The Fragmented Six (Six Chances)

by elmerwynn

What would you do if your life, memories, and feelings were suddenly tied to another person?
Six people. One life.

A spoiled prince haunted by a ghost. A big city swindler with a knack for illusions. A cold soldier with a sharp eye. A pirate with a few screws loose. A chieftain’s bookish daughter with carefully bandaged hands. A peacekeeping agent with an eye for vengeance.

After simultaneously knocking on death’s door, these six find themselves psychically connected across national lines. Tensions rise between them and between their respective countries, which are recovering from a long war over the mysterious vitae—an energy source harvested and utilized in weapons and engines called conductors. Loyalty, memory, and sense of self blur as conspiracies encroach.

Assassination attempts, underground weapons dealings, border conflicts, tales of terrifying beasts, and a terrorist organization called ELPIS.

—Everything is connected. Nothing is coincidental. The spark has ignited…!


Part I: The Synchronized Six  [COMPLETE]
Part II: The Illusionary Six  [COMPLETE / (Deep editing)]
Part III: The Fragmented Six [ONGOING]

In-depth blurbs for each part within.
Contains found family, magitech, parallel plotlines that converge, conspiracies, morally gray characters, Chekhov's guns, and a lot of character development.

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Chapter Name Release Date
Traveling Author's Note / Extras [Art, Cover, Media] ago
(1) Part I | 0.1, 0.2 : Prince, Swindler ago
(2) Part I | 0.3, 0.4 : Soldier, Pirate ago
(3) Part I | 0.5, 0.6: Chieftain Daughter, Peacekeeper ago
(4) Part I | 1.1: Chance Connection ago
(5) Part I | 1.2 : Morello Introduction ago
(6) Part I | 1.3: Waltz Target ago
(7) Part I | 1.4: Gloria Tango ago
(8) Part I | 1.5: Imamu Snip ago
(9) Part I | 1.6: Jericho Track ago
(10) Part I | 1.[]: Underground Doctor on the Battlefield ago
(11) Part I | 2.1: Chance Deflection ago
(12) Part I | 2.2: Morello Verse ago
(13) Part I | 2.3: Waltz Aim ago
(14): Part I | 2.4: Gloria Jive ago
(15) Part I | 2.5: Imamu Prune ago
(16) Part I | 2.6: Jericho Raid ago
(17) Part I | 2.[]: Boy in the Capital ago
(18) Part I | 3.1: Chance Detection ago
(19) Part I | 3.2: Morello Chorus ago
(20) Part I | 3.3: Waltz Trigger ago
(21) Part I | 3.4: Gloria Waltz ago
(22) Part I | 3.5: Imamu Snap ago
(23) Part I | 3.6: Jericho Brutality ago
(24) Part I | 3.[]: Convergence ago
(25) Part I | 4.1: Chance Direction ago
(26) Part I | 4.2: Morello Bridge ago
(27) Part I | 4.3: Waltz Misfire ago
(28) Part I | 4.4: Gloria Twist ago
(29) Part I | 4.5: Imamu Aeriation ago
(30) Part I | 4.[]: Peacekeeper on the Verge ago
(31) Part I | 5.1: Chance Rejection ago
(32) Part I | 5.2: Morello Conclusion ago
(33) Part I | 5.3: Waltz Lock-on ago
(34) Part I | 5.4: GOLDEN BEAST ago
(35) Part I | 5.5: Imamu Cultivar ago
(36) Part I | 6a: Chance Ignition ago
(37) Part I | 6b: Crimson Volition ago
(38) Part I | 6c: Outsiders Looking In • Part I End ago
(39) Part II | 7.0: A Broker's Concern (Malignità) ago
(40) Part II | 7.1: Olive's Bravery (Codardia) ago
(41) Part II | 7.2: Cadence's Family (Conoscenti) ago
(42) Part II | 7.3: Werner's Effficiency (Esitazione) ago
(43) Part II | 7.4: Maria's Hunt (Cacciatore) ago
(44) Part II | 7.5: Atienna's Journey (Soggiorno) ago
(45) Part II | 7.6: Jericho's Peace (Guerra) ago
(46) Part II | 7.[]: A Terrorist's Hate (Amore) ago
(47) Part II | 8.1: Cadence's Honor (Dishonore) ago
(48) Part II | 8.2: Olive’s Stagnation (Accelerazione) ago
(49) Part II | 8.3: Werner’s Diligence (Rilassamento) ago
(50) Part II | 8.4: Maria's Capture (Fuga) ago
(51) Part II | 8.5: Jericho's Reunion (Seperazione) ago
(52) Part II | 8.6: Atienna's Warmth (Refreddato) ago
(53) Part II | 8.[]: An Inheritor's Greed (Generosita) ago
(54) Part II | 9.1-1: Cadence's Stumble (Spirale) ago
(55) Part II | 9.1-2: Cadence's Love (Desiderio) ago
(56) Part II | 9.2: Olive's Naivety (Sapienza) ago
(57) Part II | 9.3: Werner's Stand (Crollo) ago
(58) Part II | 9.4: Maria's Tale (Storia) ago
(59) Part II | 9.5: Atienna’s Induction (Deduzione) ago
(60) Part II | 9.6: Jericho's (Lost) Raziocinio ago
(61) Part II | 9.[]-1 : A Soldier’s Promise (di un Amico), 1 ago
(62) Part II | 9.[]-2: A Soldier’s Promise (di un Amico), 2 ago
(63) Part II | 10.[]-1: A Brother’s Greed (Carità) ago
(64) Part II | 10.[]-2: A Brother's Wrath (Pazienza) ago
(65) Part II | 10.1: Olive's Dimming (Fiammata) ago
(66) Part II | 10.2: Cadence's Gambling (Fallacia) ago
(67) Part II | 10.3: Maria's Battling (Riposo) ago
(68) Part II | 10.4: Atienna's Questioning (Riposto) ago
(69) Part II | 10.5: Jericho's Cycling (Vendetta) ago
(70) Part II | 10.( ): The People of Sin City ago
(71) Part II | 11.1: Cadence's (Sincero) Deception ago
(72) Part II | 11.2: Werner's (Fidato) Command ago
(73) Part II | 11.3: Atienna's (Inverso) Heroism ago
(74) Part II | 11.4: Maria's (Primo) Defeat ago
(75) Part II | 11.5: Jericho's (Dicotomico) Hatred ago
(76) Part II : 11.[]: Francis's (Theta's) Singularity ago
(77) Part II | 11.6: Olive’s (Nascosto) Test ago
(78) Part II | 12.1: A Duet Between a Prince and Peacekeeper ago
(79) Part II | 12.2: A Duet Between a Soldier and Advisor ago
(80) Part II | 12.3: A Solo for a Beast ago
(81) Part II | 13a: Copper Cadence ago
(82) Part II | 13b: Solitary Maidens ago
(83) Part II | 13c: Outsiders Laughing Above • Part II End ago
(84) Part III | 14.1: Observer & Peacekeeper, 0000 Unusual Activity ago
(85) Part III | 14.2: Prince & Swindler, 0000 False Ignorance ago
(86) Part III | 14.3: Advisor & Pirate, 0000 Lost Connection ago
(87) Part III | 14.4: Soldier, 0000 Miscalculation ago
(88) Part III | 15.1: Advisor, 0001 Log Open ago
(89) Part III | 15.2: Combat Medic, 0705 Head Trauma ago

