This story could be about the Tellask Empire, ruler of a thousand suns and faced with imminent peril at the hands of the Orakh hordes. It could be about Paltai Amberell, the scion of a noble elven House, fallen upon hard times and seeking to find the key that will restore his family's name and save the Empire itself. It could be the story of his voidship, The Viceroy's Pride, powered by magic and crewed by a team of crack marines as they search for adventure and the solution to the Empire's myriad problems.
Instead, this is the story of Daniel Thrush, human electrical engineer, befuddled researcher and survivor of the debacle that was first contact with a spacefaring civilization. Due to a combination of luck, magic, hard work, and more luck he is thrust into the center of events as Earth is shoved onto a much larger stage rife with semi-immortal elves and magical kingdoms that predate the Earthly invention of agriculture.
Earth is outnumbered, and we have precisely one wizard. Dan. He's not very good at it, but he's going to have to learn in a hurry or watch everything he knows get torn apart by massive spacefaring empires straight from the pages of a fantasy novel.
Some readers have noted that the MC tends to be weak willed and pushed around a bit. A significant portion of the story is his character growth into not being a pushover (i.e. him being passive is in the early chapters on purpose). I'm just including this caveat/warning to make sure that readers aren't surprised/upset and that they stick with it until he learns to stand up for himself.
His arc begins to crystallize around chapters 25-27. If that's too long to wait, I get it, I'm just trying to do my due diligence and warn you that the character development is a bit of a slow burn.
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the first seven chapters of this story are no longer so pants on head retarded that they make my brain hurt. unfortunately im not allowed to post my criticisms without spoiler tags so get ready for a paragraph or two under the spoiler tag
The MC steals a mana crystal from the top secret military research base he works at, eats it, and gains wizard sight. as the only wizard in existence(on earth) this is a big goddamn deal. but then things get more retarded from there. he was recording literally everything he did from multiple angles/in diverse ways while inside the lab. ho never at any point considers that the top secret goverment facility may allready have cameras recording him and logging the access of top secret research equipment......which is pants on head retarded as he later spends time panicking over the idea of getting shanghaid by the government, despite doing that stupid shit inside their lab. the author has rewritten parts so that the unsupervised super geek now tests some of the alien gadgetry and burns himself, thus justifying him not touching it again till he leaves. however no time is spent describing the labs location or environs at all, leaving it blindingly curious why he never steals any of the xenotech for personal use at a later date. the rewrites also substantially improve his relations with his former boss Sam, though she still deliberately and without shame or regret submits him to 3 hours of ridiculous unceasing pain because he once set her up on a bad date, and laughs at him while he has a seizure. so....... she's now closer to Josef Mengele's misguided granddaughter than Elizabeth Bathory.
the MC is still an uncritical clueless simp, he signs contracts with no lawyer, hes an obsequious yes man with no backbone that somehow even without extreme mana poisoning (space crack addiction) has no issues consistently throwing himself into mortal peril to fight monsters, but can't manage two sentences worth of thought while within 4KM of another human being. he violently objects to being sold by a alien ranger to the leader of the local city state when he leaves earth by nearly decapitating her, but steadfastly refuses to aknowledge that he's allready the slave of the thoth foundation, as their medical nanites can control his entire body, or that his enslavement is entirely on Sam's back. the most recent chapters attempt to redeem the character somewhat, having her do an abrupt U-turn in attitude and actions, but the groundwork to have that change be even somewhat believable hasn't been done, it's very apparent the author has intended for this to be the characters arc from the beginning, but its equally as apparent that the writers intentions haven't been well translated into the story.
in later chapters the main character stops being a completely* spineless pansy. the overall quality has improved. every single character is typically a wooden exposition machine or an attempt to make you feel bad for the MC filtered through the emotional understanding of a late 2000's emo teens tumblr account. the only exceptions are the two warrior women who briefly travel with him in order to enslave him on behalf of a representative of the local city states government on the alien planet, who i strongly suspect have only had the minimal effort expended to sorta kinda humanize them because they'll be showing up later and the MC will need an excuse to not immediately thunder bolt them to death for attempting to enslave him now that he appears to have found a spine. but not his spine, that's still somewhere beyond the horizon, but maybe a 90 yr old osteoporosis stricken grandma's spine? not a good spine, but more than he had before. the other standout character is a new female D&D Monk-esque character that awakens her magical melee powers at the MC's behalf once he returns to earth. it seems kinda...odd how the MC remarks on how she'd be dangerous to him in close range when he should be able to backhand her into the next county given his skillset and powers, but whatever, it's a kinda basic "tell not show" flaw that crops up in stories all the time.
so finally, 2.5 stars, if the author keeps improving easily will be 4, due to personal nitpicks and dislikes that seem to the upper ceiling i see my rating going to, but im more than happy now to stick around and see where the story goes now :)
This is a fun lit-rpg where magic and science coexists. The MC gets magic and a system equivalent and is sent to a magic-based planet to do traditional lit rpg things. Unfortunately, things don't really seem planned out or logical. For example, the MC joins a party nervous about adventuring in the silver mines...and then the nervous party voluntarily tackles a nest of giant ants with essentially no plan whatsoever. He never asked his folks how or when he was going to teleport back home. He doesn't bring a gun, any technological equipment -- ok, maybe he wants to blend in -- or any food! He teleports blindly to another planet knowing nothing about it other than that there are humans somewhere on it and he will end up without 50 miles of a teleporation hub...and brings no food! There is also something a little out of place about the humor. Since there isn't much, its kinda weird when the eccentric billionaire financing his journey takes him aside and tells him to make sure to get a harem when he goes to fantasy land "for the sake of every red blooded male."
