Undying Empire

by Scott Edwards

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Psychological Anti-Hero Lead Female Lead GameLit Grimdark Multiple Lead Characters Non-Human lead Portal Fantasy / Isekai Slice of Life Strategy Strong Lead Supernatural War and Military
Warning This fiction contains:
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Elinor is just a sixteen-year-old goth going through some abnormal teenage drama; her parents are involved in giving some 'unwanted' humanitarian aid to Venezuela, and they're dragging their daughter along to expand her world view ... much to her displeasure.

The jungle sucks and the bus has no air conditioning, and great, she's kidnapped ... The Oscillation happens, monsters attack ... she's a monster. Now, she's in a foreign world, fighting to survive.

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MechaHeart
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While yes, I'm sure there's some things that Scott could work on in his writing, he always amazed me with his dedication to researching everything for his novels.

 

I've read up to his latest Patreon chapters, and the amount of philosophy and we'll thought out ideas impress me. These novels are not just whimsical power fantasies. They are flawed characters in unjust situations that make the best of what they've got. Well thought out in comparison to a lot of other web novels I've read. Rather than just write a chapter without much thought, Scott has been crafting a wide web of stories which obviously have a great plan to them.

 

I enjoy reading Scott's novels and look forward to seeing what comes next. 

animetine16
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Finally a worthy Undead Empires Novel

Reviewed at: B1 — 8. Demon

Thank you for the gracious gift of this novel. It is a shining light in a bysmal tunnel of this site. A proper undead empire novel. HA, cant wait for this book to gain chapters. Keep with it, you are doing great! 

Richard Dain
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Started reading on a whim, liking it a lot.

Reviewed at: B1 — 8. Demon

This story has a great opening act, and everything is done very well upto this point. But we're reaching the end of the opening act, and I've seen many stories falter at that point. We're not there yet, so 5 stars. Perhaps I'll come and lower it later though.

That_guy
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Yep, as a story should be, intresting. 

 

Valmorious
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Write MORE, SLAVE!! *Grabs Ball & Chain*

Reviewed at: B1 — 8. Demon

TL:DR:

It's amazing (look at the stars!).  Necromancy, the Undead, Monsters, Magic, WITCHCRAFT (can you tell how much I like that part?).   Just read it and enjoy.  =))

Overview:

I've been following Scott's works for a while now, and I've got to say, there are some things I like and some things I don't.  Huh?  Then why the 5-stars across the board?  Well, simply because it's that good!

Scott doesn't shy away from polarizing topics but presents it in a way that makes it hard to argue, and if you read further into it then it gets so dang complicated and thought-provoking!  ATM gets really complicated, but UE is much less so.  I've come to really enjoy Scott's way of writing ... even if I want more ... MORE!!  Still ... with so many serials and trying to live a life ... I get it.  *kicks a stone in frustration*

Style:

Scott writes in 3rd Person Limited, which gives us an amazing look into the mind and emotions of the MC's.  Now, Scott has the proclivity to occasionally move to a new POV other than the MC, which can be annoying at times, but in hindsight, it was always nice later (reading the works over again).

Italics ... Italics ... he uses italics to indicate when you're inside the character's head ... WHY HASN'T ANYONE ELSE DONE THIS?!?!  Seriously, it makes it so easy to transition.  Amazing.

*Sucks in breath* Okay ... the elephant in the room ... he goes into a lot of depth in certain areas which, yes, makes it delicious, but when you look back and see how much has happened (not as much as you might think for the word count), you scratch you head like ... huh.  Now, that's not to say it's bad, but just an observation.  It just makes you want him to write more.

Gaming System Style:

Scott uses a more semi-hidden system approach, and it's a good thing because it would be so flippin' hard to keep track of ... it's freaking complicated and amazing.  You get some minimal information here and there, a lot less than TO, but that's understandable, I mean, not much time has passed ... maybe like 2 hours max so far (chapter 8).

If you like a less bulky and more subtle seamless Game System style, then you should like this.

Story:

Now, we TO vets (hehe, I'm a vet) know a lot more about what's about to go down after the Prelude (introduction to our MC and her personality ... I'll get to that in the character score).  We know The Oscillation will happen and what that means.

We're introduced instantly to a part of The Oscillation universe that we're JUST going to see in his other serial (hype!).  Getting a sneak peek of what's going to happen is amazing and crazy!  Not saying too much, we got portal fantasy in this *****!

Necromancy, Witchcraft, Doom Guards, blood, gore ... did I mention Witchcraft (it's awesome!) ... crazy monsters ... yeah, check!

Grammar:

Scott does really well at fixing things when pointed out and trying to keep everything well presented.  He's above 99% of RR authors (I know, not a high bar, but it's pretty good!).

There is some cursing in it like the D-word mainly, but Elinor seems fairly chill and it's only like once or twice from what I remember (I mean, B1 of the non-clean version of The Oscillation was pretty mouthy!).

Character Score:

Okay, let me get on my soapbox here *ahem* ... this is where Scott's works shine ... like the brightest star!  He can make you love and hate a character ... the twist in ATM was pretty amazing ... like insane how he pulled that off.  I'm actually rooting for a character that I used to think was complete scum!

In the beginning, you get a really good look at Elinor and her life with her parents (teenagers, am I right?!) before things pop-off in chapter 1.  Elinor's personality starts to drastically change after ... well, it's kind of obvious from the picture she turns into some kind of undead creature *cough*

Spoiler: Spoiler

 *cough*

Anyways, she's a fun character to follow as she grows more cold and angry because of ... reasons >.> ... <.< eh, yeah ... she's pretty fun.

P.S. Chapter 8 gives some amazing insight into The Oscillation event and how it is that people changed ... not who did it (if anyone did it at all ... that's still a mystery ... hmm).  However, you do learn some cool aspects that our main girls in The Oscillation have no clue about.