Arrogant Young Master Template A Variation 4

Arrogant Young Master Template A Variation 4

by LivingSpoon

What would a Xianxia MC do?

Seriously, what would they do? Asking for a friend.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
1. Transmigration ago
2. Disciple Acceptance Ceremony ago
3. Calamity ago
4. Not a Dream, Sorry ago
5. Tragedy of the Heroine ago
6. Archives Must Be Incomplete ago
7. Prepared ago
8. Gather for the Feast ago
9. Wolves' Hunger ago
10. Low Profile ago
11. Heroine Goes to Work ago
12. Like Father, Like Son ago
13. Anti-MC Thug Force ago
14. She Just Kept Talking... ago
15. Blockade ago
16. I Have Finished Farming ago
17. No Fun Allowed ago
18. A Father's Love ago
19. Endless Suffering ago
20. Power of Friendship ago
21. Tragic Past ago
22. Doubt ago
23. Magnet ago
24. Mistakes Were Made ago
25. Convergence ago
26. Old Friends Die Hard ago
27. Crystalized Effort ago
28. Not Slow Enough ago
29. Overreaction? ago
30. Devil ago
31. No Matter the Cost ago
32. Hurricane Arrives ago
33. Why So Reasonable? ago
34. Just Deserts ago
35. Anomalies ago
36. Expectation ago
37. Interference ago
38. Family First ago
39. Death Omen ago
40. Loophole ago
41. Traditional Gift ago
42. Ice Fishing ago
43. Anger Management ago
44. Uncontested Farming ago
45. King of Vegetables ago
46. Top Dog ago
47. Pampered Princess ago
48. An Object in Motion ago
49. Natural Order ago
50. Way of the Cockroach ago
51. They're Always Watching ago
52. Herbology Professor ago
53. Tampering ago
54. Reserve Force ago
55. The Tyrant ago
56. Fiercely Filial ago
57. Over the Specified Limits ago
58. Anti-Divination Alliance ago
59. No Need to Delay ago
60. Pro-Divination Alliance ago
61. Future Concubine ago
62. It isn't Cheating ago
63. Heartwarming Advice ago
64. Ancient Plan ago
65. Cost of Exposure ago
66. Natural Habitat ago
67. The Chicken or the Egg? ago
68. First Contact ago
69. Bursting Watermelon ago
70. Like Mother, Like Son ago
71. Nerd Rage ago
72. Hat Trick ago
73. Special Delivery ago
74. Senpai ago
75. Always Respectful ago
76. Quite Dangerous ago
77. Little Fish ago
78. Familiar Structure ago
79. SYS-UMS-3516961 ago
80. Long Ai ago
81. Carrot All the Way ago
82. Unfulfilled Wish ago
83. The Survivor ago
84. Going Against Fate ago
85. Old Habits Die Hard ago
86. Can't Follow the Rabbit ago
87. Harbinger of Doom ago
88. Priorities ago
89. Just Like the Simulations ago
90. Prank Call ago
91. Anti-Harem Alliance ago
92. Reverse-Harem Alliance ago
93. Totally Not an Array Master ago
94. Three Weirdos ago
95. Exhausting ago
96. True Long ago
97. Predesigned ago
98. Status Upgrade ago
99. Grandmaster Delusions ago
100. Aesthetically Incomplete ago
101. Captain Proton ago
102. Dark Flame Master ago
103. Harem Protagonists Must Die ago
104. Trek Through the Stars ago
105. Local Cuisine ago
106. Unaware of the Elder Behind ago
107. Transmigrator Support Group ago
108. Hot Rainbow ago
109. Two Fatal Mistakes ago
110. Shattered Hopes ago
111. Swan Wants to Eat Toad Meat ago
112. Series of Unfortunate Mistakes ago
113. Truth Seer ago
114. Gratitude Farmer ago
115. Death by Snu Snu ago
116. Sacrificial Lamb ago
117. Ancient Measures ago
118. The Truth of This World ago
119. Slumbering Splinter ago
120. Second Hand Mistakes ago
121. History Repeating Itself ago
122. Crazy Parents ago
123. Reunion ago
124. Excessive Halo ago
125. Beyond Terrified ago
126. First Accident ago
127. Candy Giving Stranger ago
128. Shalalala ago
129. Many Meetings ago
130. Irreversible Corruption ago
131. Sweet Whispers ago
132. Father Knows Best ago
133. Monster Receives Permission ago
134. Dao of Money ago
135. Still Not Quite ago
136. Old Frenemies ago
137. Benefits ago
138. [Remaining: 2] ago
139. Professional Courtesy ago
140. Primordial Oblivion Bloodline ago
141. Will to Destroy ago
142. Bringer of Hope ago
143. Unreliable Help ago
144. White Moonlight ago
145. All About Mechanics ago
146. Self-Realization ago
147. Resurgence ago

