The Fragmented Six (Six Chances)

by elmerwynn

What would you do if your life, memories, and feelings were suddenly tied to another person?
Six people. One life.

A spoiled prince haunted by a ghost. A big city swindler with a knack for illusions. A cold soldier with a sharp eye. A pirate with a few screws loose. A chieftain’s bookish daughter with carefully bandaged hands. A peacekeeping agent with an eye for vengeance.

After simultaneously knocking on death’s door, these six find themselves psychically connected across national lines. Tensions rise between them and between their respective countries, which are recovering from a long war over the mysterious vitae—an energy source harvested and utilized in weapons and engines called conductors. Loyalty, memory, and sense of self blur as conspiracies encroach.

Assassination attempts, underground weapons dealings, border conflicts, tales of terrifying beasts, and a terrorist organization called ELPIS.

—Everything is connected. Nothing is coincidental. The spark has ignited…!

Part I: The Synchronized Six  [COMPLETE]
Part II: The Illusionary Six  [COMPLETE / (Deep editing)]
Part III: The Fragmented Six [ONGOING]

In-depth blurbs for each part within.
Contains found family, magitech, parallel plotlines that converge, conspiracies, morally gray characters, Chekhov's guns, and a lot of character development.

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Chapter Name Release Date
Traveling Author's Note / Extras [Art, Cover, Media] ago
(1) Part I | 0.1, 0.2 : Prince, Swindler ago
(2) Part I | 0.3, 0.4 : Soldier, Pirate ago
(3) Part I | 0.5, 0.6: Chieftain Daughter, Peacekeeper ago
(4) Part I | 1.1: Chance Connection ago
(5) Part I | 1.2 : Morello Introduction ago
(6) Part I | 1.3: Waltz Target ago
(7) Part I | 1.4: Gloria Tango ago
(8) Part I | 1.5: Imamu Snip ago
(9) Part I | 1.6: Jericho Track ago
(10) Part I | 1.[]: Underground Doctor on the Battlefield ago
(11) Part I | 2.1: Chance Deflection ago
(12) Part I | 2.2: Morello Verse ago
(13) Part I | 2.3: Waltz Aim ago
(14): Part I | 2.4: Gloria Jive ago
(15) Part I | 2.5: Imamu Prune ago
(16) Part I | 2.6: Jericho Raid ago
(17) Part I | 2.[]: Boy in the Capital ago
(18) Part I | 3.1: Chance Detection ago
(19) Part I | 3.2: Morello Chorus ago
(20) Part I | 3.3: Waltz Trigger ago
(21) Part I | 3.4: Gloria Waltz ago
(22) Part I | 3.5: Imamu Snap ago
(23) Part I | 3.6: Jericho Brutality ago
(24) Part I | 3.[]: Convergence ago
(25) Part I | 4.1: Chance Direction ago
(26) Part I | 4.2: Morello Bridge ago
(27) Part I | 4.3: Waltz Misfire ago
(28) Part I | 4.4: Gloria Twist ago
(29) Part I | 4.5: Imamu Aeriation ago
(30) Part I | 4.[]: Peacekeeper on the Verge ago
(31) Part I | 5.1: Chance Rejection ago
(32) Part I | 5.2: Morello Conclusion ago
(33) Part I | 5.3: Waltz Lock-on ago
(34) Part I | 5.4: GOLDEN BEAST ago
(35) Part I | 5.5: Imamu Cultivar ago
(36) Part I | 6a: Chance Ignition ago
(37) Part I | 6b: Crimson Volition ago
(38) Part I | 6c: Outsiders Looking In • Part I End ago
(39) Part II | 7.0: A Broker's Concern (Malignità) ago
(40) Part II | 7.1: Olive's Bravery (Codardia) ago
(41) Part II | 7.2: Cadence's Family (Conoscenti) ago
(42) Part II | 7.3: Werner's Effficiency (Esitazione) ago
