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Chapter Name Release Date
Α0: Carl Encounters Introduction ago
Ω0: Introduction Encounters Carl ago
Α1.0: Carl Encounters Tutorial ago
Α1.1: Carl Encounters Tutorial ago
Α1.2: Carl Encounters Tutorial ago
Ω1.0: Tutorial Encounters Carl ago
Ω1.1: Tutorial Encounters Carl ago
Ω1.2: Tutorial Encounters Carl ago
Ω1.3: Tutorial Encounters Carl ago
Ω1.4: Tutorial Encounters Carl ago
Ω2: A Sneeze Encounters Carl ago
Α2: Carl Encounters A Sneeze ago
Α3: Carl Encounters A Pickle ago
Ω3.0: A Pickle Encounters Carl ago
Ω3.1: A Pickle Encounters Carl ago
Ω3.2: A Pickle Encounters Carl ago
Ω4.0: A Gatekeeper Encounters Carl ago
Ω4.1: A Gatekeeper Encounters Carl ago
Α4.0: Carl Encounters A Gatekeeper ago
Α4.1: Carl Encounters A Gatekeeper ago
Α4.2: Carl Encounters A Gatekeeper ago
Α5.0: Carl Encounters A Small Starting Town ago
Α5.1: Carl Encounters A Small Starting Town ago
Ω5.0: A Small Starting Town Encounters Carl ago
Ω5.1: A Small Starting Town Encounters Carl ago
Ω5.2: A Small Starting Town Encounters Carl ago
Ω5.3: A Small Starting Town Encounters Carl ago
Ω5.4: A Small Starting Town Encounters Carl ago
Α6.0: Carl Encounters A Trap ago
Α6.1: Carl Encounters A Trap ago
Ω6.0: A Trap Encounters Carl ago
Ω6.1: A Trap Encounters Carl ago
Ω7.0: Coffee Encounters Carl ago
Ω7.1: Coffee Encounters Carl ago
Ω7.2: Coffee Encounters Carl ago
Α7.0: Carl Encounters Coffee ago
Α7.1: Carl Encounters Coffee ago
Ω8: Weakness Encounters Carl ago
Α8.0: Carl Encounters Weakness ago
Α8.1: Carl Encounters Weakness ago
Α9: Carl Encounters A Scheme ago
Ω9.0: A Scheme Encounters Carl ago
Ω9.1: A Scheme Encounters Carl ago
Α10.0: Carl Encounters Revenge Of A Sort ago
Α10.1: Carl Encounters Revenge Of A Sort ago
Α10.2: Carl Encounters Revenge Of A Sort ago
Α10.3: Carl Encounters Revenge Of A Sort ago
Ω10.0: Revenge Of A Sort Encounters Carl ago
Ω10.1: Revenge Of A Sort Encounters Carl ago
Ω10.2: Revenge Of A Sort Encounters Carl ago
Ω10.3: Revenge Of A Sort Encounters Carl ago
Ω11.0: Trauma Encounters Carl ago
Ω11.1: Trauma Encounters Carl ago
Ω11.2: Trauma Encounters Carl ago
Ω11.3: Trauma Encounters Carl ago
Α11.0: Carl Encounters Trauma ago
Α11.1: Carl Encounters Trauma ago
Α11.2: Carl Encounters Trauma ago
Α11.3: Carl Encounters Trauma ago
Α12.0: Carl Encounters Reality ago
Α12.1: Carl Encounters Reality ago
Ω12.0: Reality Encounters Carl ago
Ω12.1: Reality Encounters Carl ago
cron: Saturday, 08:58 ago
cron: Saturday, 09:22 ago
cron: Saturday, 12:07 ago
cron: Saturday, 12:19 ago
cron: Saturday, 16:33 ago
cron: Saturday, 19:40 ago
cron: Sunday, 07:58 ago
cron: Sunday, 10:44 ago
cron: Sunday, 11:43 ago
cron: Sunday, 13:50 ago
cron: Sunday, 15:19 ago
cron: Monday, 09:36 ago
cron: Monday, 11:46 ago
cron: Monday, 14:02 ago
cron: Monday, 18:33 ago
cron: Monday, 19:06 ago
cron: Tuesday, 09:36 ago
Α13: Carl Battles Lunch ago
Ω13: Lunch Battles Carl ago
Α14.0: Carl Battles Minor Annoyances ago
Α14.1: Carl Battles Minor Annoyances ago
Ω14.0: Minor Annoyances Battle Carl ago
Ω14.1: Minor Annoyances Battle Carl ago
Ω15.0: Vertigo Battles Carl ago
Ω15.1: Vertigo Battles Carl ago
Ω15.2: Vertigo Battles Carl ago
Α15.0: Carl Battles Vertigo ago
Α15.1: Carl Battles Vertigo ago
Α16.0: Carl Battles Friendship ago
Α16.1: Carl Battles Friendship ago
Ω16.0: Friendship Battles Carl ago
Ω16.1: Friendship Battles Carl ago
Ω16.2: Friendship Battles Carl ago
Ω16.3: Friendship Battles Carl ago
Α17.0: Carl Battles Crossovers ago
Α17.1: Carl Battles Crossovers ago
Α17.2: Carl Battles Crossovers ago
Ω17.0: Crossovers Battle Carl ago
Ω17.1: Crossovers Battle Carl ago
Α18: Carl Battles Pedantry ago
Ω18.0: Pedantry Battles Carl ago
Ω18.1: Pedantry Battles Carl ago
Α19.0: Carl Battles Developments ago