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humblepeasant
Overall

It's a more interesting xianxia than most actual xianxia.

knork14
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Strong start, tear inducing humor,but ends poorly

Reviewed at: 76. Quite Dangerous

Those first 50 chapter are pure gold. The author manages to use the weathered and exhausted xianxia genre and make it good and funny, and even though i know we probably wont see the novel ending(1 year of hiatus by now, we all know what that means) i dont regret starting to read it(and even recomend) because apart from the last arc everything is of very high quality.

But what went wrong you ask? Well the author did a really good foreshadowing, putting little things here and there to use later in the story, and that in itself is comendable. But he didnt deliver it well, and what could have been a useful plot device become a badly executed plot twist. At some point he started adding too many elements to the story(classic xianxia author move) and i guess it becames hard to keep tracks of things.I would say if he was willing to erase those last 10 chapters and revise where he wants to go with this story, this story could stand side to side with RR best ones.

Overall i say go ahead and read it, it is a fun story,one that i dont regret having read, has a decent grammar score , just be aware that it ends abruptly and on a bad note. If you just want something fun to read for a couple days please go ahead, the chapters themselves are pretty long, and even binge reading it took me a awhile to finish it up

sarbification
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It's a realy good and funny story.

Reviewed at: 1. Transmigration

I realy like it very much. Start was bad, this so 'chines' start that i wanted stoped right now, but when i read further I really enjoyed.     It's sometimes funny due to MC and his struggles with cultivation world. The story will start be intresting and funny when he take his disciple, it about at 8 chapter. Try it, i think you will not to regret.

Kuro_Usagi
Overall

Two words. Blown. Away. 

It might be the late night magic talking, but I was shocked in such a pleasant way about how well the stoty felt to me. I've read many many chinese webnovels and this was like a breath of fresh air.

It's has such an interesting mix of xianxia tropes but it's coupled with a dose of trope-wary mc who knows the plotlines of xianxia stories. 

It's simply amazing how it's done and I know that I'll be eagerly awaiting every chapter for hopefully many moons to come.

Yay
Overall

I haven't read a wuxia system novel in a while

Reviewed at: 34. Just Deserts

First of all my English is not native so I apologize in advance for the inevitable mistakes I will make next. HAHAHA I really enjoyed this novel, as I said in the title above a long time ago that I never read a cultivation novel, mainly system and you got the essence of it. I highly recommend it to anyone reading wuxias novels as this is really good I laughed out loud here.

RedPine
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MC's alignment is "pragmatic lazy, borderline evil."  He doesnt go out of his way to be evil, but when your only tools a hammer, and you live in a cultivator eat cultivator World, all your potential  enemies start looking like nails.

Overall tone is similar to Overlord.  Decently written, fun characters, lots of misunderstandings.  Sadly, i am not capable of appreciating any joke that has death or attempted murder as a punchline.

Good story, but its not for me.

Across_The_Street
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Likely the best twist to the genre in years.

Reviewed at: 76. Quite Dangerous

Disclaimer: This novel is currently on hiatus as of chapter 76. The last update was 15 months ago, as of 06/29/21. The author was last online on Royal Road on 03/25/20. This novel is unfinished, and stopped in the middle of one of the most climactic and plot changing events seen yet in the novel, it is extremely unlikely that the novel will continue to get updated. Be warned.