(43) Part II | 7.4: Maria's Hunt (Cacciatore) ago
(44) Part II | 7.5: Atienna's Journey (Soggiorno) ago
(45) Part II | 7.6: Jericho's Peace (Guerra) ago
(46) Part II | 7.[]: A Terrorist's Hate (Amore) ago
(47) Part II | 8.1: Cadence's Honor (Dishonore) ago
(48) Part II | 8.2: Olive’s Stagnation (Accelerazione) ago
(49) Part II | 8.3: Werner’s Diligence (Rilassamento) ago
(50) Part II | 8.4: Maria's Capture (Fuga) ago
(51) Part II | 8.5: Jericho's Reunion (Seperazione) ago
(52) Part II | 8.6: Atienna's Warmth (Refreddato) ago
(53) Part II | 8.[]: An Inheritor's Greed (Generosita) ago
(54) Part II | 9.1-1: Cadence's Stumble (Spirale) ago
(55) Part II | 9.1-2: Cadence's Love (Desiderio) ago
(56) Part II | 9.2: Olive's Naivety (Sapienza) ago
(57) Part II | 9.3: Werner's Stand (Crollo) ago
(58) Part II | 9.4: Maria's Tale (Storia) ago
(59) Part II | 9.5: Atienna’s Induction (Deduzione) ago
(60) Part II | 9.6: Jericho's (Lost) Raziocinio ago
(61) Part II | 9.[]-1 : A Soldier’s Promise (di un Amico), 1 ago
(62) Part II | 9.[]-2: A Soldier’s Promise (di un Amico), 2 ago
(63) Part II | 10.[]-1: A Brother’s Greed (Carità) ago
(64) Part II | 10.[]-2: A Brother's Wrath (Pazienza) ago
(65) Part II | 10.1: Olive's Dimming (Fiammata) ago
(66) Part II | 10.2: Cadence's Gambling (Fallacia) ago
(67) Part II | 10.3: Maria's Battling (Riposo) ago
(68) Part II | 10.4: Atienna's Questioning (Riposto) ago
(69) Part II | 10.5: Jericho's Cycling (Vendetta) ago
(70) Part II | 10.( ): The People of Sin City ago
(71) Part II | 11.1: Cadence's (Sincero) Deception ago
(72) Part II | 11.2: Werner's (Fidato) Command ago
(73) Part II | 11.3: Atienna's (Inverso) Heroism ago
(74) Part II | 11.4: Maria's (Primo) Defeat ago
(75) Part II | 11.5: Jericho's (Dicotomico) Hatred ago
(76) Part II : 11.[]: Francis's (Theta's) Singularity ago
(77) Part II | 11.6: Olive’s (Nascosto) Test ago
(78) Part II | 12.1: A Duet Between a Prince and Peacekeeper ago
(79) Part II | 12.2: A Duet Between a Soldier and Advisor ago
(80) Part II | 12.3: A Solo for a Beast ago
(81) Part II | 13a: Copper Cadence ago
(82) Part II | 13b: Solitary Maidens ago
(83) Part II | 13c: Outsiders Laughing Above • Part II End ago
(84) Part III | 14.1: Observer & Peacekeeper, 0000 Unusual Activity ago
(85) Part III | 14.2: Prince & Swindler, 0000 False Ignorance ago
(86) Part III | 14.3: Advisor & Pirate, 0000 Lost Connection ago
(87) Part III | 14.4: Soldier, 0000 Miscalculation ago
(88) Part III | 15.1: Advisor, 0001 Log Open ago
(89) Part III | 15.2: Combat Medic, 0705 Head Trauma ago
(90) Part III | 15.3: Lance Corporal, 0610 Enemy Encounter ago
(91) Part III | 15.4: Advisor, 0101 Distance Pain ago
(92) Part III | 15.5: Second Lieutenant, 0310 Captured ago
(93) Part III | 15.[]: Peacekeepers, 0700 Verschlimmbesserung ago
(94) Part III | 16.1: Captain, 0500 Insubordination ago

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love it. Makes me want to have my own psychic link group except with less fighting. But we’re human so I guess that’s hard. The fluff areas are nice. Mysterious. Logical magic system. Lovable characters and interactions. A little bit of everything. FMA x Steins Gate x Durarara. Consistent updates.


