Spiteful Healer

by Hakurai

In the year 2090, technology has advanced to the point where Simulation Boxes, (Sim Box for short) are common place, allowing for the user to link up their brain's neural network to a full dive Simulation. While initially used for educational purposes, recently a large gaming company, Averon, released a fully fledged immersive MMORPG simulation where users can become anyone they desire, level up, choose their class, and become a hero or a villain. The name of this simulation is The Shattered World Online. 

Eli Winters had no interest in playing it. His father, a jobless bum who spent his entire life playing games in the hope of becoming a famous player or streamer, was able to use the release of The Shattered World Online to gain wealth and fame, quickly becoming the number one player and a household name as the game took the world by storm. He immediately abandoned Eli and his mother in favor of being with someone from his guild, despite his mother having worked two jobs to support them and raise Eli by herself. Eli had nothing but spite for his father and the game. 

When Eli's best friend convinces him to try out the game, his father's fame begins to interfere, culminating in him being singled out and shunned by his peers, and his father offering to pay for his university tuition in return for Eli hiding their relationship and quitting the game. Instead of complying with his father's wishes, Eli decides to prove to everyone how useless a guy his father is by challenging him that if Eli is able to surpass him in the game world he must delete his account and quit his streaming career. His father accepts the challenge believing his son to be useless at games - but Eli will soon show him just how ambitious a spiteful person can be. 

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1: Scholarship ago
Chapter 2: Character Creation ago
Chapter 3: Gear Up ago
Chapter 4: Orm Forest ago
Chapter 5: Whistle While You Work ago
Chapter 6: Efficiency is King ago
Chapter 7: A Quick Study ago
Chapter 8: The Interview ago
Chapter 9: Showmanship ago
Chapter 10: Pacifism ago
Chapter 11: Fruits of Labor ago
Chapter 12: Frenemies ago
Chapter 13: Worlds ago
Chapter 14: A Mans Fight ago
Chapter 15: Spicing it Up ago
Chapter 16: Stretch Goals ago
Chapter 17: Selena ago
Chapter 18: The Boar King ago
Chapter 19: Lumberjack ago
Chapter 20: Neslea ago
Chapter 21: Rockin' Rockjaws ago
Chapter 22: Eirene's Request ago
Chapter 23: Agent Winter, Priest Detective ago
Chapter 24: Questionable Ethics ago
Chapter 25: Preparations ago
Chapter 26: Ultimatum ago
Chapter 27: The Filter ago
Chapter 28: The Ladder ago
Chapter 29: First to Fall ago
Chapter 30: Opportunist ago
Chapter 31: Proposal ago
Chapter 32: Difficult Decisions ago
Chapter 33: Darxon Hideout Part 1 ago
Chapter 34: Darxon Hideout Part 2 ago
Chapter 35: Darxon Hideout Part 3 ago
Chapter 36: Darxon Hideout Part 4 ago
Chapter 37: Darxon Hideout Part 5 ago
Chapter 38: Darxon Hideout Part 6 ago

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Hashthree
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The premise of the story and the motivations of the MC are different than a lot of others on RR. Normally a lurker but I felt the need to review because the other reviews look like they just read the summary before reviewing. 

There's no truck-san taking the MC to a new world, and there are no huge exposition dumps explaining the world. Instead you follow the MC and he serves as an audience character to learn the about the real world and the VR world, you discover things as he discovers them and it makes it fun to follow along his journey.

The characters and their motivations are believable, even the side characters react and act in a believable manner and so far none have felt like they are just there to serve the plot. The little bit of romance in the story so far is done well, there aren't any cringy harem vibes and the female characters have real personalities. 

The author does a good job of slowly showing you the relationship between the MC and his father rather than telling you about it. In general there's a lot of showing and not telling which helps the story keep flowing forward.

As for the VR game world and its game rules, they're simple and easy to follow, its light on the numbers so you don't need a spreadsheet to keep track of whats going on. Despite the 'spiteful' motivations behind the sometimes angsty MC, he thinks logically within his means and it's predominantly done in a lighthearted manner with plenty of jokes thrown in, but not enough to detract from the more serious encounters.

The Author has been updating daily since they've started back up, and the chapters are consistantly good in quality and much lengthier than other daily updated stories, so you can tell they are putting in a lot of effort into the story.

I highly recommend reading this if you like to read LitRPGs with believable characters that are not over-the-top.

Hephaestus
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So far it seems like a fairly good story with a good background and plot along with a decent plan going forward the only bad thing is pretty slow release times and it looks like the author went AWOL 12 months ago and randomly came back so not sure if that's going to happen again.

Spacemaster
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So far really GOOD! LOVE IT!

Binged through the end. Hope it keeps updating fast. Will update when the story progresses further, but so far its moving along great! Please keep updating daily!

MC better kick his dads ASS, the guy is completely full of himself. Also I <3 Selena.

I noticed the author also listens to the comments and changes parts of the story based on good feedback which is a huge plus for me! 

If you make it to chapter 5, you probably won't stop till you get up to date.

Bailey Lowe
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This story so far has me intrigued, I'm fully invested in the world and abilities the author has set up and the characters feel well realized and beleivable enough to make a great cast further down the line.

