Superior Era

by Zinario

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy GameLit Male Lead Strong Lead Super Heroes

How would you react if you found yourself unable to sleep? Not just for one day, or two days, or even three days, but a more permanent time span, like the rest of your life?

That’s exactly the predicament Dario finds himself in and he’s thoroughly vexed by it. After all, what sort of sane person would want to miss out on sleep? A madman, that's who. It’s especially worrying considering how he lives in a world filled with fantastical monsters, deadly beasts, and 'Superiors' supposedly protecting the interests of humanity. Sleep is quite the necessity under those circumstances.

Life is tough for an ostracized kid, but Dario quickly realizes that his wakeful nights are more blessing than curse, as there seems to be quite a few advantages in not having to sleep...

Join Dario as he climbs the ranks of superhumans, uncovers hidden truths, travels the world, and discovers abilities he never before thought possible.


This is a tale of superpowered/superhero-like individuals set in a dangerous fantasy world with hints of GameLit elements.

Features MC with abilities deemed unique to the world and can disregard the need for sleep at no cost to himself.

No Harems.

Current Release Schedule: 3-5 chapters per week. (Slower updates for holiday season)

First few chapters are fairly short, but the rest will average around 2.5k words.

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ShaneL2018
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Feedback - Nice take on a traditional concept , super powers and cultivation/litrpg, writing style is fair for RR - however it's pretty easy to see why you get low star reviews. 1. Dario has a rare (only 5 in the world) talent that will get him "harvested" by the strong. 2. Likes to brag and tell everyone how cool he is and hos his powers work 3. Tricks and kills the ogre who is portrayed as essentially a special needs monster 4. Beats up a gang of organ sellers/slavers but leaves them stacked up to "learn a lesson" or catch and kill more slum dwellers, whichever they like, no big deal. You have basically created a stupid and unlikeable cheracter. It's not the confidence or ease, those are fair depending on the plot, it's the inconsitencies and his unliekableness. He basically derves to get harvested for his assimilator powers and at this poiint that's the only reason to read further

Venan
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The premise is hook worthy and if that tickles your interest you'll probably stick along.

However, there are some pretty glaring flaws in the story telling. The character interactions do not feel very real at all and come off flat. Which is honestly the reason why I cannot read past chapter 10. This may get better as the story goes on, but it was immersion breaking enough for me to stop reading.

Pacing is also pretty wonky. In that world building is not slowly coming together to build a coherent picture, but instead hurtling toward you screeching to build a pile of mush.

Grammar is spot on and there is absolutely no issue there.

This is not a bad story, but there is definetly some work needed to be done to polish it up. Keep on writing though author as I do not want to discourage you and these flaws usually vanish along with experience and mindfullness.

JayQue
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Don't stop believing, hold on to the feeling

Reviewed at: Chapter 29 - Names

Classic superhero story with a vaguely medieval/fantasy setting. No tech, but some form of magitech from "artificers".

Enjoyable read, reads well for someone wanting a power trip. Yes the MC is a bit of a Mary Sue rogue, but it fits the whole super hero vibe (superman is 100% a Mary Sue)

 

To the author: So your main character is a Mary Sue. Roll with it. It will be hard to write emotional challenges believable for him, but you will fulfill the audience's desire for the triumphant hero overcoming the bad guy. Write this story as is till you are done with the story and have fun. Next story you can do differently and play around with character development more if you want to. Either way, nice work, was a fun read

FuriousFrog
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Early days but enjoying it so far. Good writing, story seems interesting keep up the good work :) 

Arixin
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Good idea, but couldn't get past 4th chapter.

Reviewed at: Chapter 5 - Quick Appraisal

I couldn't get past chapter 4. I read and accept the preface of chapter 1 that the MC is a mary sue. The problem i have with the story is not that the character is mary sue, but that the character, story, and world are far too abrupt.

Maybe it's because of where the story starts, or the way the mc seems to jump from one random thing to another with no real lead up to the location or organization. In the amount i read we went from wandering random streets, to an Inn/tavern to get drunk, to a horse racing track(really? Why was this here?), to the superiors guild hall... which we know nothing about except the little snippet we get immediatly as the mc arrives at the building.

I feel like this story should have potential. The grammar is near perfect. Great editing. Good basic idea for a story. Good idea for an MC. Good idea for the world, etc... But it feels like a very well edited outline for a story rather than an actual story...

Flameraptor
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There are many super hero slice of life stories, but this is one with class.

The info dumps are manageable as there are many littered throughout the story but they are short, so it doesn't feel disruptive to the flow. 

Characters are well thought out and so are the mechanics of this universe regarding social and magical workings.

A good read. 

tzeneth
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The biggest problem with this story's beginning is there is no real conflict or tension. The plot itself is weak because of that lack of tension and ends up being either a grab bag for the first few chapters that move on to exposition dumps that mean nothing to us emotionally. There is nothing to draw someone in and this is not a short beginning. The worst part is that the MC demonstrates this lack of tension and conflict the best. Not able to sleep? Well, I'll just do A. Well, that didn't work, time to do B. I have super powers? Oh, I'll just get registered. His nonchalance after everything undercuts any attempts at creating actual tension within the story which just causes it to flounder.

The real question I have to ask is, "How much of this is necessary?" If the story removed the first few chapters and jumped into later parts while using flashback or little reminders to dole out the exposition, it might work better. Then again, that would depend on what the actual plot and conflict of the story actually is. That's the problem, I am a lot of words and pages into the story and I don't even know what the central conflict of the story actually is. Without that conflict, I feel like I'm reading a ridiculously overly long prologue that doesn't know how to grab or engage the reader. Maybe this story picks up after I've stopped reading like other reviewers claim. The problem is the journey to get there is not worth the effort.

voobwig
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It has a pretty good storyline and it flows well.  The MC is a bit pampered in his lifestyle but remains relatable for the most part and seems to be genuinly interested in being a super hero to help others. 

Jarmaro
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Interesting, but with big flaws

Reviewed at: Chapter 15 - The Hidden Haven

Interesting concept, but strange pacing and absolutely cliche abysmal dialogues make this story unusually off-putting. The characters don't sound like real people and more like NPCs from some cheap videogame. It's nothing some minor rewrite cannot fix in the future, though.

docsumac
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Hybrid concept with potential

Reviewed at: Chapter 30 - Meet the Team

There are several concepts to unpack here.

First is the classic "islands of civilization" fantasy premise, where mortals are fortified against a wilderness too hostile for them to tame.

Second is scarcity of heroes. The heroic population is a tiny percentage, but instead of being the usual sword and sorcery types they have unique powers. They're more akin to comic book superheroes.

This makes for an interesting hybrid offering. I would say its too soon to say how the quality will be going forward, but the author has managed to make it worth reading thus far.