Confessions of the Magpie Wizard

by dbfassbinder

Original ONGOING Comedy Drama Fantasy Romance Anti-Hero Lead Low Fantasy Magic Male Lead Non-Human lead School Life Secret Identity Supernatural Urban Fantasy

In a dark future, the demonic Grim Horde rules most of the Earth, and Britain has just fallen. The last survivor of the island is the young wizard Soren Marlowe, the newest student at the Nagoya Academy of Magic. To all appearances, he is a normal enough young man, if a little girl crazy.

Little do they know that he's an exiled devil, one of the very same demons who helped destroy the fallen island! Now thrust into the middle of someone else's romantic comedy, Soren will need to think fast to keep his secret and, just maybe, find a little romance.

Note: I used to have the Mature tag on this story, until I realized that I was never going to go past about a PG-13 or light R rating. 

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Chapter Name Release Date
Book 1: Prologue ago
Book 1: Chapter 1 ago
Book 1: Chapter 2 ago
Book 1: Chapter 3 ago
Book 1: Chapter 4 ago
Status of Book 1: Infiltration ago
Book 2: Prologue ago
Book 2: Chapter 1 (Wherein Soren and Kiyo Share a Touching Moment) ago
Book 2: Chapter 2 (Wherein Grievances Are Aired) ago
Book 2: Chapter 3 (Wherin Hiro Gets Too Swol For His Own Good) ago
Book 2: Chapter 4 (Wherein Ms. Edwards Clubs Soren) ago
Book 2: Chapter 5 (Wherein Soren Is Ensorcelled) ago
Book 2: Chapter 6 (Wherein Soren Needles Hiro) ago
Book 2: Chapter 7 (Wherein Soren Gets to Second Base With A Teacher) ago
Book 2: Chapter 8 (Wherein Yukiko Butts In) ago
Book 2: Chapter 9 (Wherein Yukiko Unloads on Soren) ago
Book 2: Chapter 10 (Wherein Mariko Dishes with Soren) ago
Book 2: Chapter 11 (Wherein Affection Is Publicly Displayed) ago
Book 2: Chapter 12 (Wherein Soren Does Goblin's Work) ago
Book 2: Chapter 13 (Wherein Kiyo Goes Fishing) ago
Book 2: Chapter 14 (Wherein Soren is Number 2) ago
Book 2: Chapter 15 (Wherein Ms. Edwards Discusses the Nature of Refrigerators) ago
Book 2: Chapter 16 (Wherein Hiro Misses Out) ago
Book 2: Chapter 17 (Wherein Soren Hears a Slur) ago
Book 2: Chapter 18 (Wherein Paul Bides His Time) ago
Book 2: Chapter 19 (Wherein Mariko Washes Out) ago
Book 2: Chapter 20 (Wherein Soren Switches Things Up) ago
Book 2: Chapter 21 (Wherein Soren Gets Parked) ago
Book 2: Chapter 22 (Wherein Mariko and Soren Smash) ago
Book 2: Chapter 23 (Wherein Soren Sees the Pain in Hiro's Soul) ago
Book 2: Chapter 24 (Wherein Headpats Occur) ago
Book 2: Chapter 25 (Wherein Yukiko Ambushes Soren) ago
Book 2: Chapter 26 (Wherein Rose Asks To Be Treated Like a Hiro) ago
Book 2: Chapter 27 (Wherein Soren Zones Out) ago
Book 2: Chapter 28 (Wherein Soren Is Double Teamed) ago
Book 2: Chapter 29 (Wherein Trains Are Ridden) ago
Book 2: Chapter 30 (Wherein Desecration Occurs) ago
Book 2: Chapter 31 (Wherein Waiting Occurs) ago
Book 2: Chapter 32 (Wherein Soren Teaches Vocabulary) ago
Book 2: Chapter 33 (Wherein The Divine Blade is Cutting) ago
Book 2: Chapter 34 (Wherein Mr. Maki Receives a Message) ago
Book 2: Chapter 35 (Wherein Soren Doesn't Receive A Message) ago
Book 2: Chapter 36 (Wherein Our Heroes Are Doubly Bedeviled) ago
Book 2: Chapter 37 (Wherein A Defense is Devised) ago
Book 2: Chapter 38 (Wherein Second Blood is Drawn) ago
Book 2: Chapter 39 (Wherein Kiyo Casts Shade) ago
Book 2: Chapter 40 (Wherein Somebody Doesn't Call Soren Magpie) ago
Book 2: Chapter 41 (Wherein A Long Distance Catfight Occurs) ago
Book 2: Chapter 42 (Wherein Phonies Are Discussed) ago
Book 2: Chapter 43 (Wherein Soren Goes Low) ago
Book 2: Chapter 44 (Wherein Hiro Breaks A Bone) ago
Book 2: Chapter 45 (Wherein the Magpie is a Wingman) ago
Book 2: Chapter 46 (Wherein Kiyo Adopts a Second Child) ago
Book 2: Chapter 47 (Wherein Paul is Repellant) ago
Book 2: Chapter 48 (Wherein Kiyo Flashes Two Men) ago
Book 2: Chapter 49 (Wherein Soren is Disarming) ago
Book 2: Chapter 50 (Wherein Soren Fibs to the Feds) ago

