What would you do if you found an ancient spaceship?
Michael Freeman is a disabled veteran who had just been fired from his mind-numbing cubicle job, which allowed his opportunistic girlfriend to dump him. Now, he only wants to spend some time in his grandfather's mountain cabin to unwind away from the drudgery of daily life with a cold beer in his hands.
Standing in his way is an ancient spaceship with an emotional AI, nanites that have invaded his body, an international crime syndicate, a suicidal FBI agent on a vigilante mission, terrorists... and this is just the beginning.
What can one man do when faced with insurmountable odds? Call it quits? Or… call some of his old army buddies and blow those obstacles to smithereens.
Can he become more than he had ever dreamed, reaching further than any man before? Staying under the radar of the powers that be while righting a few wrongs of the modern world.
He is sure of three things:
1. He really doesn’t want to follow the rules anymore... aside from his own.
2. Space is the ultimate frontier, and he had been given a turnkey technology to reach it—if they let him.
3. Those that want to hurt him and the people he cares about will rue the day they were born.
You do not always get what you wish for… sometimes, you get one hell of a lot more.
“Really entertaining, and a promising future.” - RR Reviewer
“Good old sci-fi novel” - RR Reviewer
“Sci-fi with a realistic MC” - RR Reviewer
“Wow, seriously... just wow” - RR Reviewer
“I'm hooked!” - RR Reviewer
“A well crafted story.” - RR Reviewer
“A Sci-fi Novel I can appreciate” - RR Reviewer
“This is f....ing good.” - RR Reviewer
Book 1 of The Space Legacy (The Spaceship In The Stone) available on Amazon Kindle and KU: https://www.royalroad.com/amazon/B09PJQL4DT
Advance chapters available on Patreon
The original art for the cover picture was made by N. Dasco
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There are no problems with grammar and style.
The concept, although not original, is very interesting. The actions are very thrilling.
The problems that I have is with the characterizations and some aspects of the story.
- 20 something in the FBI is basically an intern, not a top analyst. The author is failing in mixing between a capable veteran special agent with a beautiful young love interest. A top analyst would be a late 40s bald guy that has refused promotions because he loves doing his job.
- MC being in his 40s is actually a good believable trait. But he doesn't act like his age. He acts like what a teen would think how 40 years old guy act. Not to mention an ex special forces. Too many questionable decision has been made, or not made.
- Questionable decisions made for the organization structuring. MC was a muscle, not a brain. Appointing him as the de facto leader of the organization probably explains some of the decisions...
- What happened to no fraternizing? This one is a given. There is a reason why companies and the military always have no fraternizing policy. A top FBI analyst and an ex delta force would've known that.
- Elizabeth and Alice leading the intel department is a bit... One is a 20 something girl, and the other is a muscle brain who knows how to torture...
- Anna, who is basically a teenager, as the PR department's leader of a --what I think would be-- global corporation...
- Why would you give a strike team a new weapon right before they go into action? Especially a special force. Any veteran soldier would prefer a weapon they're used to against a new tech weapon they have never fired and know nothing about.
- Besides mining, why no drone tech? wouldn't scout drones would do better if not complementing satellite surveillance?
That' enough ranting from me. At the end of the day, I still enjoy the story.
The story is great with a proper plot line from the beggining. But after the end of book 1 its book 1.5 which i think should be in a seperate story all together because its from the ai perspective whhich just replays the story again for the second time with nothing new but fillers.
I REALLY liked the way this story started. Enough to overlook some of the issues with the writing.
Unfortunately when the story started to move away from what I originally considered to be a realistic scenario for someone finding highly advanced tech, the issues with the writing became more noticeable to me.
Story issues: A few too many coincidences, a few too many experts, too sudden a switch from being (rightfully) paranoid to trusting a whole host of people etc.
Writing issues: occasional grammar or weird turn of phrase - nothing that couldn't be fixed up with a solid editor. But jarring to me as a reader.
Will continue to follow for now, but I'm not up to date with the latest chapter and am losing momentum.
Great first chapter setting the scene and building the character.
Got to admit, I'm a sucker for a good first sentence, and "Inside the buried spaceship, an ancient machine intelligence continued its relentless vigil" passed that bar for me.
I'm currently 5 chapters in and definitely adding this to my list. Well written, relatable and interesting.
I wouldn't describe this as popcorn reading like some stories here, but that's no bad thing - I like a bit of variety in my reading diet.
Interested to see how things develop!
