Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Romance High Fantasy Magic Male Lead Portal Fantasy / Isekai Reincarnation Slice of Life Strong Lead
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content

Once I was the leader of the Arcanum, the greatest institution for the study of magic and knowledge, an institute that I ran for many many years until that honor was given to my son.  Time is after all the great equalizer of men…

Bereft of the duties I had so faithfully fulfilled for near two hundred years I found myself pondering things which I shouldn’t.  Questioning things I would have never thought. It was forbidden to dabble in the magics and relics left behind by the Altumerian people, for they had erased their entire race with such artifacts.  This, however, is what I found myself doing, delving into ancient secrets and mysteries left behind by a long-gone empire. It all came to a head when I activated something I didn't fully understand…

Finding myself in a new world with a new lease on life I decided to dedicate myself to understanding more about the Altumerians. A people who apparently vanished from more than one world...

Author's note: this novel will have explicit sex scenes as well as some blood and gore, if you have read my previous books you should know what to expect.  I plan on adding both elements but this is not an ero book that focuses on such things, they will be present but not take over the novel.

the release schedule is Mon-Fri.

  • Overall Score
  • Style Score
  • Story Score
  • Grammar Score
  • Character Score
  • Total Views :
  • 49,692
  • Average Views :
  • 2,485
  • Followers :
  • 1,042
  • Favorites :
  • 190
  • Ratings :
  • 178
  • Pages :
  • 129
Advertisement
Remove
Go to Table of Contents
Rate it
Fiction breaking rules? Report
Advertisement
Remove
Author
Zak Wester

Zak Wester

Achievements
Word Count (12)
350 Comments
250,000 Views
1,250 Followers
1st Anniversary
Advertisement
Remove

Leave a review

Reviews
Sort by:
Qanelar
  • Overall Score
  • Style Score
  • Story Score
  • Grammar Score
  • Character Score

The first chapter was quite good, it sucked me in and made me expect more, +1 for concept, execution, humor. 

Then it was followed by some slap-ons/infodump style chapters, as if the foundation of the new world and the Mc does not matter. Just breaking immersion violently. 

2_L33T_2_LIFT
  • Overall Score
  • Style Score
  • Story Score
  • Grammar Score
  • Character Score

Chapter 6 and 7 made me physically angry.

Reviewed at: Chapter 8 The guildhall...

The duel in chapter 6 ruined the book for me and I just can't get past it.

In chapter 6 the Mc duels an older boy because he call the Mcs mom a racial slur and a cunt. The duel is with no weapons and no magic the Mc loses the duel when his noes starts to bleed. The author clarifies in the comments that the duel was to first blood but when I first read it it seem like he conceited. Having a wrestling duel to first blonde is stupid. You could easily bloody your knuckles while beating the crap out of a guy and lose or beat someone to death without spilling a drop of blood. In the next chapter we learn that duels are very important in the mc culture somuch so that they mutilate them selves every time they lose and yet he agreed to a duel to first blood the worst type of duel see witch is the better fighter and to not use is magic an intrinsic part of him that was insulted with the slur! And the worst part is after the duel every thing is forgiven and they become fast frends. I could not become friends with a person who cald my mom a slur and a cult because someone bumped into him and then after revels in people moving out of his way because he is with the Mc that guy sounds like and asshole.

Tldr: Chapter 6 and 7 made me physically angry and I can't keep reading thins book.

 

I might revising  in the future but probably not.

Fastus
  • Overall Score
  • Style Score
  • Story Score
  • Grammar Score
  • Character Score

It's an early review but I wanted to do it anyway since it's promising.

The story is good, I like the fact that there is no tragedy of sorts or world saving quest - learning is a good motivator to me.

Style seems good, not the best I've seen but still very good.

Character seems well made, though I am not really convinced with the way he presents the MC like some intellectual noble savage - it makes sense and is in line with the story, and I do enjoy it, but it seems like too much.

I haven't noticed any grammar error 'till now.

This, I repeat, is an early review, but I hope it keeps going well or even better. :)

Zeddzul
  • Overall Score

The MC reads as both a narcissist and chauvinist. I never would have started reading this novel if it would have correctly listed harem in the descriptors, thus you deserve this rating. Harem is not romance and there is nothing romantic about this horrible sexist trash you call a chapter.  And yes the fight, then best friend, then forgotten about guy in just a few chapters was weird. Also apparently drinking everyone under the table is more impressive than actual magic as it's mentioned almost every chapter.  

Grekeren
  • Overall Score

You should have made Vayr 10 in the hunting story, him being 5 is just ridiculous. 

Like what can he do know when he is 15, punch a dragon to death or maybe rip a hole in the fabric of space...

I'm sorry author but you made the story unbelievably cringe whit that chapter.

Pet peeves:

And if those people mixed tech and magic, why is he transported by a regular old stone slab. Add some spinning rings and electricity at least.

Offense was taken, offense was given... Yeah this is cringey.

Why does he have extra protection on his forearms and shins but no protection for his head or hands? The only use for the splint armour would be for fighting against beasts. And in contrast to plate it would have been lighter by a lot, not just a little.

Schuldraigh
  • Overall Score

Aside from a few persistent grammatic oddities where the verbal pronunciation is spelled out instead of the proper word, it's pretty neat

Example

 

Jack099
  • Overall Score

 Interesting a good start to a new story.                                    Nice flow I got right into it felt like i was reading the begining of a new book.