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Burkion
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Harem Anime Comedy, With A Soul

Reviewed at: Book 1: Chapter 3

Where to begin here?

So I feel like transparency is needed. This story is not new to me. Infact, I can say that I know just about everything that happens in it, will happen in it, and is going to happen in it. Because DB has been my friend for a good decade plus at this point, and has used me as a sounding board for a lot of his ideas and concepts. 

One thing you need to know about me going into this, I am not a harem anime guy. I'm not. I typically roll my eyes or worse when they cross my path. So a lot of my initial suggestions for his idea were to take things in a very satirical, meanspirited direction. DB though, that's not how he is. 

He has a genuine love for the genre, even if he wishes it could be done better. And that's what this is. His attempt, often successful if I may say so, to make this genre the best it can be. This does not mean that this is a by the numbers retelling, either. 

Infact the whole premise of the tale hinges on this fact. The true 'harem anime' gets derailed in hilarious, and often dramatic, fashion by the lead character. Soren is an outsider in all respects, even in regards to his own nature. The people he meets may appear to be familiar at first glance, but have a depth and scope to them uncommon to the genre, I would say. Soren himself is a hedonist, not because he wants to be, but because it is what is expected of him. 

His journey, how he copes with having to deal with humans and human nature, is sure to be an enticing one. I can't say much more on the plot, having an insider's eye as I do. Know that there's hardly a lull in the adventure, even as it's more slice of life than heavy action. If you have an eye for Ara Ara big sisters, petite quiet chicks, energetic fun loving girls, and forceful, Student President ladies, you'll find someone for you. 

And that's just this first outing! Give it a read, and let him know what you think. I think you'll find it well worth it.

Harmonious Arkos Sloth
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Full disclosure: I've served as an editor for this novel. I know quite a bit about what is going to happen in this book, and the ones that follow. (Obligatory shameless plug: If you are interested in my services, feel free to PM me. Rates are in my bio, though I can be flexible)

Do you  like waifus? Do you like half-human, sex addicted, kleptomaniacal protagonists whose idea of commitment is paying for an extra hour; causing chaos and laying waifus on their culture shock journey of self-discovery?

 Then this is the story for you.

It is written in a memoir style that sticks mostly to the present, presenting events as they happen, with occasional anecdotes thrown in about future events that happen much later. It blends comedy with a serious, sometimes somber tone as the characters deal with the major conflict of the series: humanity's potential extinction.

It's grammatically solid with no glaring issues to break the immersion (You're welcome). The pacing is tight, so events flow quickly. The timeline moves faster than the average Persona 5 play-through, despite the shared high school setting.

The characters at first glance appear to be the standard, stereotypical cutouts of the genre. This is proven false as the plot advances to reveal hidden layers of depth to the cast that keep you emotionally invested.

The plot is character driven; unsurprising given the high school setting. The characters may be in a combat school, but much of the conflict is internal as the protagonist wrestles with doing what he believes is expected of him, and fully embracing the culture in which he has immersed himself.

Overall, this is a story that is filled with many standard tropes and cliches of the genre, told in a way that deconstructs, analyzes, and subverts them in several surprising, thought-provoking ways.

And this is just the beginning.

As an editor, I missed several nap cycles to this book; but as a reader, I don't regret any of them. You won't either.

KurtisEckstein
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Good Story with Great Writing and Fun Characters

Reviewed at: Book 1: Chapter 13

TL;DR: Impressive writing, Solid plot, Great characters, Succeeds at being funny in the right spots. You should give the story a shot if you like comedy and anime.