Update as of 9/3/20
I don't know how I can say the necessary words. I tried to not lower my score while reading, however, after 23 chapters I must say that I am somewhat disappointed. The story started out spectacular, as you can see the title of my review. However, the author decided that rather than dealing with governments and the rest of humanity Michael and the gang should deal with terrorists who have "friends in high places" per se. This has been the recurring theme since Chapter 11-12 or so. And I must say that I do not like it at all. It's pretty repetitive, boring and just shows how Mary Sue our characters are. "Always help the good, save citizens, terrorists are bad." Right now the story is something like a Special Black Ops Team with Advanced Tech vs A Terrorist Group which is boring. I hoped to see some real political discussions, scientific developments, humans' reactions to the ship etc. Nothing, random terrorists attack our characters, our characters fight them back with advanced technology, random characters attack somewhere located in the United States, our characters immediately help them and save the day. Rinse and repeat. I will keep following this novel, however, if it continues like this... I might end up dropping it.
Has to be one of the best Sci-Fi novels out there as of now, got me hooked to the story in an instant.
One thing, however, the character, Michael is telling so much about the spaceship to so many people despite saying it should stay private.
It is a very real dilemma in these kinds of stories. Should the author make the main characters or the 'good guys' just simply OP enough to Deux ex Machina through everything?
Or should there be a balance of struggle and smooth sailing?
Honestly, even if you make it, either way, both could be entertaining. I could enjoy reading about a good struggle; I could also enjoy our mc boi beating everyone to the ground without breaking a sweat.
The core matter here is if it makes sense. Does the OPness of the MC feel natural with respect to the rest of the story? Or if the mc actually struggles with his far superior technology against people using earth guns and earth cyber warfare techniques, is that struggle logical?
After the author already sets up his own rules for his story, he should strictly abide by them. After he has introduced an AI with surveillance skills and computational skills far superior to earth's, the author should not make the AI make HUMAN mistakes even if the AI is trying to emulate humanity.
The solution many authors find to this dilemma of struggle or OPness is to make the main cast infinitely more stupid than they have to be. Make them repeat the same old mistakes over and over without learning. Make them NEVER use their full potential. Make forced events happen and drop the main casts' luck into the negatives.
Unfortunately, this story seems to be taking a similar route. Of course, it has not yet happened as of now too frequently. I usually use a three-strikes system. And the author has only gotten a strike one.
This section contains small spoilers,
1. First case with the Albanian gang of kidnappers. I get it; the system was not yet up to potential. They were still starting. Still not careful enough. So not a strike; logically, it could happen.
2. The assassin at Dave's yard. No, just no. It could NOT happen with MAX around. And his flimsy excuse of not having a dedicated satellite? Yeah, very weak. With the technology on their hands, an oversight like that would not happen. Who forced it. He could have given a warning that an unknown car was nearby. That, someone, was loitering around one of his key facilities, and he didn't notice? Nope.
And that is about it. I will still read the novel and enjoy reading it until I see the author making the same decision over and over again. I really hope it will not come to that because this is atm one of my fav stories here.
Even if the characterization and interaction are very bland, so are the side characters other than Max and Michael.
Modern Earth is dying.
The sky is burning, the poles are melting, the sea and land are full of garbage. Humans are fighting among themselves while they kill the very land they stand on. The wise ones look to the stars and see a path, but the masses are too foolish to look up with them.
Among the masses, a soldier, wounded and thrown away finds a ancient alien spaceship and finally looks up too...and he is disgusted in what he sees. He thinks to himself, "If the people of Earth refuse to see what's happening then I can't change that. But I will try to save as many as I can."
Normally, Syfy isn't my cup of tea, but this story is starting to change that. It takes a realistic approach to the syfy genre and add in a relatable, real feeling Mc, antagonists that make you grind your teeth in anger, and flushed out supporting characters and you got yourself a story that keeps dragging you back for more. So far the story has got me hooked and I can't wait to read more.
I generally love this kind of story Legacy (Stellar Heritage) is one of my favorite stories so at first I was really excited about this but there are real problems with these characters. It was going somewhat OK until the Illuminati type group was introduced. They aren't just bad they are kicking puppies and drowning kittens for fun sort of bad. It's oversimplifying the good-evil paradigm making it comical. It is hard enough to believe there is a small group of people trying to control the world but they also have to wear masks and meet in an old castle to discuss their evil plans.
