Eldritch Cultist

by Dawod Dawod

Original ONGOING Adventure Fantasy Horror Psychological Anti-Hero Lead GameLit Grimdark High Fantasy Magic Male Lead Mythos Portal Fantasy / Isekai Secret Identity Strategy Strong Lead Supernatural
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My story begins when my dead grandfather shows up at my front door. He introduces me to a crazy hidden world, insane rituals, and gods of madness. Our ancestry contains the ancient blood of one of these gods, and it has ordained that I be sent to another version of Earth to be the first to spread its influence there. The dark knowledge I receive in return is as awesome as it is taboo. But unfortunately, the people of this world don't take as kindly to me as I would have hoped.

 

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sarvashaktimaan
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A reverse lovecraftian story.

Reviewed at: Chapter 12: Assignment

This is an early review written after the first 65 pages. I intend to update it once there is more to read.

The story portrays a character very similar to those of P.H. Lovecraft, whose work obviously inspired the author. The main character is living a common life among his fellow mortal humans when he is suddenly hurled into the world of cultists, Eldrich gods and ritualistic magic. The reason why I call it a 'reverse' is because usually a lovecraftian protagonist futilely struggles against the terrifying reach of cults and the horror behind them, meanwhile,t story's MC is by blood bound to their side.

Style score: 5/5. It's very interesting to see this story's different take at the knowns and unknowns of lovecraftian horror. Additional points to the author are also granted for not just copying the already existing pantheon and language, but crafting his own instead. I also liked some other things that I would rather not spoil.

Story: 4/5. I liked the story so far. In fact I almost adore it. The reason why I only give it 4/5 stars at the moment is because there simply isn't enough of it yet. The plot is going on slowly, which is not necessarily wrong, however, I believe I have yet to see how author is going to tackle some absolutely vital points of the plot, and thus I cannot yet judge whether the story will be as good as is currently implied, though I am optimistic. I expect to edit this section in the future.

Grammar: 2.5/5. The weakest point the story in my opinion. As is common with Writaton fictions, the lack of editorial love is obvious at some passages and had broken my immersion a few times, though I am a bit of a grammar freak so some people might not even mind. I judge the 2.5 based on the Royal Road standards as average. I believe that author will review the chapters once November is over, and I will adjust this part accordingly.

Characters: 4/5. Just like with the story, although I like what I have read so far, there is not that much to rate. As numerous new characters appear and MC is further developed I will naturally adjust this part of the review.

Overall: 4.5/5. I really like what I have read so far, however, it is to early to determine whether the fiction will be just great or fantastic. For now I will give the author the benefit of the doubt, since what I have read so far warrants at least that much confidence. I might increase this score if the author manages to astound me later on.

Thank you for reading my review. Now read the story, it's worth to at the very least try out.

 

Crisyah
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Hits that Lovecraftian spot really good

Reviewed at: Chapter 7: Transportation

Let me be honest, I'm a sucker for Lovecraftian stories. That doesn't mean, however, that I eat them all up with no regards to quality. Quite the opposite, in fact. It makes me extremely picky and demanding. This story, however, really hits the spot.

 

It's quite common to have stories based on the Lovecraft mythos be all about fish people and tentacled old gods only. Most people seem to forget the Dream sequence stories ever existed and that makes me sad. Not here, though! That particular part of the mythos takes front and center and that's a nice and welcome change. You still get everything else that you would normally associate with Lovecraft, but having that bit added in just makes it that more rounded and gives it more depth.

 

The characters are quirky and fun to read about, even the walk in ones. I thoroughly enjoy the journal style too and it's very keeping with the theme. 

 

Overall a great read and would definitely recommend it! 

JeanDRacc
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BEWARE, once YOU read THIS, YOU won't UNDERSTAND.

Reviewed at: Chapter 3: Arrival At Destination

Evil SUMMARY:

Muo’pikaq, jo’hyl! Blo’kh aq e’ial zyq’qukb! Muo’pikaq, jo’hyl! Blo’kh aq e’ial zyq’qukb! Muo’pikaq, jo’hyl! Blo’kh aq e’ial zyq’qukb!”

YES! TRASH PANDAS RULERS OF THE TRASH CAN! COME HERE AND DELIGHT, I HAVE BROUGHT YOU EVIL BEINGS YOUR CHERISHED PIZZA!

Ok, maybe the incantation went wrong because instead of summoning a raccoon or a pizza, the pizza became tentacle and weird abominations... 

THIS IS TABOO YOU AUTHOR! YOU MAKING YOUR OWN COOL LANGUAGE SEEMS COOL? 

Well, yes -- you deserve a five cause its very creative and I like thy amulet. 

Faber Write
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I cast Eldritch Blast™!

Reviewed at: Chapter 16: A New Day

In all seriousness, this was quite nice to read.

There's a good mix of fantasy and the good old elder god modernization/subversion, with lead offs that put cool dampener on the otherwise horrible implications of the realms he's passing through.

I haven't much time to over-analyze this, but this ought to be good.