A small tip – If you’re confused as to why he has the impulse to steal all the time, then look up the meaning of the word magpie when used to describe people (hence, Magpie Wizard).

 

    Style: I’m actually really impressed with this author’s style of writing. It’s what I would consider to be ‘elaborate’ in terms of both sentence structure and words used. This makes it feel like the author is a professional writer who is well versed in high fantasy articulate. I will admit there were points when it was difficult for me to focus on the story in the beginning, due to the elaborateness, but it does really fit with the overall tone set and wasn’t as much of a problem later on.

At the very least, I’ve seen books in this category on Amazon that were significantly more poorly written and do amazing, so that’s saying something.

 

    Story: The story has an interesting setup with a unique Prologue. Right from the start we get a twist probably no one would have expected, which makes the story and main character a hundred times more interesting, because now we really want to know what’s going on. However, without giving away any spoilers, I will say there are some plot points that don’t fully make sense to me. That’s not to say they are a hindrance to the story, or completely illogical, but I personally didn’t feel like certain events would have resulted in the way they did. This is just an opinion though, and because the overall plot is solid, I can’t dock for it (since it's supposed to be comedy).

And really, that's the thing - Some minor aspects of the story just don’t make sense if taken seriously, but since this is meant to be more of a comedy, it works. Pacing is fine, with the story taking a long time for the main character to get to the magic school, but it’s kind of necessary to have some of the backstory. The one sex scene so far as of Chapter 13 is fade-to-black (FTB), which I personally appreciate. Honestly, I don’t feel like the “sexual content” tag is even needed at this point, especially if all sex scenes will be FTB like the first.

 

    Grammar: Overall, this seems well edited, rather than a rough draft. I haven’t had any issues with grammar, though I’m also primarily reading for enjoyment of the story, rather than trying to nitpick about every little homonym (didn’t find any, but also wasn’t really looking for them). In my opinion, parenthesis shouldn’t be used in a story, so I’m not a fan of their occasional appearance.

There is a lot of dialogue where the MC is interjecting his thoughts while someone is talking. This is an unusual method of doing it, in my opinion, but not necessarily incorrect – just different from what I’m used to.

 

    Character: Originally, I had a major problem with the main character especially, before the author did a rewrite of the first few chapters upon receiving some feedback. To put it bluntly, the MC was portrayed as a true idiot simply because his actions did not fully make sense given his situation. However, this has been remediated with the revision – the guy still doesn’t make the best decisions, but at least his choices are now logical. Previously, they at least “appeared” to be illogical, and I have a problem with illogical characters, as many others do.

I also initially thought the character development started off poor, given the introduction of a particular character early on, but as I progressed through the story, I discovered that the character development is spot on. For example, given how the story starts, I thought most of the women would automatically like the main character.

Boy was I wrong, and it’s great.

My only real complaint is that character descriptions come somewhat late, but it’s not necessarily wrong to handle it how the author does, so I won’t dock him for it.

My last issue is with the devil society. From what I’ve read up to chapter 13, devil behavior and what is valued doesn’t seem to be entirely logical at certain points, and at other points it’s so logical that it’s almost disturbing. The latter half of that statement is why I'm giving him the full 5 stars.

 

Nitpicking:

Something that could use some work – This story is actually set in the future, but because of the whole “magic school” vibe, along with references to “wizards” right from the start, it automatically gives me a more high fantasy, ancient medieval feel. This actually was a problem for me in the beginning, due to some of the lacking description of the environment, that had me constantly picturing the setting as medieval. However, since this was a personal issue I struggled with, and since it only affected like the first chapter, I didn’t really consider it as part of my rating. (Also, a lot of that was fixed in the revision)

The other consideration is that the Prologue in particular sets up the story to be this big epic tale, but it’s more of a comedy/harem kind of story, so in a way, the big setup falls in line with the comedic aspects (and the delusions of grandeur that the main character appears to have). From my understanding, that is the point – to turn tropes on their heads for the sake of humor.

And yes, this story does turn a lot of anime and harem tropes on their heads, and it's great!

HoloSol
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What really sets this book aside is its witty one liners and humor. There really aren't too many fictions this site that have actually made me laugh. This one is one of them.

 

+Decent plot that doesn't move at a snails pace

+Interesting Characters

+Humor

+Magic school (love this genre)

5/5 Stars

 

Aki-chi
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Shoot that man in the knees!