Α19.1: Carl Battles Developments ago
Ω19.0: Developments Battle Carl ago
Ω19.1: Developments Battle Carl ago
Ω19.2: Developments Battle Carl ago
Α20: Carl Battles Realizations ago
Ω20.0: Realizations Battle Carl ago
Ω20.1: Realizations Battle Carl ago
Α21.0: Carl Battles Madness ago
Α21.1: Carl Battles Madness ago
Ω21.0: Madness Battles Carl ago
Ω21.1: Madness Battles Carl ago
Ω21.2: Madness Battles Carl ago
Ω21.3: Madness Battles Carl ago
Ω21.4: Madness Battles Carl ago
Α22.0: Carl Battles Closure ago
Α22.1: Carl Battles Closure ago
Ω22.0: Closure Battles Carl ago
Ω22.1: Closure Battles Carl ago
Ω22.2: Closure Battles Carl ago
Ω22.3: Closure Battles Carl ago
Ω22.4: Closure Battles Carl ago
cron: Tuesday, 12:49 ago
cron: Tuesday, 13:36 ago
cron: Tuesday, 14:00 ago
cron: Tuesday, 14:10 ago
cron: Tuesday, 16:43 ago
cron: Tuesday, 18:11 ago
cron: Tuesday, 19:47 ago
cron: Tuesday, 22:54 ago
cron: Wednesday, 06:03 ago
Α23: Carl Shocks His Schedule ago
Ω23: Carl Is Shocked By His Schedule ago
Α24: Carl Shocks Arrivals ago
Ω24.0: Carl Is Shocked By Arrivals ago
Ω24.1: Carl Is Shocked By Arrivals ago
Ω24.2: Carl Is Shocked By Arrivals ago
Ω24.3: Carl Is Shocked By Arrivals ago
Ω24.4: Carl Is Shocked By Arrivals ago
Α25.0: Carl Shocks A Gatekeeper ago
Α25.1: Carl Shocks A Gatekeeper ago
Ω25.0: Carl Is Shocked By A Gatekeeper ago
Ω25.1: Carl Is Shocked By A Gatekeeper ago
Ω25.2: Carl Is Shocked By A Gatekeeper ago
Α26.0: Carl Shocks New Things ago
Α26.1: Carl Shocks New Things ago
Α26.2: Carl Shocks New Things ago
Α26.3: Carl Shocks New Things ago
Α26.4: Carl Shocks New Things ago
Ω26.0: Carl Is Shocked By New Things ago
Ω26.1: Carl Is Shocked By New Things ago
Ω26.2: Carl Is Shocked By New Things ago
Ω26.3: Carl Is Shocked By New Things ago
Α27.0: Carl Shocks The First Morning ago
Α27.1: Carl Shocks The First Morning ago
Α27.2: Carl Shocks The First Morning ago
Α27.3: Carl Shocks The First Morning ago
Α27.4: Carl Shocks The First Morning ago
Ω27.0: Carl Is Shocked By The First Morning ago
Ω27.1: Carl Is Shocked By The First Morning ago
Α28.0: Carl Shocks Errands ago
Α28.1: Carl Shocks Errands ago
Α28.2: Carl Shocks Errands ago
Α28.3: Carl Shocks Errands ago
Α28.4: Carl Shocks Errands ago
Ω28.0: Carl Is Shocked By Errands ago
Ω28.1: Carl Is Shocked By Errands ago
Ω28.2: Carl Is Shocked By Errands ago
Ω28.3: Carl Is Shocked By Errands ago
Ω28.4: Carl Is Shocked By Errands ago
Ω28.5: Carl Is Shocked By Errands ago
Α29.0: Carl Shocks Encounters ago
Α29.1: Carl Shocks Encounters ago
Α29.2: Carl Shocks Encounters ago
Α29.3: Carl Shocks Encounters ago
Ω29.0: Carl Is Shocked By Encounters ago
Ω29.1: Carl Is Shocked By Encounters ago
Ω29.2: Carl Is Shocked By Encounters ago
Ω29.3: Carl Is Shocked By Encounters ago
Α30.0: Carl Shocks Fear ago
Α30.1: Carl Shocks Fear ago
Onyxfell Character Directory v1.0 ago
Α30.2: Carl Shocks Fear ago
Α30.3: Carl Shocks Fear ago
Α30.4: Carl Shocks Fear ago
Ω30.0: Carl Is Shocked By Fear ago
Ω30.1: Carl Is Shocked By Fear ago
Ω30.2: Carl Is Shocked By Fear ago
Ω30.3: Carl Is Shocked By Fear ago
Α31.0: Carl Shocks A Change Of Pace ago
Α31.1: Carl Shocks A Change Of Pace ago
Α31.2: Carl Shocks A Change Of Pace ago
Α31.3: Carl Shocks A Change Of Pace ago
Α31.4: Carl Shocks A Change Of Pace ago
Α31.5: Carl Shocks A Change Of Pace ago
Ω31: Carl Is Shocked By A Change Of Pace ago
Α32.0: Carl Shocks An Evolving Bargain ago
Α32.1: Carl Shocks An Evolving Bargain ago
Α32.2: Carl Shocks An Evolving Bargain ago
Α32.3: Carl Shocks An Evolving Bargain ago
Ω32: Carl Is Shocked By An Evolving Bargain ago
Α33.0: Carl Shocks A Racing Track ago
Α33.1: Carl Shocks A Racing Track ago
Ω33.0: Carl Is Shocked By A Racing Track ago
Ω33.1: Carl Is Shocked By A Racing Track ago
Ω33.2: Carl Is Shocked By A Racing Track ago