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Character driven story with an interesting world

Reviewed at: (28) 4.4: Gloria Twist

Author rewrote the novel and fixed most of my complaints so I updated the review. Old review in spoiler tags.


Style

Writing syle is really good and I enjoyed reading descriptions and flow of the sentences. The story is well guided. Introductory chapters are pretty good, we get the feel for the characters immediatelly, progresses at a good pace and it's easy to follow even though there are six protagonists.


Grammar

For me it was very readable. Maybe I would notice something misspeled/wrong word once per two chapters.

 Story

Story is well thought out. The world is logical and interesting. Vitae is a nice concept, I imagine it as a something between magic in standard fantasy and oil/electricity in our world. And author really thought about how it would affect the world, even though we are not told explicitly, we can see it in the background of how the world functions. Everything seems both believable, logical and strange because it's different from our world.

Character

We have six very different characters. Some I hated, some loved and to some I was indifferent. But they were all craftily made, what they do and how they think makes perfect sense in the world. And their mutual interactions are pure gold. They all seem like a real-life people at this point.


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Plasticpebble22
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Overall 4.5/5: There aren’t many stories like this one on Royal Road. In fact, there aren’t many stories like this out there that I’ve read.  Six people, connected mentally somehow, across several kingdoms.  The premise reminds me of The Way of Kings but the connection is literal, this time.  Each person’s story is intriguing, and I’m excited to keep reading. I’m taking off the .5 because there are just so many names and places to keep track of in this story.