If there were people like that they would be concerned with things like 10 billion-dollar government contracts and moving nations they would not be concerned with what goes on in the underworld. A place out in BFE that lost some millions to some illegal activity wouldn't even be worth their time to hear about.
The world and people are a lot more complicated than this. Making a cliche DR Evil type character really limits the imagination.
Hard one to review. As far as the mechanics of writing, its easily college level or the equivalent of what you'd get from a published author whose work had been edited.
Unfortunately, where it falls down is what I can only guess is an inability of the author to determine what people in certain situations and different backgrounds would actually do.
He has the MC, who was in Delta Force and presumably knew how to keep secrets, an FBI agent, and an old man running a recycling center (junkyard) all acting in ways that are completely inconsistent with their backgrounds and education.
The MC, for example, initially decides on absolute secrecy, etc etc having discovered a spaceship with fabulous powers, but then tells every single person he runs into excepting only some gang members and a doctor he barely spoke with. It makes no sense whatsoever. It's like every single character is the same character, and not a very mature one at that.
I'm hoping the author can start to better develop these characters and make them more consistent, because if they did that, this story would be a pretty enjoyable read.
Ok first of all, this is a nice story I'll admit, certainly one of the better ones on this platform. But what I don't get is the no. Of 4.5 n 5 star reviews. Don't get me wrong, I have nothing against you all but It really feels as if I'm reading something totally different than others. My experience with this story...was not good. Never once on any point did it manage to hook me. The characters were uninteresting, the story's first few chapters felt rushed. Maybe Syfy is just not for me considering how many people liked this thing. Let me go deeper with my issue so you don't feel as if I'm being a dick just for the sake of it.
How shall I put this...the characters felt real all right. They were not at all like those usual 1 or 2 dimensional card board cut copies in so many stories on this site. But at the same time they were really lacking in depth. All the characters felt real yet basic. Even the mc.He is said to be an army veteran but he felt more like a naive kid. So our mc, michael finds a space ship and becomes the owner. Like any sane and logical person, he decides that this needs to be kept under wraps and as secretive as possible. Totally agreeable. What does he do then? Spills the beans to a girl whose life he saved because he thought he could trust her. ...what?!, Why!? Ok ok fine. He's a man, maybe his male hormones got in the way. But then he decides to treat this girls sister and reveal the truth to her too. ...what!?, Why?! Ok fine again, she's a girl too...then in the next chapter he opens his uncontrollable trap again and this time the beans are spilled on an old man for no reasons at all...what?! Why?!...ah you know what? whatever. Then he goes on to reveal this fact to his ex-military pals. Michael, bro, you do remember the decision to keep things as secretive as possible right? No?. And the worse thing isn't even the fact how naive he is acting, no. It's the fact how easily other people accepts the truth. It's like everyone that the mc wishes to recruit is an open minded, fast thinking, smart person who knows when people are lying and not. Every human no matter how honorable will have atleast a bit of doubtful side, atleast a bit of greed, atleast a bit of..many things. Thats what being a human means. Emotions, different sides, different facade. Alright, enough about the characters. Let's talk about the story. So the story is nice. The author obviously put some serious thought into this. Though there were info dumps but c'mon, this is a Syfy. Of course, there would be info dumps. Thats not the problem, the problem is the pace. The story is too fast paced. In just the few chapters that he discovers the ship, he goes on a mad recruitment spree. In just 8-9 chaps, the mc finds a ship, saves a girl n her sister. Meets his old buddies, recruits them, starts giving romantic vibes, has his future gf n her sister kidnapped and what not. It felt like the author just wanted to get this all over with, so he could go on to the exciting part or the main part that he had planned. It's just too fast. This story does have some potential, if done correctly. But who am I to say? People are already enjoying it as it is so I guess it's just me out of the loop. Keep up the good work, I guess this was just not meant for me. I hope I didn't come off as too harsh as this was meant to be helpful critique, not a dissatisfied rant. Though I was dissatisfied, considering how much potential this story have. For a Syfy anyway.
The story is good and I enjoy it. Honestly my only complaint is the 1.5 book from the AI POV, but i think a lot of people feel the same as me. Reading what the author posted about it and his thoughts I feel a little better. But since I know he wants to turn this into a book series, maybe he should make the AI view of the story a completely separate thing like Ender's Game and Ender's Shadow. It’s kind of what he is doing, but not really. It would need polish and some changes to make it work better.
Honestly though, his first book is good and I look forward to the second real book.