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Grant Jemson, the top-ranked player of the online game Endless War loves flying spaceships, just not *in* space. But the stakes of Endless War prove higher than he could ever have guessed, trapping him between a painful past and dystopian future. With the key to preventing a war between the Earth and her colonies buried inside his mind, Grant is forced to confront what he's been hiding from for years: his own memories.

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Violetx
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Intriguing and Enjoyable Story

Reviewed at: Part 6 - May Day Mayday

I'm enjoying the feeling of real gamers interlaced with real tensions in this story. I like the contrast with how lackadaisacal yet catastrophic events can be and am looking forward to seeing Grant and team create and escape many more explosions -- and seeing where they all end up. Great story so far.

NoDragons
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holy crud holy crud this is good

Reviewed at: Part 2 - Entering Nirvana

So let's break down the parts before explaining why it's more than the sum of them, because this story - you should read this story if you love sci-fi or even if you think you could love sci-fi; this is a story that makes, not readers, but converts.

 

STYLE - Crisp and readable, reminds me of Neal Stephenson but less caught up in tiny details, with better flow and the sensibility to make cuts. I'm not gonna say it's perfect because there's a certain lack of flair, but it consistently holds you in the moment, with differing styles of pacing as the scene demands and a touch for pungent details.

 

STORY - The first chapter sets up the dominoes and the rest is watching them fall into place towards disaster. The balancing of different intersecting threads is not a thing many RR authors can pull off this well - heck, myself included - and there isn't a dud in the lot, not one plotline that I'm less enthused about than the next. As someone who loses interest quickly at a rough scenebreak, this held me throughout. Interstellar politics, rogue AIs, former fighter pilots turned professional gamers, it's all good.

 

GRAMMAR - Professional.

 

CHARACTERS - A... bit stiff, honestly, and many of them tend to speak the same way. Not my favorite part of the story, really, not why I read.

 

But in the end this story gets five out of five for the feel and the readability. It feels like watching Last Starfighter as a kid. The words just glide by, crisp and clean to perfection, until I'm as immersed as a skinny gamergoober in a divepod. I lick the plate on this story. The feel of classic science fiction is there, distilled, pure, the joy of the genre on full display as the very first chapter throws you the greatest hits and the rest is waiting for them to fall into place.

Donetaskdontask
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 Don't let yourself be dissuaded by the description. It kinda sounds like a KU story, and for all I know it may be; but unlike most KU stories, it doesn't feel like mass produced generic garbage.

Follow our relatable lead as he's actually a somewhat interesting character in his own right. He has some of the tropes and staples you're reading for the 9e6th time, but everything feels legitimately fleshed out.       Our main character isn't some uber-badass top guild stereotype: he's a ex semi-military pilot who is the #1 player in the game mostly through effort, tactical competence, and basic piloting skill.

The story is the main draw of this story (pun intended) as you get to see the author's vision of things unfold. We spend most of our time inside the head of the main character, but the pov shifts to show characters internal logic and their view of the events.

The story feels like it's twisting in front of you without ever hiding anything. You can draw conclusions, but ultimately you know as much as the collective charcters and you're along for the ride with them.

sciolist
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A good idea and a great read

Reviewed at: Part 35- K.O.

Pulling from several major science fiction themes, Stephen Whaley has brought together a great story that keeps you anticipating updates. The tone and pacing of the book so far has been well done and the action sequences will definitely give you some thrills. Great job!

JeanDRacc
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Well, this story has a really good writing format and the character dialogue and pacing are interesting to further the whole setting. You get a variety of drinks which make you dive into the conflict between AI's, monster creations, survivability... etc. 

Just read the first chapter, look out at that order and wording, and I'm sure you'll be drifting until the end of this story.