memories, while unraveling the mysteries of a war-torn world. Why was he sent here? And where will he go now? Even he himself does not know. But one thing is for certain: the world will never be the same again.
Book 2: Foredoomed to a Rendezvous
Synopsis: As war continues to break out between the Five Lands, Gaius finds himself inheriting a legacy of ancient times. With the flames of battle spreading through the South once again, the lost soul throws himself into battle over and over, in an attempt to protect his home and those he holds dear. How will the boy, nearly unrivalled in martial might, fare in a web of conspiracies beyond his ken?
Book 3: The Last and the Lost
Synopsis: The boy has set himself an unbelievable target in a bid to save someone precious to him. With his former home now out of reach, he stalks the Southern Continent, inciting rebellion and revolution where possible to lure his prey out. Meanwhile, in the heart of the South, embers of war begin to rekindle. Will it be the death knell of yet another nation millennia old?
Book 4: The Unravelling World
Synopsis: Time is not on Gaius' side. Everyday life, already disturbed by the flames of mortal war, falls apart entirely as beings of legend once again appear on Orb. Forced to a foreign land to treat his injuries, the boy must confront the outcomes of his actions, directly and indirectly. But the tide is rising. Countless enemies are throwing themselves against the nations of Orb, cleaving a path of blood wherever they go. Gaius has to hurry...or drown with the rest.
Book 5: World's End, Divines' Rondo
Synopsis: The great gods of Orb have staked their claim on the world itself, killing all in their way. Each of the Cardinal Continents are fighting their own battles and making their own peace, but none are aware of the growing threat from the Wildlands, where a self-exiled legend continues to gather strength. Meanwhile, a new threat stalks the whole of Orb, killing whatever remains of the Constellation Heroes. Against such a chaotic backdrop, a boy continues to protect a semblance of daily life for his loved ones, but will he be successful when the curtains finally open?
Book 6: The Frenzied Tide
Synopsis: A sword hangs above the Eastern Territories. The Human God, progenitor of all life, the direct cause of the beastfolk genocide, has made his will known to the rulers of the East — make peace with the God of Water, or be destroyed in three months. Gaius, who has left the battlefield to return home, is once again called to fight, to support a do-or-die offensive upon their foe's territory.
But in the background, the threads of destiny are beginning to come together. Plots set in motion long ago are coming to fruition...
Book 7: Limina of Ruin
Synopsis: The chalice has broken. The East is beset with turmoil, as factions turn on each other. The Great Divide, however, brims with a setting radiance, ensuring a final, transient peace. And in the midst of it all, one young boy follows the fettered winds and the unshackled waters, heading to a new land to uphold a promise. For him, the days of fighting will be a distant memory before long...and a daily event in the years to come.
Uncovering ancient memories, putting to rest regrets, enjoying the last of a peaceful life...the people of the Five Lands will live to their fullest. Yet, this is but the calm before the storm.
Book 8: Power Talks
Fate. A curious word to most...and a frightening word to Gaius. Alongside the rulers of the North, Gaius witnesses frightening truths, proof of an inevitable future. Spurred by a myriad chilling revelations and urged by a god's killer, the Mortal Light Dynasty gathers both mortal rulers and divine sovereigns, covering past conflicts with a offer of cooperation of an unprecedented scale.
However, can this unity, first of its kind, stand up to time, fate and mortal nature? Or will it burn, along with the Five Lands?
Book 9: Homeland Song
This is a story that may, depending on how impatient you are, take some time to spin up. I have enough in my mind for a long run, so it's essential that I lay out a great deal of groundwork at the start. Seven books have been released so far, five of which have concluded. Be aware of late arrival spoilers!
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Release schedule: My original promise was 2 a week, minimally, but it's been a daily release for a long time. So yeah...
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This is a story that suffers hard from Kitchen Sink Syndrome.
As I said in the title, it lacks focus. It tries to be everything from every isekai simultaneously. Think of D&D, and all its generic Tolkien-clone tropes, but instead of Tolkien, it's a bunch of isekai and xianxia stuff. That's what you find here.
The worldbuilding is massive in scope, with all sorts of stuff including fantasy-racism-genocide, enough people being isekai'd into the setting that the event is taught in classes to their children, ancient demons, bunches of high gods with all sorts of lesser servants, and what seems a ceaseless series cold and hot wars between said gods.
