Zhanye Black, to be a Superstar in Another World.

by Zhanye

Original ONGOING Comedy Contemporary Drama Romance GameLit LitRPG Male Lead Reincarnation School Life Slice of Life

A normal boy is reborn in the body of a chubby that has the same name as his, Zhanye Black. But in this strange world, Zy will use his new System to become famous. From a fatty guy, that streams Counter-Strike from his bedroom to a Celestial Prince that will have his face on every corner of the country.

This is a Magical Realism/Slice of Life.

** Disclaimer: The book cover design isn't mine, if the author wants me to remove, please email [email protected] I will remove. **

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Saphyron
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Pretty good story, but Grammar hurts it quite badly.

Reviewed at: 04 – Status

Slice of life story, that until now is quite good, but as the author mentions himself, and is quite clear just from reading a few lines, he is horrendous at spelling, which is a shame cause I actually quite enjoy this story.

Author if you can, please get the addon for your browser named Grammarly. And have all your text run through Office Word as well. It saddens me to see such bad grammar.

Tejas Khandwekar
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Liked it very much. Keep up the good work. I really like these kind of novels amd you did a great job in writing it

tzeneth
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Interesting for me but rough to read

Reviewed at: 38 - Are you the singer?

I would not describe this story as great or amazing. The concept is interesting and scratches an itch I have for some "build your stardom" up type reincarnator stories. The problems arise from the execution.

Story and Character: They're ok. I haven't seen any interesting twists or extra depths to characters that make them stand out. The character and story isn't bad but it's not something I'll probably long after I finish the story. They serve their purpose but do little more.

Style: I would have given this a 3 as well but in recent chapters there are these random first person sections that become exposition dumps of a person telling who they are and then serving their purpose in the story until you know they are just going to disappear. This is especially jarring because this story was primarily first person from the MC's perspective until these random other sections. I don't think they add enough for the cost they engender, which is why I knocked this down a point.

Grammar: Paired with style is grammar which gives heavy indication that English is likely not the author's first language. There are many awkward phrases, syntax errors (incorrect ordering of words), and just bizarre sentences that make no sense. I remember reading something along the lines of "With a giving horse, do not look at hour teeth" and was trying to figure out what I was reading. My best interpretation was that this was supposed to be the phrase "Don't look a gift horse in the mouth" but it talked about "your teeth" rather than the horse's mouth, so your guess is as good as mine. Things like this appear which detract from both grammar and style.

Conclusion: I do not recommend this story to most people unless it gets a couple passes through either an editor or some friendly proofreaders unless you have a modern day stardom based reincarnator itch to scratch. It does that adequately but that's about it.