This is a great novel. It is super creative and fun. I can condense this review down into one word, good. However if you want to stick around I will break it down into sections.


The author's writing style flows very well and meshes together fantastically. Organization makes sense and moves at a very good pace. Extremely descriptive but not over the top. Dialogue is very well done. No huge exposition dumps. 5/5


The story in this novel is my favorite part. The magic system is extremely unique, frankly unlike anything I have ever read. All the pieces of the story fit together logically. Somehow the author managed to not make exposition dumps, despite there being many separate stories all occurring at the same time. 5/5


I didn’t notice any issues in grammar throughout. Punctuation seemed to be spot on. There may have been a couple issues, but I didn’t see them. 5/5


All the characters are different, having their own quirks. Some of them can be a pain (They know who they are) but they fit into the story well. Despite some poor choices I overall enjoy the characters and what they add to the story. 4.5/5


This is clearly a character driven story and so the total quality of the story hinges on said character. Its good then that the six different main charactters are each interesting (and more imprtantly) unique  in their own way. The characters all vary from each other greatly but they all had an equal ammount of care and attention giving to them. Their actions and behavior are understandable and it doesn't feel like any one is more of a 'main character' then the others. they each have their own place and niche to fill in the world that is being crafted in the story. Speaking of the world, the story has an interesting blend of fantasy and modernity that feels like an actual mechanical factor of reality rather than just haphazardly placed solely as a literrary device.  Good characters in a good world, what more could you ask for?

This feels like a story that is less about the people in it and more about the world that they live in. The author seems to have a larger goal that is to create a world that is larger than the story itself. Perhaps this image is the result of the various characters that we encounter in the story. Or perhaps it is the effect of the beautiful world-building, I am uncertain.
However, one thing is quite clear. And that is that the author has put quite a lot of effort in detailing the background of the world and the history whose lingering effect we see in the present time within the novel. The politics of the current time has its roots in the previous wars and their resulting aftermath, as is true in the real world. 
The magic system also seems quite unique with the use of conductors and the vitae which is quite different from the usual mana route. With the existence of the Vitae reserves, the author has brilliantly built wars around them to etch rich history.
Talking about grammar, the story was wonderful to read. The characters, despite being quite numerous, were all quite different and interesting. They had their own goals and motivations and more independently of each other. Overall, this was quite a nice read.

This is it.


This is the one. 


Incredible world-building, with cultures and settings that bring the story to life. 


Characters each speak with their own, unique voice. They are built, and shaped by those around them and connected to them. Fantastic. 


Action is superb. Thrilling, suspenseful. 


I highly recommend this to most people, the exception being those that come here for blatant wish-fulfilment or murder-hobos. 


The characters here are smart, geniuses even in their small, respective domains, but they are flawed as well. Thay must struggle to overcome those flaws, and they sometimes fail. 


Complex cast of characters combine for an interesting tale

Reviewed at: (35) 3.[] : connecting piece // convergence

As the title and synopsis state, this story includes six main characters. They and the world they occupy are well written, but keeping track of everything going on will require some small effort by the reader.


Dialogue flows well with character and scene descriptions, of which there are many. Author clearly knows how to write in a more than acceptable manner.


Overall, grammar is good throughout. There are a number of minor mistakes, but barely enough to trouble even the most grammatically aware. Another editing sweep by the author will likely remove any remaining offenders.

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The world is quite interesting, and features a number of distinct locales. The world building is enjoyable, as are the central concepts of the author's resource: Vitae. The use of the psychic element is also well done, and provides an opportunity for many engaging scenes. However, some additional exposition of the in-universe terms early on would be of benefit.


Each of the six main characters feels unique in their own way, and the author does a very good job of making them sound different during dialogue. There is also a great number of secondary characters that appear to be equally well written, though some readers may struggle to hold a clear picture of who each character is during the frequent POV shifts.