Style 5/5:  The thing that I appreciate the most is that there are so many different tones (six to be exact). Each main character has their own quirks and perspectives, and you can see and hear that as they are interacting with their world. Even the way they respond to their new connection says a lot about who they are.  Honestly, this is incredibly well written.

Story 4.5/5: This is a challenging story idea to pull off. Jumping from six different storylines and six different perspectives in the first few chapters is a challenge, but this author pulls it off and manages to connect each story. Honestly, I’m very impressed.  This is a page-turner if I’ve ever seen one. There is SO MUCH depth to the world (the magic system is in the background of each person's life, and it seems well-thought out and consistent), and I can tell that there are more mysteries to discover. All that said, I’m taking off a .5 rating because I worry that the author is taking on a little too much.  As mentioned earlier, there are just so many characters and places to keep track of…

Grammar 5/5: Very well edited. I couldn’t find any mistakes here.

Character 5/5:  All of these characters are interesting in their own way, and they all feel real. Just the fact that they all almost die in the beginning gives a sense of the plot and intrigue surrounding them and makes me invested in each one of their stories.

czepta
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Impressive world-building and great characters

Reviewed at: (5) Part I | 1.2 : Morello Introduction

This book was a surprising find. It introduces six very unique characters in a way that brings you right into the part of the world they inhabit. The way the characters are introduced and the setting in general reminds me of a classic fantasy JRPG or anime. We have a range of character types including a soldier, a pirate and even a mob enforcer. Some characters interested me more than others but that is always the case when there are many to choose from. I think everyone will have their own favourites.

The world building is impressive to say the least. It feels as though the author spent a lot of time developing it. The Zodiac themed setting really does give me Final Fantasy vibes with a dash of Avatar: The Last Airbender in regards to the magic known as Vitae. These are two of my favourite things so this story is right up my alley.

Not all stories I try peak my interest enough to continue with, but this one definitely has. The clean prose really puts you in the character's heads allowing it to play out with a cinematic flair. Where the story is heading I'm not sure but curious to find out how the connection between these characters plays out and the purpose behind it.

Sea_chelle
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YOU SHOULD BE READING THIS BOOK INSTEAD OF MY REVIEW

Reviewed at: (38): Outsiders Looking In [Part 1 FINALE 3/3]

Hello people of the internet, if you are thinking about reading Chance Ignition to Crimson Volition you really should.

To quickly summarize my thoughts, this story had an interesting well thought out plot and delightful characters. There is a lot to keep track of in the story but it is worth the extra brain power.

From here on out I break down my thoughts on style, story, grammar, and character. I keep it pretty vague so don't worry about spoliers 

Style

The desriptions are well done and they really paint a good picture of the world and scenes. The dialouge is intersting and fun. Pacing felt good.

Story

The plot felt smooth and woven well together. Each sperate plotline of the main characters had importance to the overaching plot and the other plot lines. There were some good plot twists and I enjoyed watching everything unfold. It was clever. 

Also the world was well crafted. There were different cultures, which made it feel more realistic and complex. The energy system of vitae and conducters, made sense and was consistant. 

Grammar

Grammar never got in the way of my reading. Throughout I noticed one maybe two grammar things, a very forgivable amount. I am not the best with grammar, so I could have missed things. Overall it was very good. 

Character 

This is probaly what impressed me most with this book. Having six main characters is a lot but they were balenced well, distinct, expirenced important character growth and were likeable. They all had interesting flaws and vaulable strengths. Part of what kept the pages turing was watching them interact with eachother, there were good dynamics and it was very entertaining. 

Side characters were also quite intersting and likeable. They played important roles in the story and it felt like they mattered. 

Conclusion

Overall this story was highly enjoyable. I laughed, I cried (almost), and I was excited to start every chapter. I couldn't find anything I thought was problematic with the story, so five stars all around. 

Go read.

 

 

 

Graffiti
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Due to my slow rate of reading, I figured this would be the perfect point to do my review without taking ages to catch up (sorry I'm so slow. Busy life lately and I hate it)

 

In a nutshell, though, this story is probably one of the most vividly written and descriptive works I've ever read. I've also learned quite a few words to add to my vocabulary as well as ways to be more descriptive by reading this story, so that's a lesson well received. 