 

Style:

The authors writing style is mostly impeccable. He chose a way of writing the story and then switched it towards the end of the novel. Otherwise, the the way the humor works, the way dialogue is done, it's all pretty fantastic.

 

Story:

Alright, now there's a lot of conflict in these reviews as to how the novel has devolved over time, I'd really have to disagree. There is one thing that could've brought some disguntlement, the author switched the direction of the story towards the end. That does not mean that the latter part of the story is bad in any way, for those who said it is, they're simply wrong. The author didn't stop being a good writer, he just changed how the story was developing. To give you the short of it, he went from lighthearted novel that puts a fun twist on the average cultivation novel and decided to change it into a creative, but more serious, cultivation novel with an actual story, and not a plotless comedy. Granted the plotless comedy was incredibly well written, and was very enjoyable, but the developing plot in the latter part of the novel made the novel more satisfying. I'm pretty sure the people who didn't like it were simply upset because they weren't prepared for the sudden seriousness thrust into the novel.

 

Grammar:

Absolutely readable, and very few flaws. Unfortunately, the author sometimes forgets to put words like "the" or similar small things. I do not know why. To give an example, "Hallway lights quickly dimmed, sunlight almost completely disappeared from the entire palace and stars appeared in the sky, shining brightly." That's a quote. No, it doesn't say "The hallway lights..." or "the sunlight..." It's very odd, but at least it hardly gets in the way of readability.

 

Characters:

This is where the novel really shines. Granted, the side characters aren't absolutely perfect, but then again, they're supposed to follow xianxia tropes, so I think that just goes to show that the author wrote characters that actually fit the book. But honestly, I don't care about those whatsoever, not at all. The really fantastic thing that the author has done is make a novel, which like many, start with an "arrogant young master/villain" character and... wait for it.... actually make them act as such. Good lord, about time. Right? How many times have you clicked on a novel with a similar description or similar tags, and the character ends up acting like a coward, or turns totally serious and stops acting like whatever character they were transmigrated into. That's the most annoying thing in the world, I swear. The least they could do is stick to the concept. I fully understand that the actual person that was transmigrated would not be the same, and that's normal, it's in this novel too, but if the character says something like "I've gotta keep a low profile and act like [whatever their body's original person acted like (trash/arrogant etc.)]" and then proceed to act like a super serious cultivator who was hiding their abilities in front of absolutely everyone literally two chapters away... Why? Why even have the character say something like that if it simply wasn't going to happen. That doesn't show how cool your character is, it shows that your character couldn't stick to his own plan, or rather, the author couldn't. Now, granted, this author made it easier for himself by having his character be an arrogant, but dedicated, cultivator from the beginning. It wasn't considered "out of character" for the new guy who transmigrated to be getting stronger. But the way these things generally go is that the actual main character would act like a super arrogant dude in front of everyone, and then among those he trusts, friends, subooridinates, disciples, would turn into a cowardly shivering wreck. Then they'd show everyone's perspectives, facepalming, wondering how the main character was such a good actor, wondering who the "real [mc's name] was." Not in this one, any sign of dissociation between the way the mc needs to act to keep up the original's facade and his actual personality is entirely internalized. This makes the novel a million times better, and for the first time in a long time, makes the "reincarnated into the arrogant villain" twist come out correctly, rather than totally scuffed misadvertisement.

 

Overall:

For the first time, a correct spin on the "young master" twist, even though the whole novel is a parody on the idea. A fantastically original novel with only very minor grammatical errors that do not affect readability. Changes the direction of the story 3/4ths of the way through to a more serious take on the xianxia idea, and splits from being a 'comedic parody', to 'a comedic parody protagonist has slowly found himself in a dark and dangerous universe with many mysteries and dangers surrounding him.' If that sounds like your kinda gig, stick around.

trashe1
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Like History's Number 1 Founder with a promise of yanderes.

