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One day in 2019, the United States of America finds itself transported to a new world.
What will happen if a modern superpower from Earth finds itself in a world with magic and technology ranging from the medieval era to World War 1? F-22 Raptors vs wyverns and biplanes. Arleigh Burke-class destroyers vs wooden ships, mage ships, and dreadnaughts. M4 carbines vs bow n’ arrows, staffs, and bolt-action rifles. Featuring aggressive expansionist empires and magical kingdoms, what will the United States do?
I will do weekly updates every Sunday of chapters with about 1000-2000 words each.
This is the first novel I have ever written and is meant to be a draft. The official one will come out sometime after I finish this.
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Apologies in advance to the writer and fans of this story, but I am going to be exceedingly critical in my review. It is not my intention to be needlessly mean or cruel about it, but at the end of the day I strongly disliked this story and I'd like to make clear why.
Let's start with what this story is and isn't:
What this story isn't, is a technology vs magic story in which the USA is transported to a new world, has to struggle with their sudden change in paradigm, and faces internal and external conflicts in a fantasy setting.
What this story is, is a 500+ (at the time of writing) page love letter to the American military and how amazing and cool all their gear is. It honestly feels like someone took a 30 second US propaganda clip of miltary equipment and explosions and then extrapolated that into 2 books' worth of content.
There is no conflict in this story, at all. There is plenty of action and combat, sure. But there is zero conflict. Suddenly losing all existing ties to foreign countries has no meaningful impact on the country (turns out that 3 trillion dollars worth of yearly imports were not important at all). Nor is there any serious backlash or crisis from the population when the entire rest of the world is suddenly replaced by an alien and unknown planet (instead of, you know, widespread panic, chaos, and rioting).There aren't even some shady criminal/political figures trying to exploit the situation for their own personal gain.
Magic is real! But who cares, since America's tech is better in every single way (there isn't even a token attempt to investigate or research magic in the entire story). Is there anything that magic can do that is not accounted for by the US military doctrine (scrying, teleportation, magical shields, curses, etc.)? No, not at all.
There are hostile foreign/alien civilizations! But who cares, since they can't so much as lay a scratch on America's superior and amazing miltary hardware. Not even the language barrier is an issue, since everyone just speaks Latin (and every character immediately speaks it fluently without any issue).
The moral of this story appears to just be: "America is fantastic and great (as long as you ignore a few casual war crimes), and all the fantasy people are stupid, evil poopheads." Especially the elves in the later chapters are so over-the-top evil that I'm surprised that they haven't kicked any puppies to prove how evil they are. Then again, there really is not need since they are LITERAL unapologetic, genocidal, pillaging-and-raping nazis.
There is no conflict in this story. Because in every single interaction that a hostile native has with the American military, they are completely outclassed. To the point that in most cases, I could not even call the resulting combat "fighting", it's just American troops gunning down defenseless people.
Which leads me to perhaps this story greatest sin: Despite being near-constant action and combat scenes, the story is boring. Every "battle" is a foregone conclusion: The American's will win while taking zero injuries or casualties (or at least not in any meaningful numbers compared to the scale of the operation).
As for the rest:
The spelling and grammar are good, I didn't notice any noteworthy issues.
There are a few recurring characters, but none of them feel very rounded, or have any actual agency. Because when the characters can only win (or get unilaterally stomped into the ground for non-American characters), they don't have any meaningful decisions to make.
The style is tolerable. I found the overuse of the "magi" prefix to be rather grating. At one point it felt like I was reading about magisoldiers strapping on their magiboots and magihelmets so they could go climb up a magitree so they could fire magibullets using their magiguns (and I'm only slightly exaggerating here).
Similarly, every once in a while there would just be a wall of vehicle model numbers thrown at the reader, with the expectation that reader would just instinctively know what kind of thing an MBX-791A3Q naval variant is. Although, considering the story's target audience, that may be a reasonable assumption.
Aside from that, it felt pretty silly how many times something would bounce harmlessly off the front of an Abrams tank. I must have read a nearly-identical sentence that came down to that at least two or three dozen times.
At the end of the day, I can only recommend avoiding this story (unless the above description happens to be the exact thing you're into).
I like the premise and the start of the story. It got old pretty fast though.
I felt the story missed a lot of opportunities in describing new expansions, magic research, etc. The story focuses pretty much exclusively on war.
The story really dropped off and degraded in quality with the elves though. Way too much time spent on irrelevant things here. I just lost interest in the entire novel at this point. It would have been better if there was more magic use within the elven military. As it is written now it's basically just WW2 Germany. We know exactly how that would play out, so no suspense. We have already lost the novelty in the more extreme example of war vs WW1 countries.
As it stands right now, it's just one good idea that has to support a whole book. The story needs more creativity and some different directions to spice it up.
The concept was interesting, all of the USA was transported to another world where all the other humans are fighting with World War one doctrine and weapons or even older. But as expected the US steamrolls any opposition. If it wasn't for the colors of the text, the story would be impossible to follow as it jumps from one view to the next in quick succession.
The world has magic... but seems to be completely useless as it has very little impact on anything story-wise.
Then come in the elves, seemingly masters of magic, but all they bring to the table is World War II-era technology, specifically German tactics. Giving the Elves some interesting tech, or tactics could have made the story much more interesting. Instead, they are just hell-bent on killing all humans, using tanks, planes, and standard WWII-era ships.
As for the characters, none of them has any personality. They all just seem hell-bent on killing anything that they can with no thoughts of tactics, even the few American soldiers that appear in the story. The rest just flee hoping to escape the fighting.