Anyway, on to the important part,

 

Style - I gave it a 5 because everything blends well together. No descriptions feel too long or exaggerated, the pacing of the story keeps you interested without wondering if anything you read will be relevant later, and the usage of starting off with multiple character viewpoints back to back gives you a real picture of the world they live in and what's going on. 

The zodiac sign references are one of my favorite things about this story also! Sagittarius for life. 

Story - The only reason I gave it a 4.5 instead of a 5 is because the initial few chapters can be a bit jarring to start off with and get into. The first 3 chapters detail the viewpoints of 6 different people, of six different occupations, with two different viewpoints with each chapter. While everything afterwards quickly melds everything together, I think it would have been a better approach to focus on one character a chapter or maybe reveal different ones later on?

 

It's difficult for the average person to recall that many characters introduced through text without any visual representation, and people might begin to skim through if they were interested in one character and suddenly found themselves reading about another. 

You have to build up initial attachment before you switch characters, usually, especially if there's multiple like this. Most people can only focus on one major character at a time before transitioning to another.

Beyond that, though, the characters introduced ARE unique and distinctly different. So even if you didn't like or liked one character there's still 5 others for you to choose from!

 

Grammar - Literally nothing wrong here. This story could damn well be a professional novel. 

Character Score - A lot of what I wrote in regards to the story also kinda melded in with the character score too, so I won't repeat it. I will say, though, that there are 6 main characters. All of them are unique and distinct from each other and there's no sense of rehashed personality or experiences. It reminds me of a JRPG party in a sense where the main cast is diverse and unique.

There's high chances that you will like and be interest in at least ONE character. More likely you'll be interested in more than one. 

Werner is still my favorite. That debut chapter with him hit close to home. Soldier 4 Life. 

Favorited this story ^^ will continue to read it along with the plethora of others I have to catch up on. 

Bygonedreams
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Y'all are sleeping on this book! Complex story and complex characters tied together with psychological bow. I loved the little extras after chapters and the recaps helped to keep track of everything. Werner and cadence are  my favorite 

RiverMan09
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Style

The voice is succinct and descriptive, great prose!

Story

It can be a bit jarring at first for the multiple viewpoints but is worth the read to see the payoff. Like the netflix series(Sense8), it has great character interactions.

Grammar

There are some unneeded words but the author certainly knows their vocabulary.

Character

Each character has their own personality and goals. I do agree with others in that it would help if the author described the characters.

templerun1000
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Leaving a review now since it popped on trending. 

Overall/Story- This is a very unique story, and I've never seen anything like it on this site. The hook is really good, and the synopsis intrigued me right away. The story unravels story, leaving little hints about a greater mystery for people to solve. 

Style/Grammar: Each chapter is written in a different style unique to each character. When I open a chapter, I can tell who is narrating it right away without looking at the chapter title.

Character- I am a sucker for complicated and intricate character development. I admire the author's ability to seamlessly weave small character details through the thoughts the characters share. These bleeding thoughts were also an ingenious way to help readers make connections and differentiate between the characters' voices. I thought all of the characters' personalities meshed well together. While I was annoyed with a few of the characters' actions, I am glad that they remained true to themself in the end. Although I have my favorites (Werner and Jericho), I thought Wynn does a fantastic job of presenting the characters to the readers in a way that compels them to want to read further.  

Some small caveats: there were a lot of charaters introduced in the beginning so it was a bit hard to keep up at first but everything's smoothed out so far. The parallel storylines might be a difficult to follow for casual readers but they do intertwine in the end.

Also the author is friendly and engaging

Sophocles
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The unique thing about the authors style is that it changes depending on the characters pov, which is quite the feat with the host of detailed characters. 

The overall story is great, particularly how the different characters are linked and interact with each other, with each fulfilling a role in the group. The world building is incredibly detailed and deep with unique mannerisms and architecture to each country.

I haven't noticed any obvious grammer mistakes, and the characters are my favourite part of the story, particularly Jericho and Werner so I recommend you give it a go

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=A story of healing disguised as a psychological fantasy action mystery=

I was recommended this story by a friend. Hello @templerun1000 (what is that username). Never really been on RoyalRoad before because LitRPGs are not my thing, but lockdown prompted me to give this story a try. And I am so glad I did. 

The story follows a group of 6 different people with very different values becoming psychically connected together and being forced to deal with conspiracy theories and a terrorist organization ELPIS. It starts slowly then accelerates. TLDR; read it. It’s entertaining as hell.