If you're looking for a story with a wide cast of interesting characters, in a well thought out fantasy world with a magic-like resource, definitely give this a try.


Excellent characters, worldbuilding, and plot. My favorite character is definitely Cadence right now; her character development in book 2 was really well done. Every main character is compelling and well developed despite the large cast; a lot of the side characters like Alice, the Foxman brothers, and others are also really fun. Looking forward to the rest of the shenanigans in book 3. Thx for writing!!


So… literally my first thought after finishing part 1 was WHERE’S THE SEQUEL! Then I read part 2 and it was EVERYTHING I could’ve asked for and more. Now I’m waiting on part 3 because I NEED MORE! THE WAIT IS KILLING ME!

The longing for this book to be turned into a live television series or have an anime adaptation cause HOLY SHIT What. A. RIDE?! I had so many thoughts and feelings that I needed to sit down and organize them. So hopefully this review isn’t too sloppy and actually does this amazing book some justice. Also. slight Spoiler Warning just in case. Nothing major. I'll keep it vague but I still recommend reading the story first. 

Writing Style! - First off, I’ve said this before and I’ll say it again a million times over. I freaking love the writing style! There’s something extremely alluring and simple about it without coming off as childish. It’s such a breeze to read and doesn’t strain your brain. Doesn’t use too many complicated words/sentences (I’m a dummy and tend stick to the easy reads) So this was a pleasure to read. I thought the sentences/dialogue/cross dialogues (which is when a character are using their mind voice, so to speak) is so clear and well written. I’ve yet to read a story written this way (even concept wise) anywhere. I love the dialogues of this story in general cause it’s so well written. The humor, the charm, the wittiness. Chef’s kiss author! Well done! It was a super-fast read and I loved every minute of it.

Story/Plot! – The Concept of the story is so cool and new and unique! It’s based off of the zodiac signs (which is really cool!) and I love the attention to details given to every city so far. They’re all so distinct and given their history, it makes sense why it is the way it is. You can really tell the author put a lot of thought behind both the concept and how vitae is used to the way the world is built. It’s so well thought out I can’t help but be super impressed and gush about it. Well rounded world building IS MY JAM! At first, the feel of the story gave me very Avatar: TLAB and FMAB vibes (AND I LOVE BOTH THOSE SHOWS!) Now the feel itself has become its own unique thing (Which is why I desperately wish this story is turned into its own anime series. LORD KNOWS IT DESERVES ONE!)

Grammar - I have nothing to complain about when it comes to grammar. It was immaculate. I found maybe one or two typoes in all of 83 chapters. And that's only if your really looking for them. 

