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They should have fought back. They felt his disdain, but no one wanted to believed - believe that they were never loved. That they can just appease him again. Sacrifice their lives again. Conquered their enemies again. Built wonders for his majesty again. And when they finally accepted the truth, it brought them to their knees as his machines burned down their wonders and reduced them back into animals.
But there was still hope. The Stellars told of our survival. Our downfall was just the beginning. Our regression into animals was merely a delay. At the time, our people were split into different tribes. Before the doors to the infinite sea are open. There will be a child born to stand against his machines, born to challenge his majesty. And with a sword in one hand and a scepter on the other, that child - that hero, will lead his kingdom. The kingdom of goblins.
Sun, the goblin child born to save all of goblin kind. A former human from an unknown world died and reborn with little memory of his past. Join him as he takes on the world, make new friends, uncover the secret of his past, and lead the goblin kind out from the darkness.
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Review at vol 4 ch 3.
Story has excellent potential. I really wanted to rate higher, but glaring grammatical and spelling errors stand in the way.
The story was good enough for me to overlook those even reading up until volume 4. The story is entertaining and seems like the author put a lot of time and attention into writing it. Unfortunately, it doesn't appear that any editing was done. I would encourage any readers who are thinking of taking up this novel to do so, but to do so with the understanding this is a rough draft, likely the first draft.
If you're someone who can easily overlook spelling and grammar, then this will likely be a good read for you.
On the other hand, if you're someone who will get jolted out of the story when you come across a typo, please wait until it's edited more.
This isn't a bad take on the genre. Interesting elements but the intellectual changes in the "halfbreeds" are wildly inconsistent - sometimes they are half imbeciles with guttural thinking and at other times are almost "super goblins". Very jarring but easy to fix - explain how they get smarter and then keep them at a consistent level of conversation.
This is the sort of story I kinda hate to leave a negative review of, cause there's a potential buried inside the shit storm for a quality story. I can tell it's there, somehow, even though it's buried in a rather large pile of shit. Basically story is riddled with flaws. From poor grammar, to poor literary techniques, to poor narration/description and characters.
1. Very poor grammar/sentance structure and spelling. It was glaring enough at times that I had issues following the meaning of a sentance, and was forced to often reread a sentance two or three times in an attempt to discern what was being said. Not only that but the point of view the audience has constantly changes... in addition to the tense being used changing. Sometimes the protagonist refers to himself as 'I'. "I saw this, I heard that" etc. Other times it's "Sun did this, Sun did that" and you actually can't tell whose seeing what, are we looking through the eyes of another character? Sometimes? Maybe? It certainly doesn't feel like birds-eye narration but it often reads like it is and it's absolutely glaring and hard to read.
2. Somewhat related to one, the "flow" of both conversations and narration was very poor. I actually found I had an easier time heavily skim reading the content, as actually trying to read each sentance word for word was like wading through a bog in heavy mist. Hard work and just as likely to get you lost and confused as any further along.
3. While this review is early, only as of Vol. 2 Chapter 5, so far all introduced characters seem bland.
4. The first "big" conflict plays out in chapter 7... then again it's repeated from the perspective of one of the protagonists 'bros' in chapter 8.... then again in 9...... and.... AGAIN.... in 10.... Basically we spend 4 chapters seeing 4 duels that all basically boil down to the same thing. Gobbo punch Gobbo "you little shite I'll kill you" Repeat. For. 4. Chapters.
5. I felt like the "sexual content" was frankly uncessary, we get the setting, some women are raped and give birth to goblin kids, one of which is the protagonist. That okay I guess for the prologue event to the story, what I found gratuitous was the amont of time spent talking about feeding and breasts. I honestly fail to see what the first few chapters really contribute to the story.
