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In a world of epic struggles between superheroes and villains, not everyone is enthused with the spectacle. Walter Watson is an unassuming young man and a part of the Powerless majority. His only want in life is to escape the noise of celebrity Heroism which is, he believes, no more than a thinly veiled excuse for neverending martial law. He wants freedom, not Power, and he has no hope in saving a world that was doomed to conflict from the start.
Unfortunately for Walter, fate has different plans. His entire life will come crashing down as the Truth reveals itself. He is harboring not only the greatest... but most terrible ability in existence. The very key to Power itself.
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It's been about a week since creep's debut, and we've already gotten a surplus of creativeness and originality, in my opinion, an oversaturated genre. The way it diverts the superhero genre and puts it on its head is very interesting, and Walter is probably one of the most interesting superhero protagonists I've seen thus far. He isn't the type that thrives or even enjoys the super-powered life, and his power is far from glamorous.
I'll most likely be editing this review once the story has progressed more, but I wanted to congratulate Shaeor and sing his praises, as well as give critique for what is to come. Hopefully this goes in more places than the usual 'joins superhero team, finds bad guy, fights bad guy, lives happily ever after as superhero' scenario.
All in all, very promising. Keep it up.
I gave this story a real shot by almost catching up completely but in the end I had to think about the chances of the story improving if it hadn't by that point and I couldn't read any further. What you'll find if you open this book is a bunch of almost moments and accomplishments that are quickly reset or given "twists'' to set the MC right back to the beginning or near enough. It's an obnoxiously consistent part of the story and it happens literally (Yes, I know that word is often used the wrong way. I’m not.) every 2-3 chapters like clockwork. It quickly gets to the point the story teaches you not to get excited or interested in anything happening because the story will punish you for it. I'm not kidding, it really does happen that consistently! So far the experience has been like if you watched One Piece but at the end of every island arc the hero DOESN'T defeat the bad guy. Hell, they don’t even defeat the big bads minions. It’s loss after loss, again and again, all throughout East blue and into the grandline and beyond. Or it's like the legend of icarus and his wax wings but the mc doesn't even need to fly high for them to melt. Take a step and his wings melt. Go for a walk and the bloody sun falls from the sky to scorch them. It was relentless! I feel confident you will never get a moment in the story that feels like a worthy payoff for any amount of attention or thought you give it. It just won’t happen.
I probably would've stopped halfway through but the author seemed to have extended a somewhat acceptable olive branch so I didn't. But what that means is when things inevitably went t*ts up it wasn't a complete and total disaster. There was a slight caveat to the latest "twist" which hadn't happened before. But the spirit of that was completely gone by the next arc and I was back to just going with the flow and reading with a blank face because I knew nothing happening was going to lead anywhere anyway. I'm now settled on the idea that however interesting a premise or how demanding it's been for the author to write there’s one thing he's overlooked and it’s the thing that utterly ruined the story. That was the narrative. I guess if he was going for “The world is always going to take a crp on you no matter what” he hit the nail on the head because that's what the story ended up being to its readers. The story itself was very consistent with that idea at the cost of the reader's experience with it. But that wasn't the problem. Not really anyway. You can't forget what the purpose of a story is and why you're telling it. It can affect the character but it shouldn't be hurting the readers too. It should fulfill what you want to write while also being palatable or enjoyable for the audience. That’s the balance any story being told to others should achieve. A story ought to develop expectations in readers that are eventually satisfied even if they aren't the same expectations the characters themselves have. You can't treat the characters' expectations as the readers and expect them to like the story when you end up crushing them. Inevitably the character's failure will feel like a let down for the reader too. What if I want the character to take a step? Or go on a walk? When the sun instantly punishes the notion I'm left feeling unsatisfied because the only expectation the story was giving me was either ignored or outright broken. I might be explaining all this the wrong way, but I hope you guys get the gist of what I mean. There's never a solid win the readers can get behind. It's always the loser and his constant failures and never any satisfaction for having read it.
