Viceroy's Pride

the first seven chapters of this story are no longer so pants on head retarded that they make my brain hurt. unfortunately im not allowed to post my criticisms without spoiler tags so get ready for a  paragraph or two under the spoiler tag

Spoiler: Spoiler

This is a fun lit-rpg where magic and science coexists.  The MC gets magic and a system equivalent and is sent to a magic-based planet to do traditional lit rpg things.  Unfortunately, things don't really seem planned out or logical.  For example, the MC joins a party nervous about adventuring in the silver mines...and then the nervous party voluntarily tackles a nest of giant ants with essentially no plan whatsoever.  He never asked his folks how or when he was going to teleport back home.  He doesn't bring a gun, any technological equipment -- ok, maybe he wants to blend in -- or any food!  He teleports blindly to another planet knowing nothing about it other than that there are humans somewhere on it and he will end up without 50 miles of a teleporation hub...and brings no food!  There is also something a little out of place about the humor.  Since there isn't much, its kinda weird when the eccentric billionaire financing his journey takes him aside and tells him to make sure to get a harem when he goes to fantasy land "for the sake of every red blooded male."

All of this aside, the story is kind of fun, and the MC is likeable enough.  I feel like the author just needs to make a decision and either get more serious about the plot, or add more humor and continue to not worry about things overmuch.  

Diamond in the rough.

CoCop is writing an interesting story, wich I personally am hooked on. 
A story with a system but without it taking the story over.

Story moves at a nice pace.

Biggest negative I think; I have to wait for new chapters to come out!! Haha

The story itself is phenomenal with all the intrigue and so on but he says his character is weak willed for character development but it's not really development but a sudden realization him saying he'll change but then a while later it looks like no progress has happened with the military he was almost as passive as ever. He didn't stand up for himself against them or his 'students'

At first, I was put off on how the MC let people run over him, but kept reading because the world-building was one of the best. The system origins are explained and how it works. The power creep is believable and later the MC grows past his timidity and matures. This is honestly one of the better stories I have read on here. 

When I started reading this story ten months ago, I was expecting yet another few hundred chapters of the classic system apocalypse, yet this story goes a different direction from most such stories. Firstly, there is not an unrealistic system, but there is a pretty realistic one, and a blend of magic mixed with Sci-Fi, this novel is truly one of the best such Apocalypse LitRPG novels on this site. Furthermore, it's written by CoCop, the man/woman who finished one really good story before writing this one, as well as starting and finishing another story while this one was ongoing. Finally, at long last this story is complete and I'm off to read Blessed Time.

TLDR: It's really good, read it if you like Realistic LitRPG Apocalypse and the fixing of the said apocalypse.

Apparently the author has made substantive edits to the story in response to criticism, which looks to have improved the early story quite a bit. Kicking off, the premise is that elves invade Earth in a bid to use humans as cannon fodder against orcs. Unfortunately, they find themselves initially unprepared to handle modern weapons and their display of dominance collapses before the US military begins research into the magical systems, making no headway as the research team is slowly whittled down to the first and now last member, Daniel Thrush. He, in a demonstration of classic human intuition, decides to eat some of the mana crystals as his final unsupervised experiment and awakens magical affinities within himself.

From there on, the story follows him as he attempts to navigate the decidedly limited options available to the only awakened human on Earth. Several reviews have criticized Dan's progression as being a weak-willed pushover, but all of his choices make sense. He reaches out to the previous project lead, a professor from MIT and she brings him into the private foundation she's been working with since the military trimmed down the project. They set him up with a training regimen, a system (that only has limited sway on the story) and all the information they've managed to collect and translate. After that, they track down an unimportant world to send him to so that he can gain enough mana to return and begin awakening more humans.

Dan does what anyone would do in his situation. Find people that know more than him and try to figure out what to do next. If you meet a friendly ranger on an alien planet, you're going to rely on them to learn more about the world. There's no wish-fulfillment, he doesn't start with incredible powers and push around unjust leaders, he just wants to lay low and develop the potential to eventually match elven spellcasters in a way that humans oppressed under their empire aren't allowed to.

Overall, it makes for an interesting sci-fi/fantasy mashup with a normal every-man catapulted into a fight for freedom that he is ill-prepared for. The world hasn't collapsed into anarchy, the governments and economies are still running, there's just an on-going alien invasion. It's an entertaining read with little in the way of errors to detract from the story.

This was a really enjoyable and realist glimpse into a transhuman future with believable enemies and power scaling! 

The characters grow out of old flaws and into new ones. The evil is by turns EVIL and nuanced. The people act like people and their is a lot of genuine creativity in how the author uses and adapts familiar tropes. The story is unpredictable without being manic. Nice work!!

So, while this book generally is good, it has a character which is not really understandable, as well as the assumption that the government or army, do not have lawyers. The characters seem to be very two dimensional, which some small outliers. One is a mobber, which our hero follows, but while this is understandable, everyone in an official capacity is stupid, regardless of if they are human or alien. The story has much potential, and one thing that is very good is the grammar. I generally only see a few mistakes, if any at all, which is great. The basic underlying story is also good, but it devolves right now, mostly because of the 2-D characters and the dynamics between them. Certain things are ignored, and we do not see why.

Warning, the following is a spoiler:

This is turning into a pretty complex but still easily enjoyable story.

At first, despite the author's warning, I was ready to drop the story somewhere around chapter 20 - Dan was just such so spineless and lacking any gumption to stand up for himself, letting himself be used repeatedly.

But after that it got better. As of chapter 80 Dan is willing to stand up for himself and not tolerate too much shit from those who are ignorant or just crap people. So, a pretty good story arc for him, and the author brought it along in a way that seems fairly natural and at a good pace. I don't know what will happen with Dan going forward but am happy so far.