Pro tip for all authors. Heavy gruesomeness in description and content =/= equal writing a 'good' or 'intense' or 'mature' story. Far from it. Some of the most haunting things i've read have only made passing reference, or left the audience to infer the events or things that occured to the characters in their stories or in the past. People often say "show don't tell" but never actually say how to do that in literature. Well, it's like normal life, it's allowing people to read between the lines. It's giving your audience the credit of assuming their smart enough to get the clues you drop in your story.
Slamming them over the head with gratuitious R rated content is not always beneficial.
The story starts out good but afterwards there is no progress. You wait and wait but nothing that matters really happens. The ineractions are akward the fight with their enemy and in the next chapter it's as if the forgot that they have an enemy.
I don't know if the author just wants to show how bad the goblins speak but always having this broken language is annonying.
The title says it all.
The story is decent and it has everything I said in the title.
I'm not a huge fan of every character having a solid backstory and a romantic relationship, but it seems to be fine as long as the story keeps progressing.
No HUGE Grammer issues - as in its completely serviceable and the author puts enough time into his writing that I felt like I should continue reading.
I feel like I get less of what the mc thinks and much more of what other characters think of him now than in the beginning. No MAJOR character death yet and the fight scenes seem a bit confusing to follow, but the endings have no unexpected twists. No random power that mc had but was hiding. No random gift to get op.
What is a bit off putting if I think about it is that the regular goblins seemed like idiots with no cognitive capacity in the beginning, but now have complex feelings and thoughts. All of this without evolution, just 'civilized language'.
All in all, worth reading if you want a happy and righteous mc built for leadership. The powerups are a bit predictable and there is bit too much backstory and flashback for me, but the story moves fast enough for it to be okay. There is a very small amount of profanity and almost next to no sexual content, but the tags probably need to be there for some snowflakes.
As of wirting this, this story has less than 3*'s. I'm not certain why. It's certainly not a perfect story, but it's still good.
The MC's pre-reincarnated backstory is very odd. I'm not certain I understand it. I think it really has more to do with his 'nice guy' personality than anything, so until more is revealed, I'm not considering it a big deal.
There's a big world out there, and we're only getting really tiny glimpses of it, as only the MC's mother really has anything to offer in that regards. We learn a small amount about other Goblins, but everything is mostly on our newborn MC. And like most portrayals of them, Goblins are pretty horrible creatures.
There have been a decent number of 'MC is a monster' stories lately, and I think this one deserves a chance.
This is one of those stories that you want to enjoy. The premise is fun and the plot promises alot of interesting activties.
Unfortunately, the story in its current version is plagued by a confusing setting, questionable characthers, and stilted flow.
We are introduced to a goblin village where rape, starvation, casual death, and other attributes of a tribulistic village are clearly presented. However, the nature of this village quickly comes into question as idea more attributed to medieval fiedoms are introduced such as retainers, forts, and hygiene (including showers). Furthermore, the main characther who from birth demonstrates tactical skills, combat experience, and reading/writing comprehension is not treated like a god or witch but rather a slightly smarter child. This alludes to a lack of respect/fear for the mystical which does not make sense in such a pre-modern society. All up the environment seems to shift to suit the story rather then the environment being set and the story adapting to it.
This plot over setting first is also reflected in the characthers most prominantely the goblin chief and the MC's mother. The author took on a difficult characther type/relationship by using an imprisoned rape victim as the mother. Such a painful background normally presents an extreme characther but it quite muted here. Her engagements are 'awkward' not painful or depressing. Alternatively the Goblin Chief greedy mindset does not make sense with his behaviour. He is constantly worried about threats but leaves them alone even when perfect opportunities present themselves.
The stilted flow has been discussed alot by previous reviewers. Its a difficult problem that alot of books face and in this case it seems the author has decide to just focus on getting things down on paper. It make sense but it does emphaises a first draft feel.
If you have read this far into this review please understand that I am not trying to put down the author work. Joshua has done a great job writing so much in only 16 months and what I have read despite my critiques has been incredibly enjoyable. Whilst I cannot say this work is a masterpiece it is solid work.