The story even lampshades this melting pot of tropes, with our MC noting that "his" name is Latin, while the requisite hyper-cute-Imouto's name is Japanese. However, the fact that the story acknowledges how generic everything is doesn't make it any less generic.
Because, as expansive as it is, it's ultimately shallow. Precious little effort has been put into considering the outcome of this crazy mess, so ultimately the interactions seem like little more than a generic fantasy setting with nothing unusual to call its name. No thought is given to look into what the long-term sociological impact of such a universe might be.
Of course, the MC is an extra special isekai... and for some reason doesn't even seem surprised about what's going on (which I suppose is better than reading 5 chapters of him freaking out). He signs up for the military the first chance he gets, and we see another couple dozen chapters of him being a military recruit not doing much.
Remember what I said about generic?
At which point, I admit I zoned out thanks to boredom and decided to call my review finished there. The story crawls like a fish, the characters and setting alike are empty of depth, character interactions read like everyone knows what's going to happen next and they're only pretending to interact to make it look like there was a reason behind their actions.
Even the moment when two titanic superhumans clashed with enough power to decimate both their armies as collateral damage felt less energetic than the average game of tic-tac-toe.
It's not completely truly awful, however. The writing's solid, if bland, with only a small handful of minor errors. Chapters are short and get to the point, lacking in any purple prose. And the MC may not be interesting, but neither he nor any of the other characters are annoying.
In fact, with some effort on the author's part to add depth, focus on growing what is already there rather than new ideas cribbed from whatever's popular this season, he has a decent, if still generic, basis for a story.
This novel starts small and gradually grows bigger as the story progresses.
In the first arc our boy main character, Gaius, strives for a better life for himself and his "sister" Nakama.
In the second arc Gaius works as an instructor in a hidden realm and discovers a secret area within the hidden realm.
The third arc deals with the ramifications of the secrets Gaius finds/ dealing with the greater world.
This was the novel that finally made me open an account on Royal Road because I wanted to encourage the author to keep writing.
HOWEVER, I personally am not fascinated by the wider world of this story, which is why I am giving this story four stars instead of five.
I've read the first arc three times, the second arc two times, and the first few chapters of the third arc only once because the story doesn't grip me personally the same way when more is revealed about this fantasy world.
If you are looking for a fantasy world that slowly expands from one perspective to multiple perspectives, then this story might be for you.
The story unfolds after a few chapters in, but the general sense is that someone is translating this from an asian novel. It might be half decent in its origial package but loses alot of coherency. It skips over alot of "comon sense" and just keep plowing and you are left to fill in the blanks or try and rewrite it in your head to something more plausable. Still so-so. Its readable
More than any prose story I’ve read in a long time, Legend of the Lost Star feels like a Japanese RPG brought back to life.
The thing that makes JRPG games so compelling is their ability to smash together every possible thing and see what sticks, and this story here does exactly the same. It’s a sci-fi military story with alien battling; it’s an isekai reincarnation story about a mysterious amnesiac; it’s got a school with quirky characters and plucky children. There’s Xianxia cultivation, mysterious conspiracies, continental wars, and so much more. It’s really reminiscent of some old game like Star Ocean or Tales of Phantasia or Secret of Evermore, and that’ll either make or break the story for you depending on what you’re looking for in a story.
For me, the high-density mish-mash was a plus through my reading of the book. It also helps that chapters are short and breezy. The pace is certainly slow, so much so that it could dissuade readers looking for something with an eventful opening (though the less connected first two chapters deliver more of that). In just a few months the story has ballooned to over 800 pages in length, and I imagine the story keeps it slow but short as well, which is good in my eyes.
The writing isn’t anything to read home about, though; the grammar is fine, but the prose is flat and the story has a trouble evoking any of the senses, especially visual. It’s about what you’d expect out of a sci-fi/fantasy web serial, though, so if you’re not bothered by that you’ll be OK.
I’m glad the story is largely about a duo of twelve year old kids, because that’s the perfect set of protagonists for the beginning of a big JRPG adventure. I’d have liked the story to have moved faster and not gotten stuck in training camp for so long, but I’m confident the author has good places to go with this quite long saga.
