Beyond The Primordials

by Wayward Scholar

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Tragedy Male Lead Xianxia
Warning This fiction contains:
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When Yin Hui was born, the heavens trembled. Out of fear, the primordial gods crippled his clan and himself, stripping them of their ability to cultivate. 

Rendered powerless, his clan was driven to near extinction and Yin Hui was condemned to a life of slavery. After 15 years of torturous servitude, he encounters a stroke of fortune that would change his fate forever, bestowing upon him an alternate method of cultivating. 

With a new lease on life, he exacts vengeance against all who have wronged him, and strives to ascend beyond the primordials!

"To those who have wronged me beware! To those who will wrong me in the future beware! I, Yin Hui, swear to pay back any and all grudges in full!"

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Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1: Servitude ago
Chapter 2: Yin Clan Ancestral Burial Grounds ago
Chapter 3: Yin Tou ago
Chapter 4: Shaking Down A Swindler ago
Chapter 5: Obtaining A Fiend Body ago
Chapter 6: The Spark of a Flame That Will Ignite The Heavens ago
Chapter 7: A Lesson On Cultivation ago
Chapter 8: Yu Zhuwa ago
Chapter 9: The Messenger ago
Chapter 10: You Dare Disobey Me? ago
Chapter 11: Exposed ago
Chapter 12: What You Need Is A Dao! ago
Chapter 13: First Aspect of Spirit Waking ago
Chapter 14: Kneel ago
Chapter 15: Rapid Progress ago
Chapter 16: This Isn't Normal Spiritual Sense... ago
Chapter 17: Turning The Crowd ago
Chapter 18: Yu Mingxi's Power ago
Chapter 19: Tang Bian's Strategy ago
Chapter 20: Beast Suppression ago
Chapter 21: Loss And New Goal ago
Chapter 22: The Girl In Purple ago
Chapter 23: The Infuriating Su Jia ago
Chapter 24: Dao Oath ago
Chapter 25: Coiling Pass ago
Chapter 26: You Mess With Me, Then I Will Mess With You Tenfold! ago
Chapter 27: Loss ago
Chapter 28: The Egg ago
Chapter 29: Onyx Serpent ago
Chapter 30: Stubborn ago
Chapter 31: Regrouping ago
Chapter 32: Prelude ago
Chapter 33: Discovered ago
Chapter 34: Facing Spirit Manifestation Cultivators ago
Chapter 35: Feeding ago
Chapter 36: Escape ago
Chapter 37: Storming The Castle ago
Chapter 38: Confronting The Overseer ago
Chapter 39: Trapped ago
Chapter 40: Using One's Last Words As A Weapon ago
Chapter 41: Blood Sacrifice Sword ago
Chapter 42: Capturing The Outpost ago
Chapter 43: On All Fours ago
Chapter 44: Tang Zhilei ago
Chapter 45: Banishment ago
Chapter 46: Thundercloud City ago
Chapter 47: Destiny ago

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abdirahman
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An interesting twist on the xianxia genre!

Reviewed at: Chapter 8: Yu Zhuwa

Story: This is an amazing addition to the xianxia genre! It is not the boring stuff, where we have face smacking going on all day. Also props to the author for making his own cultivation system! It gets boring having the same old system with nothing added to it.

Style: it is good but nothing amazing which pops out.

Grammar: few mistakes here and there but other than that a smooth ride.

Character: I do not know how to feel on one had the MC who is friends with a person part of the clan which destroyed his. But I also do not want cliches like clan destroying.  

Winterwisp
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This applies as far as chapter 8

The story begins in a very classical xianxia format, with an oppressed MC who's scraping the bottom of the social hierachy. Through luck and a bit of fate, he gets a chance to grow strong and we are introduced to the power structure of the world. Though much of it is standard, I was curious to find a slight twist to the powers available to the higher stages of cultivation that I had not seen before - good stuff!

As a foundation for a story, this is very solid and has good potential. While the explanation of the stages of cultivation can be a bit rough to get through, this is a general issue with the genre, so I can't really fault the author for that.

Spelling is excellent, syntax is in good order for the most parts, and it is generally a good technical read. A few missing commas doesn't ruin the story, but it could be improved greatly with an eye out for subordinate clauses.

All in all, since the MC has only just gotten his powers as of this writing, I am looking forward to see how he will progress, what choices he makes, and especially to see what happens with that cliffhanger at the end of chapter 8!

Goldyy
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Well written and a fun read.

Reviewed at: Chapter 8: Yu Zhuwa

I dont know much about the various genre's and their names but I guess this is an eastern style fantasy that has a lot of spiritual elements which is very different from most western writing and that is a huge plus from me. Good pacing, the story flows smoothly like a a cool breeze in a scorching summer afternoon. There are no huge jumps or complicated explanations for the abilities and every chapter ends in a good length without being overly long.

The characters names are little confusing to me because they sound too similar which was a little frustrating at times but well, that's just me. Grammar wasnt an issue, just a few typos here and there and missing punctuations.

The cultivation thing is new to me, but im guessing it's the abilities that the characters build and their stages. All in all this wasnt bad at all. Fight scenes are brief and easy to follow, abilities make sense and are well explained. Perhaps the dialogue could use a little tweaking and surroundings better described for the readers immersion.