Unfathomable Senior

TL;DR: Fairly relaxed, slice of life type of story, with some flaws. Not too bad overall. It's easy to read and understand. In my opinion, there is not enough tension, as the MC has no overarching goal beside getting stronger, or at least no personal investment in anything.

A more indepth review aimed at the author:

Style: This is where the biggest flaws appear. The language used is fairly simplistic and doesn't always flow well. To illustrate and give you some pointers on what (not) to do, here are some examples:

• Don't use the word "guess" at the start of sentences so often. If a character says that in a sentence or thinks it directly, that's (barely) alright. But if you are going for an objective third person narrator, you definitely can't use sentences like "Guess bombarding enemies with overwhelming ranged skills could work,...", because that is a (grammatically incorrectly) shortened version of "I guess bombarding enemies...". Your narrator is third person in every other instance, so this is disorienting and wrong.
• Don't refer to women as "females". It feels as if you were talking about an animal of some kind, not a human. Call them women, girls, crones (if you like and they're old), anything really, just not "females". You never once referred to men as "males" in your story, probably because of the same reason. It is weird and demeaning.
• Don't address the reader directly as a narrator when describing things ("You could see a tree..."). This feels weird, because your narrator is not an active participant in the story and neither are your readers.
• Don't use words like "baddie" when describing enemies (as the narrator). It kills the tension. As an example, let's say we've got the MC facing his archnemesis, the person who killed his family and sold him as a slave in combat. So, a fairly tense situation right? Now watch what happens if you write something like this: "...His eyes were focused on him. He who had taken everything and left only suffering and hatred in his wake. He who killed his wife and children. At the face that was still haunting his dreams every night. Smiling, the slaver drew his sword, the sword used to cut little Jasons head off. The baddie advanced and cut towards his neck...".     Totally kills the tension, right? So long story short, don't do it.

Also another important thing: Show, don't tell!

 Story: For me personally, there isn't enough tension. Everything seems easy, and the MC never seems to struggle. But if slice of life is what you're going for, then that is perfectly fine. Otherwise, it's fairly standard. Nothing exeptionally good or bad here.

Grammar: The spelling is mostly alright, but there are a few mistakes here and there.

Characters: Overall, they're all fairly bland. The MC never seems to really struggle or suffer any actual hardships. I think 70 chapters in, that's unlikely to change. Most characters never feel really fleshed out, most of them are defined by their relationship with the MC.

Look,

the story does get better after a hundred chapters of below-average power fantasy. Afterwards, the story becomes something that I would rate as average. The length is respectable, but it also means that the author is less likely going back to rewrite the story or correct the many grammatical mistakes.

The story is marked as comedy and it is a very subjective topic, but I personally hate when almost all of the jokes are referring to a meme's or pop-culture. There are some good one's but, again, in the latter part of the story.

My main issue, however, is that that the only person with a semblance of any character is the MC (and one side character at the start of the story), and even that is stretching the definition of the word a bit.

Everyone is a cliche. Disciples? Enemies? Friends? All cliche. Every single character is one dimensional. Everything revolves around MC. No one even questions MC, everyone just accepts, that he is right and just. 

You would think that if he is thrown in an unknown world he would mostly mess up, but no. He just goes around almost never making a mistake with no logical explanation, besides - modern man smart, natives - not. Traditions? Civilization? Functional society? What's that? Probably nothing important.

In the end, the only people I can recommend this story to is the ones who want a long read which does not challenge you to think.

Personally, I enjoyed the story but the recent chapters have made me decide to quit. The premise is ok, the grammar is good and the world you've created is nice but the main character ruined it for me. Initially, I was fine with his antics as being thrown into a cultivation world from the modern world would require a period of time to adjust so the entire first major arc was somewhat believable and enjoyable. However, the time skip into the second arc and the MC's actions in the new arc ruined everything because he's still a massive idiot. I feel like that time skip should have allowed him to become more mature, a better leader, and more knowledgeable/adjusted with the cultivation world he found himself in but that's not the case. He doesn't act like a proper leader, doesn't ask for advice from the more experienced people, doesn't take into account the new worldview and so much more. He is currently trying to introduce modern concepts like law, trials, police, weekend, etc but he fails to tell others what he wants and just arbitrarily says this is how it's going to be without trying to make sure his clan understands. He completely fails as a leader and acts like a dictator that has no clue how to run a clan let alone a city. The MC's actions make it seem like he's a little kid bossing people around and assuming everything will understand what he wants and that everything will turn out fine but it doesn't and won't. For that, I've finally decided to drop it. To the author, I enjoyed it so far but your MC isn't really growing or developing and seems stuck as if he had just arrived in the world in all the ways that matter besides combat.

The story was great but seems the author lost interest in the story and doese something unexpected and unappreciated  

Was going great, entertaining and good story, then after 260 chapters... Well, a lot changes. It was actually very disappointing, as I was enjoying what was there before. Maybe I'd enjoy what came after too, but I lost all interest in continuing to read due to events around that chapter.

As far as xianxia goes, it's ok. The thing is, this novel bypasses the standard grindy training by giving the MC a system with a shop. Shop that already contains everything he could ever possibly need. And then sends him to the world messianic supersoldier style.

The novel could have better execution, but the premise is done so that the MC can get anything without much struggle whatsoever. It cheapens the achievement so much it looses any value it could possibly have. It's the billionaire son bragging about buying a new Lamborghini as a birthday gift for his dog walker.

Nothing super original about the concept behind the story since it's your classic "gamer gets transmigrated to another world with a mysterious game-like system" story.  However, it is well written and fairly amusing for a xianxia story, without too much filler or dragging out the plot.  Overall, it is a decent story that is fairly enjoyable.

1. JThe story has an interesting premise. It can be better. Author struggles with grammar. It has refreshing feeling to it as it is different to the normal xianxia novels. However, I believe this story will eventually suffer from the xianxia curse(story progression basically halts). Chapter 157-159 are a clear indication of that. 

The story does have potential though but once again, stories like these tend to suffer from creativity. Charavter growth is lacking. The world building is lacking. This can be fixed in later chapter though. Once again don't forget character growth is lacking. Character deaths are less likely to occur if they do. Author will probably introduce some bullshit resurrecting system. Unrealistic but some realistic elements would be nice. It would make the story better 

Read the story though it's interesting. It's like a different version of arrogant young master and everybody is a cultivation idiot... just slightly worse like a 14 year old school essay. 

Anyways this is a story you read to pass time. Give it a shot. Story needs a rewrite. A massive rewrite.

Chapter 800 and my soul has been crushe6. The story is confusing.  Too many themes. That don't gel or make sense. A pity. 

There are flaws, sure. It's a fun somewhat wish fulfillment novel that doesn't take itself too seriously. 

I would have liked to see some growth from the start, base level. Hardships, character growth, the likes. It's not a serious novel of that nature though, it keeps it light and fun.  The authors has been able to throw enough hardships in, that even with his overpowered system, it still keeps it interesting.

If you want to enjoy a light Xianxias series for fun, you'll enjoy it.

Kuropon isn't reinventing the wheel with this story, but the toungue-in-cheek manner in which it unfolds is amusing. I'm enjoying this story a great deal, even with its flaws.

Be a Zhang! :p