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In a world of epic struggles between superheroes and villains, not everyone is enthused with the spectacle. Walter Watson is an unassuming young man and a part of the Powerless majority. His only want in life is to escape the noise of celebrity Heroism which is, he believes, no more than a thinly veiled excuse for neverending martial law. He wants freedom, not Power, and he has no hope in saving a world that was doomed to conflict from the start.

Unfortunately for Walter, fate has different plans. His entire life will come crashing down as the Truth reveals itself. He is harboring not only the greatest... but most terrible ability in existence. The very key to Power itself.

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There are perils of reviewing web fiction very early in its lifetime.  Creep has twelve chapters and not terribly much more than twenty thounsand words to its name.  In the web serial world, that's scarcely anything at all.

But, particularly given the tame length of the author's other serials, it's enough to get a feel for what Creep will and won't offer, if not enough to be precise about it.

Creep is a super hero story (hardly the most promising of genres), but it has a few good things going for it: the concept of a superhero draft, a protagonist with no desire for heroics, and a power that wouldn't get a second glance in a body horror fic.  Certainly nothing that's going to blow you away with its creativity.  But there are compliments to be given for venturing on the frontier rather than old world, even if it's no terra ignota.

But let's going into what Creep does well and what it doesn't.  It's clear that this story aims to be a pulpy romp, and plot is the skeleton of pulp.  And that is a target which Creep cleanly snipes; scene-by-scene progression of Creep is paced whip quick and not a chapter goes by before the story is thrust on along or undergoes some new development.  The weakest point, plotwise, is that the motivations behind events aren't always the clearest, and occasionally leaves one furrowing their brow.  And besides that, the fast pace is a double-edged; in places, the ideas and almost fly by half developed, and it leaves the story oddly proportioned.  (The 11th chapter particularly comes to mind here.)  But it's worth remarking that Creep was able to hook me by the end of the first chapter.  And it's worth remarking that Creep is consistently able to get me properly hyped for a fight.

Of character, I've already mentioned that the motivations aren't always the most cogent.  Walter in particularly is somewhat bemusing in this regard; despite being the narrator, his intentions are occasionally obscured for dramatic effect.  Some find stories like this frustrating, but I don't quite mind it.  It has, however, lead to beats where I have read back over a passage to get a grip on what the protagonist himself is feeling and why.  I don't want this to sound more critical than is warranted, however: Creep's characters are good.  It's always worth commenting on when an author can get you to admire a character in only a few scenes.  And again, Creep hits this target dead center; dialogue between characters is bouncy and entertaining.  But the great characterization is not uniform; while the heroes are admirable (even when they conflict with the protag), the villains are scarcely more than human shaped obstacles.  It's certainly not out of place, for the villains of a super serial to be rationed a punch rather than an argument, but it is disapointing.  As the serial goes on, I expect no one will remember the villains from the first arc (save Old Hickory himself, perhaps), and I think that's a shame.  I will grant that this makes some sense; the villains of the first arc are, in fact, human-shaped obstacles, and aren't the real antagonists.  Still, I gripe.

Most prospective readers would do well to skip this next paragraph, as it's a point few are snobbish enough to care about.  Personally, I believe where Creep falls flattest of all in it's prose.  I've gotten hundreds of words into review without mentioning the impressive fact that Creep has been updating on the daily with full, 8-10 page chapters.  It's certainly admirable, but it shows. The style of this serial is quite plain, and though it never gets so bad as to be amateurish or cringey, or even get in the way of the story, the prose does little more than allow the story to happen.   In places you can see the text try and reach for some phrasing more accomplished than stating it obvious, but you could count on one hand the lines that manage to be inspiring — if you're being generous.  I will grant that Creep does stay in its range, for the most part, engaging primarily in street level scuffles and mundane drama that does not suffer for the workman style.  Yet the protagonist nonetheless has a power which probes and enlargens the boundaries of human experience, and one would wish it could report back something more impressive than "Death was a new experience for me."

(I am being harsh.  It's a defensible line, becasue Creep affects that soyishly modern sardonic, ironic tone, and you can't in good faith critize a story for reaching for humor when that's in its DNA.  But alas.)