My next problem would be the ill advised confusion the story gives about which version of Creep is the most real, or in other words the one that most deserved the audiences attention. I think in general giving readers a character or characters who are clearly the MC's is a good choice but this story took confusion and ran with it. The narrative (Can you guess what's coming?) set up the guy who I still think of as the real Creep and put him in a situation where it seemed like he'd had success for the first time. A genuine win with very few caveats. It took forever, but finally he'd done something that hadn’t disappeared immediately. But in the very next arc the author slaps you right upside the head with the "twist" that the Creep who achieved all that wasn't even the real Creep! Now I have to go back to following the loser who never wins because this new and poorly established "Creep" is the guy I should follow. So in a way the story still never ended up giving us readers a win we could get behind or feel hyped over! It poisoned and twisted the first expectation of the story ever truly fulfilled or met. It was the last straw for me and 70 chapters in (Only a few more till I would've caught up) I finally realised it wasn't worth waiting around for even the cheap satisfaction of "Well, at least I finished it". I was finally given what I’d been sticking around for and the next moment it was gone just like all the others before it.
Tl;DR is the definition of how I should've treated this story. It was too long and not worth the read. The only thing you’ll get on the other side is the feeling of having been betrayed over and over again by the narrative. There won't be a single moment you can think back on later as a good or cool scene.
So... I can see myself in this character. And I suppose that's something some authors want to go for and some want to stay away from, but I can only tell you about my experience.
He absolutely wants NOTHING to do with his present situation, and I can't imagine there are too many people who have no idea what that's like. And I love it.
He hasn't yet faced too much considering there are only four chapters as of yet but I'm expecting great things from this story. Our protagonist is someone who stands at the edge of being a great hero or being labeled a terrible villain and regardless of his choice, I look forward to the result.
An interesting and fluent story. (Yeah the world seems like Boku no Hero Academia's but much more realistic.) Mc has a real personality and surprisingly not an idiot (okay maybe he is an idiot of some sort). Overall a fluent and interesting story so far. I am pretty sure it will hit top fictions sooner or later. Give it a chance.
Update: The story has a good start but pretty much falls of later. The mc goes 0 to 100 in one and two chapters ans his personality completely changes. With perspective changes I don't enjoy story as much as before. I can say that mc is "literally" changed.
I really wanted to read Walter's story rather than Creep's. It feels like reading a bio-machine's antics with no emotions. I value emotions in the stories that I read pretty much and I started this story with expectations of Walter's future. Now there is only Creep.
The story feels fresh and original in a over saturated genre and I cant wait for the next release. The writing and world building is solid with my only issue being that the author uses the word 'drug' instead of dragged
It's like I said one of the best things I've seen on this site. Something that stands out from all of the other stories and is easily one of the best things I've ever read.
Read this and you will understand.
One of the most enjoyable part of this story for is that the main character Walter starts as a miserable piece of shit. But as the story continues Walter reflects on himself and his past action, realises his mistakes and faults and tries to improve oneself. Many times he becomes better, but he is only human so many times he also fails to improve himself.
The story itself is an interesting take on the superhero story, a dark and cruel reality of Power is presented in Walter world. Walter is a simple man on a path to discover himself, his power and the truth of his world.
Overall, i got to congratulate the author, he came into this story with a beginning and an ending, and pulled throught it all to his best ability and talent. The story could have been better, yes, but every story could have been better and i got to say, Good job Shaeor.
Shaeor i wish you luck and improvement in your life as an author and continues pulling out interesting and creatives stories out of your mind.
It's like you go in a rollercoaster and you like go bumbum shakalaka and you're fixed your iphone 3G that your mother bought when you were 2 years old. Like for what reason would you fix it? You asked yourself as you began eating your frozen banana slowly starting from the tip of the frozen banana which was actually very disgusting so you threw the disgusting frozen and eaten tipped-banana that was disgusting.
I like it. The MC is belivible and other charecters as well (though none have really been around for long). It's early days I guess so I don't want to make solid judgments but I will say I that I like the discussion of morality and the philosophical discussions/quandaries in general so I thought the story deserves props for what it's achieved so far. It's a story about good and evil--the nature of villainy and heroics--there's potential there and even if the execution may eventually fall flat I think props should be given for trying and for doing a pretty bang up job so far. Even if some parts are oddly phrased and confusing, the ambiguity of these sections are also a kind of strength.
That's all I can think to say right now. Good luck author, and readers, give the story a try.
(actually reviewed at 14: I just corrected some typos. Story's still good btw)
Creep is one of those stories where the main character is pushed on a knife's edge against conflict after conflict after, there's character introspection and growth but if you don't like tense heavy combat and stressful interactions every few paragraphs then this isnt the story for you. If you do, then I'll gladly recommend this book .
There's nothing wrong with the grammar you can easily read it, character interactions is good if a bit simplistic at this stage, action scenes are fast and engaging. IT's a good book, worth reading.