Reviewed at: 68. First Contact

Chapters 35-68 review:

It gets better and better. Typos are very infrequent in the latest chapters and the writing quality is noticeably better or I'm in a better mood. A lot of things still feel like they come out of left field but rather than feeling under-detailed or deus ex machina they seem like the hooks and mysteries they were meant to be. World is beginning to be fleshed out as the MC discovers more and is let in on more secrets. A large plot/arc starts in these chapters. Character interactions are still NOT overdone- seems like a good balance of jokes/progression to me. Really like the direction this is going!

Chapters 1-34 review

This is like History's Number One Founder but less pretentious.

This is like Library of Heaven's Path but less goofy.

This is better than both because the publisher isn't a soul-sucking evil corporation, just an evil soul-sucking man (probably.)

Also, the author promised yanderes. What more do you need to know?

I'd explain what the series is about and what has happened but there are a lot of reveals in the first few chapters that rely on you not knowing what to expect. So, just read it and if you like chapters 1-3, be assured there is more of that. For those who can't stand not knowing, scroll down to the spoiler.

Grammar: 3.5 stars. Some words are replaced with phonetically similar words and there are some typical Chinese-ESL errors: Prepositions and pronoun genders are off. Most the novel is intelligible but the pronoun gender thing is very noticable. e.g. "They probably had no idea where this fox woman and his supposed brother had gone to." The prepositional errors make for odd positionings, e.g. "He stood there with his hands clasped on his back," reads in English as a man holding his own (or someone else's) back. So far the scenes have been simple so it is clear what is intended from context but this will quickly get out of hand if there are complex fight scenes in future chapters. There is also a lot of improper comma use but it doesn't affect the reading much.

Style: Excellent so far, if a little cheesy. The cheese is delicious. World detail and presentation proceeds like HN1F but with less purple prose and more plot advancement per chapter. There are some mid-chapter POV switches that are comprehensible but poorly transitioned.

Characters: On par with the two works I mentioned. MC might be slightly better done. Side characters are equal to HN1F in complexity but presentation of motives is below Library of Heaven's Path, so far.

Story Score:  Uh... 34 chapters in the story is only just starting. World seems good but the presentation makes you feel like these really detailed settings are appearing from nowhere. There is little explanation of the world logic so the motivations of the non-MC characters is sometimes unclear and often seems superficial.

Things to fix: pronouns, prepositions, and introduction of character backgrounds/motivation/personality. I don't mean add lots of exposition but some of the characters are so opaque and/or bland the story would sometimes be better served by a 2 sentence exposition on the state of the world than adding a character to explain some aspect of it.

 

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Spoiler: Spoiler

 

mrtats
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Xianxia Template E Variation 2

Reviewed at: 38. Family First

Just plain fun, I always chuckle when reading this story and I hope you, the prospective reader would also enjoy this story as much as I do.

Style: It is not an average Xianxia novel, I could tell you that. Expect a lot of tropes being used as a subterfuge. 

Story: What can I say it is fun and a fresh breath into the xianxia genre.

Grammar: Minor grammar mistakes considering the author is not from an English speaking country.

Character: There are of course some minor complications with some side characters but that doesn't take away from the story.

Enjoy 

Ipponkiller
Overall

Great story at the start - got over ambitious

Reviewed at: 144. White Moonlight

Loved the story before the hiatus ... but damn the huge chapter drop after it didnĀ“t do it any favours. 

At this point the author is just throwing around more and more subplots and more and more characters without actually giving any of them the time they deserve. Nothing gets really resolved, just put aside for the moment as more and more subplots and characters get introduced. 

I get complex stories, but this is just not good enough that I want to have my own private list with all known characters and subplots so I can keep track all the time.

As an example:

It turns out that the random spirit cook that worked for our MC is this super expert that was the teacher of his grandmother (or someone like that) ... who may also think he is the reincarnation of her lover if that is the same character talking ... confusing stuff all around.

Of course at the point of that reveal I had already forgotten that he even had that spirit cook because she was so unimportant and drowned under the mass of other plot and characters.

I still like our MC and his interactions with random xianxia stereotypes, but damn did the author overestimate his ability on how much different plots and characters he could handle at the same time/in short succession, and it turned the story into a mess.