Characters! - AND I SAVED THE BEST FOR LAST! The characters! Oh the characters! I love the fact that in just a few lines (for each of their introduction chapters) I’ve already fallen for them. Especially Olive, Cadence and Atienna from the main cast! And Francis/Theta and Omicron from the supporting cast. When I read the first few chapters I already liked the characters but as the story went on I fell in love and even dreamt about them in my sleep. I love how, despite himself and his exasperation to many things, Olive cares a lot about other people and the world even if it doesn’t directly affect him. He's such a feeler but would totally deny it. And I also love how much he’s come to love and care for the people who are connected to him. More than you’d expect and more than he’ll let on at first glance. I love how he seems like a grump on the surface but he has a heart of gold underneath all that Royalty. (He reminds me a lot of my younger brother in his teen years) He’s so cute and I wanna give him a hug. I love that Cadence is like a street rat. Everyone underestimates her but that’s the biggest mistake ever. She’s so clever and witty and smol and I empathize a lot with the fact that she’s had to grow to act a certain way just to survive in the harsh Twin Cities of Gemini. It’s really shaped her as a person. Flaws and all. (That could be said for all of them but her most of all. She didn’t ask for this life but dammit she’s making the most of it) Werner is pretty cool too. I didn’t get to see much of him (or rather I should say, his internal self) in the first part so I wasn’t too attached but man! Part 2 took me by surprise! Werner wormed his way into my heart. You see little glimpses of who he really is and while he might be cool and collected about many things, when it comes to himself he’s far from it. And I sympathize a lot! He has so much potential and I can’t wait to see what he’ll learn about himself in the future. Maria!!! Oh man! Where to begin! I love Maria cause god damn! What a wild card she is! I also love her simplistic way of life. She’s so carefree and sees the world in black and white and doesn’t complicate matters and man, her skills are on part with Werner’s! RESPECT! I wish we all could see the world the way she does. I bet it would make the world a better place. More fun and exciting and peaceful too! (She’s very cool for a ‘pirate’) Atienna straight away become one of my favorites just because she’s Virgoan (And I’m a Virgo lol) and she’s everything I wish I was irl. She prefers observing and analyzing before acting rashly in any given situation. She can be cold at times, but I constitute that to her being true to herself and I highly respect that. We as humans sometimes lie to ourselves and sympathize out of guilt from feeling detached instead of feeling it genuinely but very very few of us are really honest about it to ourselves. But Atienna is. She questions everything. About the world and herself. I think it’s very important to be self-aware. She’s also very smart and knowledgeable and full of wisdom (which she learns more and more as the story progresses) Jericho is also a very interesting character! I didn’t know much about him earlier on in the chapters. He was always a mystery to me (but that unknown is what made him so interesting) I was intrigued right away but the more I learnt about his past, my heart went out for him too! His backstory along with Cadence’s are my favorites so far! I also really love his fighting style! So anime! Francis also was my favorite brother out of the Foxman brothers. (I have a thing for brothers) so when I later found out the truth about him and Theta, it was the biggest most shocking revelation ever I couldn’t breathe! But then Omicron and Theta’s perspective was being shown and god my heart just went out to them. Their love for each other through generations made me feel all warm and gooey inside. Even though they are a part of ELPIS, a terrorist organization, I couldn’t help but want them to have a happy ending and GOSH! SO MANY FEELZ! I DONNO WHAT TO DO WITH IT ALL! I JUST WANT TO WRAP ALL THIS CHARACTERS IN THE SOFTERST BLANKET AND PROTECT THEM FOREVER AND EVER! Plus, the dynamic they have with each other really begins to shine in Part 2 and I COULDN’T GET ENOUGH! I always looked forward to who would synchronize with whom in every chapter. In part 2 you really get to see them grow and become more and more fleshed out. Theta and Omicron while viewed as antagonists throughout the whole series, gets their own time to shine in the spotlight and stole my heart as well. I never expected to love them so much. I cried at the ending few chapters of part 2. So many emotions fluctuating between feeling absolute joy to wonder to excitement to heartbreak and everything in between (and in the middle during one of Cadence/Werner’s chapters… if you’ve read the story, you know what I’m talking about)


All in all… This is turning out to be one of my favorite reads so far! And I legit can’t wait for part 3 to be completed. I’ll probably come back and update my review when that happens. Keep up the awesome work author! We love you and your masterpiece so much! AND CANT WAIT FOR MORE!


reading only the first chapter you realize the great story that awaits you, just great.

a great introduction, and great characters

you can see the passion of the author towards his own work

I'm too excited to see the story unfold for all the great characters that are presented , thanks for such a great history 


i don't write reviews on this site havent decided to create account until recently but have been following this story for some time. i liked seeing it evolve and rise in the ranking system. i wasn't going to write a review but i noticed that the ranking dropped drastically recently so i assume it was rating blomb so im trying to support you author by dong this

its a good story, good characters, good mystery, good atmosphere, good worldbuilding. no grammar or style issues. great characters. keep at it. wish more people gave this story a try.story builds up nicely towards something bigger. characters shine in their part. art is pretty

apparently advanced revies have to be longer so here we are with me trying ot extend this review. werner is my favorite cahracter then atienna and cadence. didnt like cadence that much until part two. is this 200 characters yet i dunot know. this is hard. really nice writing style. what else to say...... still not at 200 words dang. how do people write such long reviews .anyways this is a different storyo yo should give it a shot i guess. still not 200 words how does this work.

good story good character good story good character good story good characer