All of this aside, the story is kind of fun, and the MC is likeable enough. I feel like the author just needs to make a decision and either get more serious about the plot, or add more humor and continue to not worry about things overmuch.
Diamond in the rough.
CoCop is writing an interesting story, wich I personally am hooked on.
A story with a system but without it taking the story over.
Story moves at a nice pace.
Biggest negative I think; I have to wait for new chapters to come out!! Haha
The story itself is phenomenal with all the intrigue and so on but he says his character is weak willed for character development but it's not really development but a sudden realization him saying he'll change but then a while later it looks like no progress has happened with the military he was almost as passive as ever. He didn't stand up for himself against them or his 'students'
At first, I was put off on how the MC let people run over him, but kept reading because the world-building was one of the best. The system origins are explained and how it works. The power creep is believable and later the MC grows past his timidity and matures. This is honestly one of the better stories I have read on here.
When I started reading this story ten months ago, I was expecting yet another few hundred chapters of the classic system apocalypse, yet this story goes a different direction from most such stories. Firstly, there is not an unrealistic system, but there is a pretty realistic one, and a blend of magic mixed with Sci-Fi, this novel is truly one of the best such Apocalypse LitRPG novels on this site. Furthermore, it's written by CoCop, the man/woman who finished one really good story before writing this one, as well as starting and finishing another story while this one was ongoing. Finally, at long last this story is complete and I'm off to read Blessed Time.
TLDR: It's really good, read it if you like Realistic LitRPG Apocalypse and the fixing of the said apocalypse.
Apparently the author has made substantive edits to the story in response to criticism, which looks to have improved the early story quite a bit. Kicking off, the premise is that elves invade Earth in a bid to use humans as cannon fodder against orcs. Unfortunately, they find themselves initially unprepared to handle modern weapons and their display of dominance collapses before the US military begins research into the magical systems, making no headway as the research team is slowly whittled down to the first and now last member, Daniel Thrush. He, in a demonstration of classic human intuition, decides to eat some of the mana crystals as his final unsupervised experiment and awakens magical affinities within himself.
From there on, the story follows him as he attempts to navigate the decidedly limited options available to the only awakened human on Earth. Several reviews have criticized Dan's progression as being a weak-willed pushover, but all of his choices make sense. He reaches out to the previous project lead, a professor from MIT and she brings him into the private foundation she's been working with since the military trimmed down the project. They set him up with a training regimen, a system (that only has limited sway on the story) and all the information they've managed to collect and translate. After that, they track down an unimportant world to send him to so that he can gain enough mana to return and begin awakening more humans.
Dan does what anyone would do in his situation. Find people that know more than him and try to figure out what to do next. If you meet a friendly ranger on an alien planet, you're going to rely on them to learn more about the world. There's no wish-fulfillment, he doesn't start with incredible powers and push around unjust leaders, he just wants to lay low and develop the potential to eventually match elven spellcasters in a way that humans oppressed under their empire aren't allowed to.
Overall, it makes for an interesting sci-fi/fantasy mashup with a normal every-man catapulted into a fight for freedom that he is ill-prepared for. The world hasn't collapsed into anarchy, the governments and economies are still running, there's just an on-going alien invasion. It's an entertaining read with little in the way of errors to detract from the story.
This was a really enjoyable and realist glimpse into a transhuman future with believable enemies and power scaling!
The characters grow out of old flaws and into new ones. The evil is by turns EVIL and nuanced. The people act like people and their is a lot of genuine creativity in how the author uses and adapts familiar tropes. The story is unpredictable without being manic. Nice work!!
So, while this book generally is good, it has a character which is not really understandable, as well as the assumption that the government or army, do not have lawyers. The characters seem to be very two dimensional, which some small outliers. One is a mobber, which our hero follows, but while this is understandable, everyone in an official capacity is stupid, regardless of if they are human or alien. The story has much potential, and one thing that is very good is the grammar. I generally only see a few mistakes, if any at all, which is great. The basic underlying story is also good, but it devolves right now, mostly because of the 2-D characters and the dynamics between them. Certain things are ignored, and we do not see why.
Warning, the following is a spoiler:
On one hand, for example, their does not seem to be a reason to clear an invasion, on the other hand that invasion seems to be close to overrun everything in the area? Makes no sense. Good thing here is that we do not have first party observations, so this could be dealt with, if handled carefully.
This is turning into a pretty complex but still easily enjoyable story.
At first, despite the author's warning, I was ready to drop the story somewhere around chapter 20 - Dan was just such so spineless and lacking any gumption to stand up for himself, letting himself be used repeatedly.
But after that it got better. As of chapter 80 Dan is willing to stand up for himself and not tolerate too much shit from those who are ignorant or just crap people. So, a pretty good story arc for him, and the author brought it along in a way that seems fairly natural and at a good pace. I don't know what will happen with Dan going forward but am happy so far.