Reviewed at: Book 1: Chapter 4

It's great! Now, i wouldn't say this is the most perfect novel for other people, though as you can see i haven't actually found anything at fault with it either yet when you consider the score of stars i give in the review, but something on this story just pulls me in and makes my heart and mind shove everything else asside for it. As it is repeatly said by some people i actually listen to though, you don't give a devil ammo, so ima gonna try to hold myself a bit.

Him
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So first thing first, I'm a sucker for complex characters, i like them complex and flawed. And boy the mc is highly flawed... As a well adjusted human not as a story character mind you.

So let's start this review, 

 

Style, I'm on the fence on that question, i hate the journal, after-the-fact formula, i find it cripples the suspense. Yet i don't mind it in this story. The author was clever in doing the introduction by giving us tge sense that the story won't be smoth sailing and that at least one person will have their hearth broken by the mc, now the question is who? 

 

The story is well light-hearted as of chapter 24, it takes place in an futur earth invaded by demons, the mc is a half demon that infiltrates tge humans. I found the infiltration was partly to easy but also i appreciate tge fact that it was and get the plot moving. It's a story about a demons acculturations to humans., i don't care that much about how he got here. Overall there's may be a little deus ex, bit my suspension of disbelief wasn't shattered. 

 

Grammar, perfect at least to me. 

 

Characters is were this story shines. Their interaction are totally believable. The cultural differences is highly marqued, a demom talling to a demon has a lot of different social cues and codes than human to human, a hole different culture can be glimpse in their interactions. 

The mc is also flawed, he's insecure about his humanity in the demin world, all his human qualities are seen as a flaw. Yet he has to accept them to blend in and his struggle is mighty beautiful...and entertaining. 

The romance is actually top notch. The females interests would make you think they are cookie cutter anime template, bit they.... HAVE DEPTH, yes I know it's amazing. They feel, they struggle they react but also are active. 

This story is genuinely a good story that i would highly recommend. 

There's top notch humour. A likeable jerk of an mc, an anime satire that doesn't feel like one. A good plot, a good setting and world building. 

Next bit is for the author 

Spoiler: Spoiler

 Thank you. 

ImSoAwesome
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Now that Magpie Wizard Book 1 is complete, I feel I have a much more accurate view on my feelings overall regarding it. So I want to go in several categories: Plot, Character, Setting, Pacing and Style, Ending, and Overall Feelings, as I feel that is the best way to get across my experience as clear as I can. I'll go over each category, and state my positives and negatives for all of them.

Plot: The plot of Magpie Wizard has a strong hook and kept me engaged, its simple and keeps the reader from getting lost in any overcomplications. Incredibly character driven, mostly by Soren, and really creates a disparity between the futility and urgency of his situation that makes you wonder if he takes the infiltration seriously or not. It fluctuates, which I feel works great for the story. The last few chapters in particular were very engaging and felt like a big, wild rollercoaster.

I can't say the plot held me all the way throughout. There did come a point where a few chapters felt like one-shots, extras that fill the gap between major events. Looking back, I'm sure these chapters had, or will have, significance, but for me, they just didn't land. They most certainly weren't bad, just average and in some cases, forgettable.

Character: Soren is a delight, truly the author's best written character in the story, which I'm thankful for since he is the lens with which we view the world. His flaws and mistakes are interesting and engaging, and there were times I legitimately felt like Soren was a jerk and needed to be punished, as well as times when he was disrepected and he got back at those those that did him dirty. Incredibly satsifying character whose personality bled all over every page. His development and progression is subtle, yet not so buried that you don't understand it. He never says what he really feels, and so his actions do the talking--and boy do they!

Another character I praise is Yukiko, given such an incredible degree of depth that has most certainly kept me interested in her and Soren's interactions. Not as a romance, I'm not really a shipper, but more of their antagonistic dynamic which definitely made their confrontations all the more engaging to read. Far and away the second best character in the book.

The same, in my opinion, can't be said for the others. Rose is good, but just good, there is something missing in her character that left me unable to really care about her. Kiyo was honestly kind of boring, I never really felt anything for her at all. She had a good emotional scene, but by then I'd been rather disconnected from her and ended up feeling more for Yukiko.

Not much is done with Mariko, and I'm sure that's just because the author wanted to keep it concise, and will expand on this character more in the second book. But judging her for how she is now, she had a unique and interesting aspect of her character, but her personality honestly felt flat and unengaging. She's the team mom and super kind healer, and thats kind of it. There are side character that I felt more from.