I feel like I've been waiting for a story like this one. The MC is smart enough to take advantage of the world they're in and make their own opportunities for exploiting the power sytem instead of stumbling across opportunities haphazardly.

It's easy to root for the MC and their goals, I think if you can enjoy a well planned path to revenge with some really fun rpg themes and hopefully plenty of crafting then this story is for you.

mask19
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I'm impressed with the story so far. The MC is talented, smart, and seems to have a plan on how to game the system to become a top player. He does have some dad issues. I am looking forward to how he will interact with his dad. The author did appear to go awol, but if the author countinuea to write at a semi frequent pace I think this story has the potential to be top tiered

ARTA
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The only word to describe this fiction is fantastic. The story was clearly thought out well from the author, and as VR novels go, it's quite enjoyable. In all honesty, I didn't expect myself to enjoy this novel as much as I did. When I first binged it and found myself at the latest chapter, it was like I some druggie waiting for his next fix. I didn't even know what to do with myself while awaiting the next chapter. The characters, setting, and even game mechanics aware just that good.

Is this story some deep, thought provoking material that must be read with the utmost care? No. It's just a nice read that gets you invested in what's happening and makes you feel like you're there with the main protagonist, Winter. You can empathize with him and his hate for his father, and I admittedly cheered like a little girl whenever he achieved success in earning a new skill, or showing those around him how overpowered he is. His character build and way of combat (if you can call it that) is also interesting. 

However, things aren't just limited to him, and while some side characters are rather surface level, they hold enough relalism to at least make them believable. 

Overall, a wonderful read that you will not be disappointed by! 

P.S. Author, after having read a certain comment from the story, I now feel like it would be criminal if the protagonist or narrator not once say "Winter is coming!" 

Grimsol1324
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the story is solid and does well to make a distinction between the game world and real life (you know, when the characters aren't doing the opposite). Kinda disappointed that Eli basically fell to the guile of that female student despite it being stated he was familiar with her type, would've thought that translated to "she won't get a rise out of me so easily," but its not a huge deal.

Mightsin
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What a great start! Loving following Eli and his friend's adventures so far. Very interesting world-building in both VR and RL brings the story a sense of completeness. The plot armour holds strong for the MC, but the reasoning behind it come off as reasonable and justified. What is any great tale or adventure, but tests of character mixed with moments of skill, luck, and effort! Looking forward to reading more!

Shickler
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It maybe too early to judge, but...

Reviewed at: Chapter 4: Orm Forest

Basically, his dad left their family after what they put up with him, just because he got lucky, and has mansion now, there's more to it than that, but, seriously? Just because they don't play your favourite game with you(mind you, the game is just 6 months old, and the equipments he used was his wife's), you are permitted to toss them away? BULLSHIT. Such an ungrateful dick. And his mom? How weak can she be tolet that happen? My mom would punch dad's guts out if he tries that. 

Now to the game. It almost made sense. ALMOST. Why? A fully immersive game. That's great, but for everyone to like it? For it to be the only game to have such feature? Stupid. Advertised as "Be whatever you want in game". And it's in an old english magical fantasy, what if I want to be god, would you let me do that? What if I want to be a robot. Can the blacksmiths let me do that? Why is there no other game that uses the same engine but with different genre, like laser shooting in an impossibly explorable universe. Be an assassin in gothic cities. And, a purely wooden shield, is plausible. But COPPER, a metal that is used for jewelry, is being used to make swords in the medieval period? It's supposed to be IMMERSIVE, but the skills let you aim better, or use your bow better as you progress your skill. It should be inversed. Skill, which should only make your damage output better, improve as your affinity with your weapon improve, not the other way around. It breaks immersion. Also, IMMERSION AND COMPETITION DO NOT MIX WELL, some players would grind level, or grind players[PK]. What if some dude liked the immersive graphics and feelings, he goes RPing but gets ganked by some grinding madmen.

The real world, all the interviewers don't seem professional to me. THEY FUCKING FAILED A GUY WHO GETS PERFECT SCORES, A GENIUS JUST BECAUSE HE SPIT FACTS ABOUT THEIR IDOL! (and he doesn't play the game, same bullshit their idol spouted. Is he a spiritual leader?) If I were their superiors, I would fire them. I-FUCKING-mmediately. I don't  know if the gaming industry was successful or just outright retarded. Everyone, professional or not, liked the game, and there's no copycat? no revisions? The sun is gonna rise from the west, I tell you.

The grammar, it's not bad. Some spelling mistakes here and there, some misplaced apostrophes, but no major problems, you seem to know what you mean and you deliver it properly.

TL;DR World building sucks, but those are always overlooked in VRMMOs. Would be better to not introduce the world too much, and don't over advertise your game.

RainbowFox
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The begining of this story has a logic hole. The MC's father divorced his mother after gaining money and recognition. His father would need to pay a lot of money because of this divorce. He is a public person after all. He would also need to pay for his child's school/university if he don't want to destroy his public image. The MC do a lot of stupid things. He wants to be a doctor??? With his anger managment issues I wouldn't want him as my doctor. One thing is very nice, his problem with father creates a lot of room for MC growth unless he stays an angry kid whole time.