The Fragmented Six (Six Chances)
What would you do if your life, memories, and feelings were suddenly tied to another person?
Six people. One life.
A spoiled prince haunted by a ghost. A big city swindler with a knack for illusions. A cold soldier with a sharp eye. A pirate with a few screws loose. A chieftain’s bookish daughter with carefully bandaged hands. A peacekeeping agent with an eye for vengeance.
After simultaneously knocking on death’s door, these six find themselves psychically connected across national lines. Tensions rise between them and between their respective countries, which are recovering from a long war over the mysterious vitae—an energy source harvested and utilized in weapons and engines called conductors. Loyalty, memory, and sense of self blur as conspiracies encroach.
Assassination attempts, underground weapons dealings, border conflicts, tales of terrifying beasts, and a terrorist organization called ELPIS.
—Everything is connected. Nothing is coincidental. The spark has ignited…!
Part I: The Converging Six [COMPLETE]
Part II: The Illusionary Six [COMPLETE]
Part III: The Fragmented Six [COMPLETE]
Part IV: The Glorious Six [Coming 09.13]
In-depth blurbs for each part within.
Contains found family, magitech, parallel plotlines that converge, conspiracies, morally gray characters, Chekhov's guns, and a lot of character development.
Updates M/M&R on a rotating schedule with occasional extra chapters.
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This is a great novel. It is super creative and fun. I can condense this review down into one word, good. However if you want to stick around I will break it down into sections.
The author's writing style flows very well and meshes together fantastically. Organization makes sense and moves at a very good pace. Extremely descriptive but not over the top. Dialogue is very well done. No huge exposition dumps. 5/5
The story in this novel is my favorite part. The magic system is extremely unique, frankly unlike anything I have ever read. All the pieces of the story fit together logically. Somehow the author managed to not make exposition dumps, despite there being many separate stories all occurring at the same time. 5/5
I didn’t notice any issues in grammar throughout. Punctuation seemed to be spot on. There may have been a couple issues, but I didn’t see them. 5/5
All the characters are different, having their own quirks. Some of them can be a pain (They know who they are) but they fit into the story well. Despite some poor choices I overall enjoy the characters and what they add to the story. 4.5/5
This is clearly a character driven story and so the total quality of the story hinges on said character. Its good then that the six different main charactters are each interesting (and more imprtantly) unique in their own way. The characters all vary from each other greatly but they all had an equal ammount of care and attention giving to them. Their actions and behavior are understandable and it doesn't feel like any one is more of a 'main character' then the others. they each have their own place and niche to fill in the world that is being crafted in the story. Speaking of the world, the story has an interesting blend of fantasy and modernity that feels like an actual mechanical factor of reality rather than just haphazardly placed solely as a literrary device. Good characters in a good world, what more could you ask for?
The voice is succinct and descriptive, great prose!
It can be a bit jarring at first for the multiple viewpoints but is worth the read to see the payoff. Like the netflix series(Sense8), it has great character interactions.
There are some unneeded words but the author certainly knows their vocabulary.
Each character has their own personality and goals. I do agree with others in that it would help if the author described the characters.
As the title and synopsis state, this story includes six main characters. They and the world they occupy are well written, but keeping track of everything going on will require some small effort by the reader.
Dialogue flows well with character and scene descriptions, of which there are many. Author clearly knows how to write in a more than acceptable manner.
Overall, grammar is good throughout. There are a number of minor mistakes, but barely enough to trouble even the most grammatically aware. Another editing sweep by the author will likely remove any remaining offenders.
There are some mix ups during treatment of action vs dialogue tags.
Occasional repetitive word usage between adjacent sentences (I know this one is hard to avoid).
Would really like to see capitalised chapter names.
Fixing line spacing throughout chapters 20, 21, and 28 is highly recommended.
The world is quite interesting, and features a number of distinct locales. The world building is enjoyable, as are the central concepts of the author's resource: Vitae. The use of the psychic element is also well done, and provides an opportunity for many engaging scenes. However, some additional exposition of the in-universe terms early on would be of benefit.
Each of the six main characters feels unique in their own way, and the author does a very good job of making them sound different during dialogue. There is also a great number of secondary characters that appear to be equally well written, though some readers may struggle to hold a clear picture of who each character is during the frequent POV shifts.
If you're looking for a story with a wide cast of interesting characters, in a well thought out fantasy world with a magic-like resource, definitely give this a try.
Wonderful worldbuilding, great characterization. As I'm reading I can imagine it as a popular anime (the character portraits probably helped there).
One teeny grammatic issue, a few times there's a period at the end of a spoken sentence where there should be a comma, but it's the only thing that stood out to me.
"Hi there," he said. [Correct]
"Hi there." He said. [Incorrect]
"Hi there." His voice made her blush. [Correct]
If it's one continuous sentence/action then it's a comma. If the spoken sentence is finished and another action takes place, it's a period and a new sentence.