blacklight

by tkayo

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

 So here’s the deal: my name is Kihri Vyas, and I’m dead.

(That’s not really important, it happened ages ago, but it’s good to have the context.)

Anyway, me and my sister Zarah (the only person who can see or hear me) have basically been on our own since I kicked the bucket, surviving on the streets of Kaila and sort of just being miserable and bored and tired a lot. I mean, I haven’t, cause I’m dead, but she has. It sucks, but that’s business as usual for us.

What isn’t B-A-U is that a bunch of other homeless folks have been disappearing in the last few months, and some of them have been turning up with anatomically-improbable, but extraordinary fatal, injuries. Cops don’t give a shit, of course, and my sister’s a boneheaded bleeding heart, so we’ve been investigating them ourselves.

And, well, we’ve found a bunch of weird shit. Stuff made of solid light, ghost attack dogs, people glowing black, somehow, some kind of living robot…

Actually, you know what? It’s probably easier if you see for yourself.


blacklight is a modern fantasy story

it's not about being gay but rest assured its gay as fuck nevertheless

it updates fridays at 2 p.m. AEST on its own site at https://spectrochroma.wordpress.com/

Chapters are uploaded here one week after they finish on the main site.

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Elliott Staude
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Chromatic Conspiracies Chasing Children (also people getting mulched)

Reviewed at: Chapter One: Adulthood

Blacklight is an odd duck. Total honesty: at first, it seemed like it was a superhero work doing everything in its power to disguise that fact – nothing against superhero fiction, but it carries certain expectations. Instead . . . it’s not exactly clear into what bucket Blacklight should get shoved. First, the setting’s an Earth-like locale with countries that have certain obvious parallels to present day but nothing so transparent as simply renaming France to Nonexistentia or some such. It’s not something that falls under “alternate history,” though I suppose you might run into something like the world described therein if the Romans had gotten their phalanxes handed to them by one of their many historically subjugated foes. There’s a bit of mystery, in that there’s an urban fantasy vibe which the majority of people just don’t understand or acknowledge (dead siblings coming back as ghosts and such). A pinch of political bug-ranching here and there. Suffice it to say that those interested in something like shonen productions will probably find this one compelling.

So far, Blacklight’s marshaling forces to become the best supernatural THING it can be. The cast is a bit odd; main character’s a vagrant youth exclusively haunted by her dead sister, trying to go along and get along in a country where she has difficulty speaking the language, let alone being evenly treated in light of her ethnicity. The one has massive personal issues from her sister and the fact that she’s being dragged feet first into stuff she doesn’t understand, and the other one has massive personal issues on account of being dead. They’re a dynamic duo, sure enough, and it’s interesting how much common ground you can have with someone talking to a floating person that relentlessly teases her and who regularly has to go days without food fit for human consumption. It’s a surprisingly thematically sturdy work; there’s elements of coping with racial ostracism, but it also dives into matters of where one’s planting their roots constitutes “home.” It asks questions touching on the nature of abandonment. When you look into Blacklight, you’re looking into something quixotic in the best way possible; on the one hand, the more traditional sense of lone-understanding where the principal cast has an understanding of a secret world. On the other hand, it asks where one falls when strong conviction rams up against everything our peers say can possibly be true.

So far, Blacklight has thrown a hundred questions into the air and provided... well, less than a hundred answers. As things go forward, hopefully resolution will pick up momentum, but that fifty two pickup of information dump may put some readers off its progression. I find it endearing, but being a weird person on every level that may not hold for everybody. Other than that, though, the tiny snippets of story dispersal might strike a bit of a sour note. There’s obviously the intent to keep people updated on the goings-on of the incredible necromancer sister and her sibling’s antics. However, the decision to make more frequent publishings of smaller quantity gives it a bit much of a start-stop air. Perhaps twice the length of an episode, put out half as often, would improve other people's enjoyment as well by letting them stay in the action longer. It’s something worth following, but as a binge-inclined individual I prefer my medicine to come in slightly larger doses. Even so, it's a nice-tasting medicine with good dialogue and people who talk like you'd expect them to talk, and stands in a pretty elevated percentile as far as good use of language goes.

Urban fantasy with kind-of-historical fiction and character driven storytelling is a jam that many will appreciate. Solid grasp of its own cerebral philosophy. There’s something worthwhile to be had here for a lot of consumers, if they’re willing to supply the patient attention. Weird? Several kinds of weird. And weird will always have a place setting at THIS table.

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Honestly,

I was drawn in by the story more than I should have been. The story achieves a great balance between many social problems most of the less fortunate people face and humour. The action is visceral and easy to follow, apart from one chapter, where it was changed up for narrative purposes. Characters have... you know, character.

It is also great to see an MC who is (from what I gather, I may be wrong) of what would be middle eastern descent on Earth. And while the world this story takes place in is not Earth, the familiarities are still there.

It is also interesting to see MC's struggle with the language. 

Which leads to grammar. I personally noticed only a single mistake. Do bear in mind though, that English is not my native language.

All in all my only gripe is of how:

There are maybe a bit too many lesbian characters. I mean, most of the characters that are introduced are female, and for some reason, a lot of them seems to have homosexual tendencies.

Despite story having undertones that are related to racism, there seems to be almost nothing about homosexuality, which seems like an oversight in a story where MC IS lesbian.

Maybe that is left for later.

Many great ideas, highly recommended, 10 out of 10, would read again.