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FortySixtyFour
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Carl, doggedly single-minded IT director for Fire, has long since set aside the childish fantasies of youth. His teenage daughters, wife, and work ethic define his life—with an occasional sojourn into his company's VRMMO New Era to relax and fish for a while. When an office prank renders him unable to log out, will Carl realize that the world might not be the game he thought it was?

Fittingly, [email protected] stimulates tired and well-tread tropes back to the alert focus of those LitRPG predecessors that pioneered the genre. Irony excels at adding depth to everything he writes, and loves penning dark twists and turns, but never for subversion's sake alone—he's having a blast exploring the different circumstances and conclusions to full effect.

[email protected] is somewhat unique in that it's written in a rashomon binary, with chapters helpfully labeled alpha and omega, or A & Ω. While perspectives often overlap, the contrasting contexts make for very different read-throughs, arguably in different genres of fiction. After a healthy amount of chapters has built up, I'd suggest revisiting the story while only reading Alpha or only reading Omega.

Aspartame
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For a Toll based sh*t post, it's sub-par. As Satire, the lense for the story lacks direction, flow, and drive. The points to make it Satire aren't really stabbed in when they should be. It's too glacier slow for it to really be Satire. As most of... everything... in this story is rather normal for the umbrella genre, in every aspect, I can only say it's sub-par Portal-Fiction or Trapped in the Matrix. He doesn't really care to define the sub-genre, and I don't really care to find out.

