Trickster's Luck

by Asviloka

Original ONGOING Fantasy Female Lead GameLit LitRPG Magic

Maya found herself at a character creation screen. Who was she before this? Why was she creating a character? What was the game? No idea. But she had nothing better to do and no reason not to play along.

And when given the option for a rare luck-based starting class, how could she turn it down? It was rare and special! That must make it good. Right?

But not all luck is good luck.

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 Updates MONDAYS and THURSDAYS.

 

Trickster's Luck is my 2019 NANOWRIMO project, and [Participant in the Royal Road Writathon challenge], because why not?

Also, fair warning, I've been told repeatedly that my stories tend to be on the slow side so don't be surprised if it takes a while to get anywhere.

I welcome suggestions for improvement. This is a nano draft so please point out any typos or nonsense which may have slipped through and I'll correct it ASAP.

Thanks for reading!

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sarvashaktimaan
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Somewhat original GameLit isekai

Reviewed at: A Towertop Meeting

This is an early review 97 pages into the fiction.

The story revolves almost exclusively around the main character so far. The MC herself is pleasant to experience the journey with, and I had no problems immersing myself into her struggles. The world she found herself in is built upon the clich├ęs we already know, but the author experiments with races and concepts that are often overlooked or strait up ignored in most fantasy settings. The entire isekai part of the story had important, however, replaceable affect, so I hope that the author brings it somewhere eventually.

Style: 4.5/5 The reason why give such a high rating is because I love what the author did by deviating from the standard fantasy he built his world upon. It's surprisingly nice to not be overwhelmed by big tit elves from the beginning to the end. I also loved how the author put an interesting but major twist on magic. Moreover, I have to stress that I absolutely adore what the author did with boxes. Perhaps not the trendy pure blue, they are very well done and I would even dare say on par if not surpassing the RR azure standard.

Story: 3/5. This section does not involve the world building itself, but the delivery and plot so far. What I dislike the most are the holes. There are not that many, but they concern very important things for a story like this. Examples: Resource X barely regenerates, yet a few chapters later author says that resources z,y and X regenerate quickly. Another: debuff X lasts Z hours, yet after activities that would've clearly lasted longer than Z hours, the debuff is still active. There are a few other things where I see the seeds of plot holes, but those are not definitive, and I will give author the benefit of the doubt. The story is also going along pretty slow, and although that is not inherently bad, the lack of a long term goal is probably going to harm reader attention (Though, I am a chronic binge reader, so I am immune to that)

Grammar: 4/5. Occasional mistakes, but they rarely broke my immersion. 'Nuff said.

Characters: 4.5/5. So, this part is a bit iffy, because there had not been many long term characters introduced, however, if the author keeps up the current quality the score is definitely deserved. And the author also did something that absolutely astonishes me: He made the NPC characters feel like real humans when chatting with, yet exactly like NPCs when necessary. I cannot praise enough what the author has achieved with those minor side characters.

 

Goldyy
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Good read for fans of the genre

Reviewed at: [s] First Mission

 The world for one is well thought out with unique classes and abilities. It starts off a bit slowly and nothing much happens early on in the story which makes it a little difficult to get into especially for someone who is not a fan of litrpg's (hopefully im using the terms correctly). Despite saying that, I do understand that a lot of work has been put into constructing such a story with it's various magical abilities, move list's and skill points not to mention the hard work put into creating those good looking tables. 

The story's primary focus is the MC and there isnt much character development (personality wise) in the beginning. Perhaps a little more elaboration on the MC's background would make it much easier for readers to relate to her and her endevours. All in all, the author needs to emphasize on fleshing out the characters more. 

Grammar is fine as far as i can see. Just a few minor mistakes and typo's here and there nothing that a quick edit cant fix.

In conclusion, this story is a recommended read for fans of the genre. As for someone like me (someone who has never gotten past level 50 in any online RPG that I've played) reading something like this is a chore. 

 

Pabloypablo
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Not a bad start.....  interesting premise.....  but I'm wondering how the "game" unfolds....  ????

Will the MC be overpowering?  Just how will luck play into the plot?  Most importantly, unless I missed something in the math, won't the MC be, on average, unlucky?   And thus losing more than winning?   You know, like Vegas?

Nanooki12
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Not a luck story since the first thing that happens when she gets here class is a permanent - 100 to luck.