I will now break down, as per site guidelines, this review into story, character, style, grammar. It’s gonna be a long one.

Story:

 Part I acts more like an introductory arc, showcasing how the six characters (royalty, soldier, pirate, uwu flowergirl, swindler, peacekeeper + ghost?) react to their initial psychic connection and how they realized how interconnected their lives were even before the connection began. World building (Post WW-I/II with magic?) is intense here, and the author paints a colorful world full of colorful people dealing with the aftermath of a big war.

Part II is a deeper dive into the characters and their interactions and motivations. The stakes increase (as they should as any story progresses). Here, we see what makes the characters really tick and how a particularly set of people have made the best out of a post-war era. The gray morality and parallels and foils present in this part are nice to dissect. 

I noticed that the character arc for the titular character of this part is like an expansion or a deeper dive of the character arc in Part I. Which gels really well as a whole.

Part III-VI (?) are…? TBD

One thing that is really impressive is how the author keeps SIX parallel plot lines running smoothly side by side and somehow manages to intertwine all of those plot lines succinctly. TWICE. I can only imagine how many notes someone has to take to accomplish that.

Nothing happens without reason. The world changes and progresses around them with their actions and the actions of villains/side characters.

Anyway, while each part reads like a book with a central plot/problem/issue/villain that connects the six parallel plot lines, there does appear to be an overarching theme/plot here.

There’s also a major theme of repeating mistakes, cycles (of the spiritual, physical, and behavioralistic nature), changing, and moving instead of staying in place.

Character:

Okay. Here we are. What the story is all abouot. First we have a spoilt prince who keeps an insult book in his back pocket. Then we have a swindler whose lying and manipulation matches her ability to disguise herself as anyone or anything she chooses. Then there’s the lieutenant whose strict, cold, and professional to the point of purposeful ridiculousness. Then we have a pirate who lacks understanding, thinks she’s omnipotent, and lives life carelessly on the edge. Next we have a seemingly innocent, gentle bookworm who is the most morally black out of all of them. And then we have a peacekeeper who just wants to break certain people apart.

All of the characters are wonderfully flawed. They’re filled in and affected by their history and backstory. They make mistakes and lerarm form them. They hold dfferent values. They bounce off of each other and butt heads exactly how people with their personality types would in the real world. Their motivations conflict with each other. Many of them have past traumas of varying extremity. And, as most trauma survivors do, they come together (sometimes unwillingly) to support one another as they realize their similarities. Not instantly but slowly and surely. I’m just glad the author doesn’t go the WE ARE FRIENDS NOW INSTANTLY route. It takes time. And the wait is rewarding at the end.

The main six each contribute a particularly skillset to the group and are shaped not only by the other five but also by the side-characters/villains surrounding them. 

The side characters each also have their own personal motivations and goals. So do the villains whether they’re well-meaning or not. I 100% believe the author has a gigantic word document for each character because it’s crazy the detail that’s involved. 

Each character grows noticeably with each part/story arc, especially if they’re the titular character for the part. And that’s whether it’s forward progress (5/6 of them I think) or backwards progress (1/6 of them I think). Backwards progress in this case is still progress. 

There's parallels between the six main characters and characters outside of them, and it's done succinctly. There are other literary devices used but I won't deep dive into that.

Style:

The style changes with every POV switch which makes for a refreshing read. Especially in Part I. In part II, the styles begin to blend together somewhat. I’m not sure if this is because the author will go back and do a final edit(as stated in numerous author notes) or if its purposeful to represent the six coming together. Either way its nice. For people who don’t like multiple POV, the author provides recaps at the beginning of the chapter. It still can be jarring for people not used to it though.

Grammar:

I can’t really say much since I have to use grammarly all the time but I couldn’t see any glaring errors. Part I is definitely cleaner then Part II though. But the author says they’re going to do a final edit. 

I noticed that this portion of the review tends to be short for other reviewers too lmao. Anyway…

Overall:

To be honest, I don’t think this story is suited for this particular website because of the website’s high focus on LitRPG/time loop/grimdark/Isekai stories. I do hope the author converts this into a book even though she says she’s not going to (author note) because this story deserves more eyes on it. It’s a very heartfelt yet exciting story about repeating mistakes and moving forward despite what life throws at you. With a dash of government conspiracy and flashy lights and coming full circle. 

Rant end.  I hope this review was coherent and helpful to future possible readers.

Will update as additional parts are released. If I remember my password to this account.