O average web serial reader, you could stop skimming now.  Or perhaps not.  The last thing I will talk about is the themes of Creep.  Themes are for eight grade book reports, yes, but Creep is overt enough about its philosophical underbelly that it's worth a word of warning.  If you're the type who has complaints of 'pretentiousness' on hair trigger, Creep may irritate you.  The quibbles about the plainness of Creep's prose rears up again here, for the serial is neither subtle enough nor novel enough that its protracted discussions of society, good and evil, freedom and binaries have any plausible deniability.  It avoids bewing trite or ostentatious, and if you're willing to engage with it, it's not bad thought food.  Honestly, I would easily recommend Creep to those readers looking for fiction with something to say, without being so cloistered you have to do a whole literary analysis to realize what that something is.

All that said, do I recommend Creep?  Of course I do.  It's highly accessible and engaging bit of web fiction.  It has enough going on, and it has something interesting to say without floundering in the telling.  Creep isn't for everyone, I will admit.  But, I venture, it is for most people, and I encourage about anyone who wants a solid, gritty superhero story to give it a good go.

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The thing that I like the most about this novel is the MC. To be more specific, I like his power. I have seen similar abilities, but none with this much potential, and I really cant wait to see how he will progress from now on.

I also like how he changed his view on life after his experiences, especially when he went to the beach, the place where he had his revelation and made his resolve, and where he understood what he really wanted from life, and realized how everything changed and nothing will ever be the same.

That said, I think that the author was too prolix when he explained his changes - for example I skipped most of his conversation with Rusty.

I also haven't understood his objectives, aside from the "become more" part and the place where he wants to go, I have not seen him making any particular plan. He may be still thinking about it but that's exactly a part where I believe the author should be more prolix, because I think a reader would want to see what the MC will work for and how, and if, his objectives will be realized.(Edit: he exposed his thoughts later so don't consider this point)

I haven't noticed any grammar error, though I admit that I haven't paid much attention to punctuation and the like.

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So... I can see myself in this character. And I suppose that's something some authors want to go for and some want to stay away from, but I can only tell you about my experience.

 

He absolutely wants NOTHING to do with his present situation, and I can't imagine there are too many people who have no idea what that's like. And I love it.

 

He hasn't yet faced too much considering there are only four chapters as of yet but I'm expecting great things from this story. Our protagonist is someone who stands at the edge of being a great hero or being labeled a terrible villain and regardless of his choice, I look forward to the result.

hi&hello
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Props for Morals... and the potential lack there of

Reviewed at: 14. A Hero Sets Out On His Adventure

I like it. The MC is belivible and other Charecters as well (though none have really been around for long). It's early days I guess so I don't want to make solid judgments but what I will say I that I like the discussion of morality and philosophical discussions/quandaries in general so I thought the story deserves props for what it's achieved so far. It's a story about good and evil; the natur of villainy and heroics; there's potential there and even if the execution may eventually fall flat I think props should be given for trying and for doing a pretty bang up job so far. Even if some parts are oddly phrased and confusing, the ambiguity of these sections are also a kind of strength.

That's all I can think to say right now. Good luck author, and readers, give the story a try.

MrHrulgin
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It's just so odd. It travels far afield into unexpected realms of philosophy. I can't explain it, but I like it. 

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The most potential I've seen in a while

Reviewed at: 6. The New Hero's First Kerfuffle

It's been about a week since creep's debut, and we've already gotten a surplus of creativeness and originality, in my opinion, an oversaturated genre. The way it diverts the superhero genre and puts it on its head is very interesting, and Walter is probably one of the most interesting superhero protagonists I've seen thus far. He isn't the type that thrives or even enjoys the super-powered life, and his power is far from glamorous.

I'll most likely be editing this review once the story has progressed more, but I wanted to congratulate Shaeor and sing his praises, as well as give critique for what is to come. Hopefully this goes in more places than the usual 'joins superhero team, finds bad guy, fights bad guy, lives happily ever after as superhero' scenario.

All in all, very promising. Keep it up.

domestos
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I am only on chapter 2 (all that has been released) but it is a decent read so far. Decently written with no obvious spelling or grammatical mistakes.

Curious to see how the story pans out.

Atreivahavi
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Don't drop until you finish first 10 chapter

Reviewed at: 10. A Hero Visits the Underworld

An interesting and fluent story. (Yeah the world seems like Boku no Hero Academia's but much more realistic.) Mc has a real personality and surprisingly not an idiot. I am pretty sure it will hit top fictions sooner or later. Give it a chance.