Hiro is also fine, he seemed a bit generic early on, which at times got annoying. But in one chapter in particular, you get a decent chunk of depth. He's good, about on Rose's level for me. Excited to see where he goes.

Every other side character is fine and do their jobs nicely.

Setting: This section is rather short, its a decent setting. Magic, time period, school, all things included. Not the most unique or inventive, but it serves the setting perfectly, and hey, if it ain't broke. 

Pacing and Style: Good god, the style and pacing of this story is fantastic. Every chapter leads nicely into the next, and they aren't so long or so complicated that you can't follow the story or you get lost. The author's narrative voice is his most powerful tool, so unique, so charming, so engaging. Soren's and Yukiko's dialogue stand out as the most engaging, but the other characters certainly do not fall short.

It wasn't gut bustingly funny, but I was able to get a good chuckle out of a few quirky or smarmy lines from the characters. Mostly Soren. Actually, its almost entirely Soren.

For a setting not that unique, the style of this world and the writing really manage to sell the idea in a natural way. This is why the setting is not really a detriment despite not being the most unique, the author does a fantastic ensuring all elements of the world weave seemlessly together. I can visualize it so clearly, and I can spend some time thinking about the world outside of reading with genuine curiosity.

Now at times it did feel like things didn't get proper build up, certain confrontations, certain big events didn't feel like they got enough build up. This is a subjective thing though, so I can't judge the story too harshly. It could be attributed to how short the chapters are, which I mentioned was not a bad thing, but does come with this particular downside. I feel the splitting of some of the chapters was ultimately unecessary, because I burned through chapters like a wildfire. And I read at a pretty average speed.

Ending: A good ending, one I obviously won't spoil but it was done well enough. I do think it could have used more build-up, a little more hints toward the sudden shift, which did kind of make the ending feel a bit out of the blue. But that could be intentional, I'm not sure. Its a solid ending that will leave an engaged reader excited for Book 2.

Overall Experience: Magpie Wizard excels in character, pacing, style, and plot. None of the characters are by any means bad, at worst they are average, and at best they are stellar. The author has such a powerful narrating voice that it kept me reading, just so I could see the clever ways he'd word some dialogue or structure the prose. Its got style, flair, humor, and soul, and thats freaking awesome.

It does have a handful of flaws in my opinion, but they could very well just be subjective, as many of my criticisms might not bother other people. Despite those criticisms, if this type of story sounds like your jam, it more than likely is and I seriously doubt you'll regret your experience.

This story definitely had a good amount of spelling errors. Maybe get someone to read through the series again to catch them all? They're rare though, so it might not be the most pressing matter.

Darth, keep up the excellent work and I'll be looking forward to your sequel. :D

TigerCannon
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As of chapter 21(26)

This fic somehow threads right between a lot of tropes that can go dangerously wrong. Nonhuman mc, harem elements, op mc, secret identity, but somehow it manages to thread the needle between them, taking the fun parts of each without actually taking on the trope. Most importantly, it has stayed focused on the comedy, which usually gets lost a dozen chapters in.

Hopefully it keeps up! 

Vuck L. Wolf
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Hidden gem one of the best fictions on RR in my opinion hope this getts atention it deserves.

Taykaim
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Came with some expectations, story has blown them all away.

Reviewed at: Book 1: Epilogue

Overall: 5 stars. I love the story, and my only disappointment is that there isn't more to read.

Grammar: 5 Stars. I'm not great at grammar myself. What I can say is that I didn't notice anything. Whether that's because the story was good enough that I wasn't noticing anything, or that there weren't any issues, I'll leave to the hardcore grammarians.

Character: 5 Stars. Each character has their own feel and way about them. If they are meant to be evocative of anime archetypes, that's another check in the win column.

Style gets a small ding because of some issues that I suspect will be fixed in the ebook, but since they exist here, gotta ding it. On the other hand, most readers might not even notice or care about these things.

In fact, given that this is that kind of story, where wondering who the MC might end up with is part of the fun, the fact that you can make a strong case for *all* of the lovely co-stars, I consider that a great sign.

As far as the MC, I look forward to seeing all the ways he discovers that maybe, just maybe, he's not so much a devil inside as he thinks he is. The power of a character choosing their own path is never one to overlook.

 

Style: 5 Stars. I love nested stories. I like that the onset of this one makes it clear that things will not be smooth sailing, and that many a good and bad thing will occur.

My only criticism would be, in the words of Dr. Ian Malcomb "Must go faster!"