The Grammar was decent but there is definitely room for improvement. Overall I had to give this story a low score. It could have been so much more. While I only read up to chapter 27, I didn't feel that continuing to read would change my mind in any significant fashion.
The idea is unique. The story itself is not bad. One can tell. the Author has put time and effort into researching various weapons and vehicles of diffrent eras. Its entertaining to read the clashes of diffrent eras. Unfortunately, the world building and the general plot seems rushed.
The existing Empires in the world just act like morons.(minor spoilers alert)/ We have a Empire who declares war on America without even bothering to gather any intel or any idea about the enemy capabilities. I struggle to see where this overconfidence come from ,when the Empire in question is already in an active stalemate war with another Empire.
Predictibily their navy gets curb stomped by America and their repsonse? Send in more navy. Both the emperor and his war councillor looks like they are on weed.
Magic is underused. So far its seems magic is just used more as a utility then actual magic. Which is a shame, cause it would have been interesting to see how modern weapons cope up with magic.
American President seems to think Lunch is more important then the whole new world situation he has find himself in.
Overall, the story is entertaining in an popcorn action Film sort of way. It just that the idea is weighted down by stupid actions and characters.
Two chapters in and a splitting headache from the lack of creativity
A State of mages called magusians? Fuck off
A president running from an emergency meeting because his whole goddamn country got teleported somewhere else just to get breakfast!?
An almighty being using cursory internet research to teleport all the assests of the us?
Sounds pretty dumb no?
I was bored so I gave this novel a try.
I'm not american and not sensible to nationalist point of view so it was a really tentative try.
But the point of view and location keep switching. It's hard to engage to the story. It's hard to understand. It's straining the eye for the author keep changing colors for every foreign language.
As the description promised, the story is heavy on military stuff. The whole point of the story is to make fight the US against fantasy world armies. And I suppose, at some point the US would roll over the new world and become the world greatest nation once again just because...
To put some context and comparison:
It remind me of Gate - Thus the JSDF Fought There!
Only it's less fun, a whole lot messier, extremely hard to read. You got it.
Style is abyssmally bad, like, whoever wrote this never bother reading an actual novel before giving it a try.
The story would have potential if it wasn't so hard to follow and to engage with it.
I don't know how to give it a character score. What character are we speaking about? There is so many point of view that there is basically no main character only a few reccurent ones and basically, an army of forgettable point of view, most of them bringing so little to the table that they are not worth remembering.
In the end if you are a proud american nationalist, if you don't mind the style and if don't mind the lack of a main point of view, you might enjoy reading this. (That a lot of "if")
But really... why this story is even in the trending?
Sadly the story doesn't live up to the premise. None of the huge problems a nation in a globalized economy would face without foreign trade are addressed or even hinted at. The antagonists are entirely stupid and are literally too stupid to exist. So, instead of portraying an interesting and difficult struggle, what we get instead is a boring and unbelievable story of the US military dominating everything without meaningful opposition
The idea for this story is actually good.
Sadly, the execution lacks.
Basically the pure power difference is too great.
There could be ways to fix this:
- Instead of a modern america it could be a WW2 america, or even earlier setting.
Powerful but within some limts to keep things interesting.
- The native nations lack a big population and therefore economy.
Outside of power difference most characters act stupid.
This can be aceptable to weaken a strong foe. A already weak foe is just ridiculous.
At the moment magic is underused.
It would have been more interesting with a magic empire as first foe.
Overall I like the idea to transplace a complete country instead of single persons or small groups. The story just destroys itself for the complete lack of tension.
Competent native leaders could have stolen technology or destroy key military assets with magic. Another alternative would be atleast one nation with superior technology.
Another twist could be that all nations are transported to this new world at the same time.
I started to read this story about three month ago when it hit trending. Wasn't too impressed, the fact that WW I era and even Napoleonic war era people can't recognize that a modern society is more advanced than they seemed rather strange to me.
To them, a Ford T seemingly looks exactly the same as a modern car, skyscrapers are unremarkable and nuclear-powered carriers are no bigger than coal-powered battleships! (although to be honest, the bigger empires could be in the conversion-to-oil phase already)
But it was early days yet, so I gave it 3 stars and decided to wait and see and continue reading once a few more chapters ran up (and the war that was looming came to fruit).
Unfortunately nothing much changed, except that now we can add the feeling of watching a boxing match between an MMA pro and a toddler to the general awkwardness of the story.
Yes, the US armed forces are capable of beating a fleet of sailing ships and after that several fleets of "only" 100-year-old ships and their respective armies. Why the author found it necessary to spend a dozen chapters on this incredible unremarkable feat is entirely beyond me.
I'm still waiting on fighting magical creatures as the cover pic promised! Where's my dragon? Perhaps a summoned, magic throwing hero, a bunch of elves with arrows punching through tanks and dwarves tough enough to withstand an artillery salvo. Fantastical monsters and how to slay them? Above all, WHERE IS THE TENSION?
At least there are few typos and the flow of the tale improved as the writing goes on. Extra star for that. We also seem to have an actual character to follow, even if he's on the wrong side of the power-divide. Still, not my kind of story. (yet?)
Author clearly loves military tech, similar to the GATE anime but obviously more amreica centric.
It's one of those "This situation is specifically contrived so we are not the bad guys" plots that isn't too egregious, so long as you accept that going in you can have a fun time.
There is some conversations that occasionally strike the "humans don't talk like that" Cord but they can be ignored, like the large sections of text detailing what specific armaments are going to be used to fuck up some wholly unprepared musketmans day. If you're into that, enjoy, otherwise just skim it so you don't miss any major plot points, but they can otherwise be ignored.
Otherwise, it's a decent curbstomp shitkicker, bring popcorn and remember the end is a forgone conclusion.