Also, the chapter titles are great early on. I don’t know why but I really like that every chapter title in Book 1 is like a complete sentence lol
It's not bad. The main problem I have is cultivation levels. How can someone of lower-level beat higher so easily? Does higher cultivation help so little? Usually, it increases speed, strength, endurance, reaction speed so how can someone beat those of higher-level so easily? Sloth will never beat a lion no matter how good its fighting skills are. Yet MC is the lowest level and fights one of the best fighters (knights) of the army. I thought the author would explain a bit more but I'm already at the 3rd book and nothing is explained about that. I just wish the author explained the cultivation system and made distinctions between levels clearer.
Really excited to see where this one goes. It's HUGE and has lots of moving pieces, but the author does a good job of making even the small details of battle really exciting.
The military aspects and wars are very fun to read and I look forward to learning more about the world as I continue with the story.
Recommended to those who like military fantasy and huge epic worlds with lots of lore!
This story lacks a moral center.
It's gross. It's exploitative. It celebrates nothing but power.
Just at the start of this thing, I'm thinking: why would I be interested in reading about a grown man beating up children? That's not appealing to me in any way. I see it again and again, the author making choices that are ugly. The grammar and structure are fine, it's entirely the subject matter I have concerns about. There's no crime in presenting characters to your audience who are reprehensible, fiction is filled with evil characters. What's sick is when evil behavior is presented as if it's virtuous. For an egregious example, how about the MC's teary little reunion with the ghost of a child soldier he trained in a previous life.
What the literal fu**?
I wanted to give this the benefit of the doubt and skipped ahead, just in case this thing would come together. But I don't believe it does.
It shocks me that so many people have read and enjoyed this fiction.
This one is really a pleasure to read. The concept is not new but this is one of the more thought out worlds I have read on RoyalRoad. We follow our MC as he finds himself in a new world, memories from earth are hazy at best. His journey through this world and the people he meets are a joy to read. For a fiction with such a huge cast I have not found any of the typical cardboard cut-out characters. The story itself could be considered a slow burn, mysteries unfurling and exploration of this new world. All this happens against a rather complex political backdrop and many moving parts.
If there was anything I could say I would like to see, it would probably be a more concrete goal for our MC. One outside of just proctecting those he is with and surviving. I would probably like to see a bit more explanation on the MC's power progression too, but I understand we are finding out things with the characters.
All in all this is a great story. The release rate is amazing and with that the quality is good too. A few errors here and there but I am no grammer expert as this review probably shows.
I honestly think the release rate is why there is not as many comments on this fiction. I typically read this once a week to get caught up and I don't comment while binging chapters. Just a note for the author.
Note: Currently 14 chapters in so take that as you will!
A world from Earth, characters transported
By mysterious gods, they are supported
Our man in boy, fighter, orphan
Faster, stronger, learning, morphin
History, richness alluded to
Shows hard work you did imbue
The orb you made, full of wonder
Will our Gaius pull it asunder?
Some grammar parts, though not a frequence
Did detract from several sequence
Clearing these up, would fully smoothen
Action most this would improve-n
Second I found narration discord
Switching perspective, reading qutie hard
This worked against the clarity
And made inconsistent POV
Slow your story, I did not find
Learning with our character, I didn't mind
So far I've not lost any interest
In Gauis' improvement sub-quest
To wrap up, I hope you know
I've enjoyed your story, you've put on show
Good luck in future endeavours, sir
'Til we meet again, keep up your writing spur
I have to admit, at first I was slightly lost coming into this story simply because of how large the world is that it drops you into. As with many stories, however, it drops us back into a smaller frame while holding that epic start in the background to provide us with a sense of eventual scale - and then delivers on that promise with a gradual climb from orphaned nobody to... well, you'll have to read the first book of the story, at least.
I enjoyed the clever blend of mythological references and fantasy tropes that have been melded into something unique, which is no mean feat when the author has invoked the sheer number of them that come into play here. Despite the clash we're kept grounded through the eyes of Gaius, who is seeing most of this for the first time (that he can remember, anyway) and lets us keep the pace approachable.
For those that enjoy a story which rewards continued reading with steady advancement and growth, this one should be right up your alley. Grammar is generally excellent with a half star off for some homophone swaps. For fans of LN story construction the style will be perfect even if I had a few quibbles at times.
Author, keep it up!