Synergy
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To keep it brief, the story has a good premise in the first couple chapters. Interesting story with multiple POV and the MC. The story itself is a good one with grammar being top notch, and the characters pretty fleshed out. Style is great for what it is, that being satire. Unfortunately I feel the story may not be that good for others and possibly those expecting what I expected.

Unbiases aside, now this book is great for people who like satire but not great for those expected the MC to be a little or rather a bit more "smarter" or grim dark with him realizing that it may not be as fake as he thinks it is. The synopsis does little to anything to explain it (it does in a way explain the satire of it though once you get into it) Generally, I recommend this book to satire readers but would not recommend it to those expecting something serious.

Review note, Author does a poor job of taking criticism, a look in the comment sections and authors note speaks for itself.

(On an unrelated note, I feel this story could've been so much more were it not for it taking the direction it went in)

Dark Orangutan
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subject: Bug Report #672219: Glitching

 

First, I want to say, I love the effort you guys at Fire have put into this game. The artwork! The complexity! I want to see more.

But, it's not just the effort: you clearly aren't afraid to be bold and daring here, to break some barriers and weave some adult themes into your work. There are too many knock-offs of knock-offs that just don't have the balls to go there. Awesome work.

There's just.. ah.. one minor issue. I'm experiencing a bit of a glitching problem in your game. I know, I know, all new software has bugs. I get it. It's just... this seems like rather a major bug, that should have been caught sooner. Maybe?

Here's what I'm seeing: Every time I go to play your game, I pull up my character and I  play, and it's great! For a little while. Then, for no apparent reason I'm not playing my character anymore, I'm playing some other random character that I don't care about.

Often it's this one princess, who I'll grant you, is kind of cool, but it's not just her. Sometimes it's a random piss-ant nobody, and I'm completely thrown out of the groove and I'm like: what the hell? I was playing this awesome game, and now my character is this stupid street vendor all of a sudden?

And, to be honest, that wouldn't be so big of a problem, but it's not just that I have to play a different character sometimes. I can see how multiple perspectives might add something to the game, if used sparingly, but... it always ends up being the same scenario I just played. I already know what's going to happen. There's nothing new and I just keep playing the same thing over and over and over again before I finally get to the next section of the game.

I have to say, I thought at first, maybe this is some edgy new feature the fine folks at fire have come up with. Let's try it... but no. I tried it. I hate it. Definitely not for me. I'm really sorry to say it dude, but your game is just flat-out glitching, super-hard.

Now, as I'm sure you are aware, I am the 12,449th beta tester of your software. When I volunteered my VALUABLE time to test your game, this was a SACRED CONTRACT. Obviously this ENTITLES me to an IMMEDIATE fix for this uttterly UNACCEPTABLE...

HAHAHAHHA, got you didn't I? Yeah, I'm nobody, I didn't pay shit for your software and I know it. But seriously, you've got some serious glitching going on, and after checking out your message boards and /r/gaming I can tell you I'm not the only one who's noticed it. Maybe put out a patch or something?

Soon? Just sayin'...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Lordmiles
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Good Authot, unreadable structure

Reviewed at: Α8.0: Carl Encounters Weakness

The author is good and he clearly has great ideas and everything mapped but the style is just unreadable. 

 

Each chapter has 4 to 5 extra chapters with the same chapter but from a different viewpoint. The author has several times said that this is what he wants to do and what he will continue doing. I have tried but it is just unreadable. Maybe one extra viewpoint, but when you have thatttt many, you just skim over them. 

RadthorDax
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Sunny-grimdark original that's fun, if slow-paced and occasionally long-winded

Reviewed at: Ω5.1: A Small Starting Town Encounters Carl

~= Review as of Chapter 25 =~

I'm coining a term here: Sunny-Grimdark. There's a lot of dark themes here portayed with an almost sunny disposition. Magical slavery, sexual violence, genocide, torture, you name the abuse, it's probably somewhere here.

This is contrasted somewhat by an overtly-wholesome MC with extensive internal monologue tangents and a fairly unbelievable lack of basic knowledge about his company's main product.

I like the originality of the approach to both the worldbuilding and the actual telling of the story, though it certainly slows the pacing to a crawl. Not very much has actually happened considering we're 25 chapters in. Every scene with the MC interacting with another character being shown from at least one other point of view. This does start losing it's lustre after a while and I hope the author either tones this down fairly drastically or finds a way to make it express new ideas beyond "MC is ignorant of the world and the power he wields within it. Also the value of money."

Looking forward to seeing where this goes, but worried about how long it will take to get there.

AaronoraA
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Pretty uneventful for so many chapters

Reviewed at: cron: Sunday, 15:19

At the pace the author is currently setting, in a thousand chapters, we will be halfway through the first arc, with hundreds of random passerby's POV's to detail our hero's adventure, as he Mr. Magoo's all the problems away, wholly unaware to the true state of things happening in his "game" world.  While the read was moderately enjoyable, it could be so much better if the author tightens up his focus on Carl and stops milking Carl's ignorance. I get that this many chapters in isn't really that much, but if this were a regular book, we would be halfway through it by this point. This is simultaneously something I enjoy and detest about webnovels. The writing, story, ideas, worldbuilding are all fantastic, and outside of some minor quibbles, the characterization is passable too, I just loathe so much the constant head-hopping. The other characters perspectives are novel and interesting, for sure, but they drag the story down to a crawl. Please, please, fix this before it is too late.

uiytt
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So the first idea was good but the authour keep doing nothing with it. Nothing evolve it's always the same cliché characters (apart from the MC and the same scene again and again from differents POV. We're always waiting for the big revelation but nothing ever came, the MC ist just acting dum and the scenario go with it.

 

Stultus
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Meet Carl. A normal dude, living the dream; two daughters, one wife, and the position of head of IT at Fire, probably the number one game developing company in the world.

One day he enters into their VRMMO game to ejoy a few minutes of relaxation and fishing before heading off to his daughter's sports match.

Instead, he is dropped into a white room, with a young girl of the demon race.

Carl, assumes she is an NPC, but she informs him that she damn well isn't, and is trapped in this room for a long time.

Carl immediately grasps the situation; a player has been the butt of a malcious prank, prevented from logging out, and locked in a room.

Immediately, he takes his developer access and revokes player access to "Lucia and Dawn" and returns Ir'Alith's status as a normal player.

Unbeknownst to Carl, he is even further away from his expected destination that he thought.

Carl is actually in New Era, not the game, but the universe of New Era itself.

How long until he notices that his actions have consequences? How long until the Goddesses Dawn and Lucia submit a support ticket? Find out in the next update of New Era Online, now with a working customer support system.

Style.

I give the author five stars for style. his inclusion of the greek alphabet is unique to me, and his way of writing characters makes the characters clearly emanate their personality; Carl is a dedicated husband and father, and a sensible but not-completely-humourless IT support man. Ir'alith is an unfortunate soul, who has to bear the burden of an entire kingdom and then some, along with the enmity of most of the world.

Story

Carl isn't some teenager starting from the bottom of the MMO ladder, nor is he a NEET using years of seclusion to become god. He's a family man, with an admirable work ethic. And there's no need for training arcs when you're already the most powerful being in the universe...

Grammar

The grammar is strong with this one. I wouldn't be reviewing if it wasn't.

Character

Now you might be a little confused, as I did talk about how the characters are very well written, but let me explain.

The author has not written a whole lot so far, so the we haven't had a whole lot of time to get to know them. So far the character with the most depth is Ir'Alith, and even she can be distilled into her base tropes; bad dude with tragic past, misunderstood villain, demon king... Carl is more unique, but that doesn't mean he has a lot of depth. Carl feels more like a plot device, a character who gets other characters moving. When Carl met Ir'Alith, it wasn't Carl who was affected by the meeting, but Ir'Alith. Which makes sense, because Carl is essentially God, and if one could impact god in a meeting more than god impact one, one would be quite bloody incredible. But nevertheless, Carl is a unique character, but he is also a simple one; an ordinary IT support man, just enjoying some off time in a VRMMO he manages.

Overall I give the story 4.5 stars because, well, it's fresh, it's clever, it's funny.

 

Saphyron
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Quite a story to be told, but it follows many cliches already found in many other stories. The MC is very dense in the sense he thinks everyone is a roleplayer.

The story is both grimdark, but lighthearted at times.

Overall it is a very average story and thus I give it 2,5 stars.