Hive Knight: Trinity of the Hive Book One[Completed]

by EpsilonUndying

Original ONGOING Adventure Fantasy Romance Anti-Hero Lead GameLit Grimdark High Fantasy LitRPG Magic Male Lead Virtual Reality
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When they took my life, I thought I didnt have anything left to lose.

I was a fool.

The Ouroboros Project offered salvation from a dying world and I leapt at the chance to escape my ghosts. I entered a virtual world of myth and magic, which felt just as real as the one I’d left. 

But swinging a sword and casting spells wasn't enough to stop innate human greed. Shady deals with corrupt nobles, slavery, and even murder. All of it swept aside in the pursuit of wealth and power. 

Blood is the coin of the realm, and business is good. 

I tried to focus on building a life for myself in this new world, but everything changed when my guild was attacked by an unknown force and a mysterious girl fell into my lap. 

Eris is an enigma to me with her obsidian eyes and strange magic, but she isn't my only problem. 

Someone has their sights set on my family, and they have plenty of gold and blood to throw at us—more than enough to bury us alive. 

They brought war to my home; it's only fair I return the favor. 

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Asmodeus Frost
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Starts off a little slow and confusing at first but once you get into the story, it's hard to put down and I had an absolutely wonderful time reading this book. The dark and disturbing bits are done perfectly, adds a bit of unsettling content to the book to really burrow in the fact that this isn't just your regular "stuck in a video game" fantasy book, this is their life and they have to live it. I will look forward to book 2 for sure!

royalroaduser12
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Great start with a lot of questions

Reviewed at: Epilogue

By design there is a lot left unexplained especially with the time jump early on after the prologue. However there are perhaps too many unanswered questions given the lead up at the beginning which draws the reader in but then there is a giant jump which resets all expectations and only providing a few hints. The story could have begun without the prologue without missing much since after this first arc, few things from the prologue have actually been explained.

The story itself is very well written and intriguing. It's a great read and definitely hooks you into the world. Because of conspiracies and the greater narrative there are always things happening to the MC but it becomes frustrating when the MC is entirely reactive to his situation and survives through plot armor. This story hasn't reached a critical level but there is a lot of this so far.

The MC has a lot of potential and character development with a good back story. The main female character appears to have little development and is entirely reliant on the MC.

This is feedback for the author mostly but don't let these negatives stop you from giving this story a shot, it is definitely a great story with great pacing that you can binge read without regrets.

For some unaswered questions:

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

Folded Corner
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Excellent Novel for Sure

Reviewed at: Epilogue

The story feels a lot more like a novel and less like web novel than any other story on RR I've read so far. That's a good thing. The quality of writing is a step above the rest of web novelists aside from a select few like Worm by John McCrae, but that dudes a literature professor so that doesn't count.

It starts with the perfect amount of intrigue. Just enough for you to want to read more without revealing too much (no info dump here!). There's also a smattering of foreshadowing/hints which add to the anticipation of reading the next chapter. What I'm trying to say is the plot pulls you in fairly quickly.

A time jump (between prologue and chapter 1) into flash-back backstory reveals is a common strategy for developing and adding complexity to character while still making the character development feel organic. It's executed to near perfection here. I'm struggling to come up with an example that utilizes this writing technique better.

The LitRPG element of the story is non-obstrusive (similar to Wandering Inn), which is a huge plus for me. Not much to say here, if you're a blue box junkie this might not be for you. I vastly prefer the less plot-bending litrpgs and this is one of them.

There are a few grammatical and spelling errors, but that's small potatoes. The fundamental writing strategy and plot progression is absolutely excellent.

As I mentioned in a comment on the final chapter, my primary sestemic concern is how combat has played out thus far. The MC is always riding the knife's edge causing the intesity of each fight to wear thin. Considering it's only 22 chapters, it's not a big concern thus far.

The romantic aspect of the story is, in my opinion, the weakest link. That's not to say it's bad, it's good, but there is a lot of repitition in both descriptions and actions. While I do agree it's important to establish the desperation our female-lead feels from extended isolation, I don't need it re-established everytime she gets clingy. I would have liked to have seen more of her charisma that was hinted at in the later chapters. The dichotomy between the male-lead's grufness and the female-lead's friendliness could really add to the story's depth.

Lastly, I want everyone else on RR to take note, this is how you do a cliff hanger. Not in the middle of a subplot, not mid-sentence, not to string your readers along, but to introduce a new subplot. Perfect end to an excellent novel. It keeps me wanting more without the frustration.

I hope this gains the popularity it deserves.

 

JL Huang
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Fantastic beginning to end

Reviewed at: Epilogue

Great beginning and an absolutely attention-grabbing ending.

EpisilonUndying does a wonderful job of weaving in storytelling and action into this novel and it really shows when it comes down to crunch time. The story concept is likeable and I thoroughly enjoyed reading through it.

Grammar could use a little work as there were a lot of commas used but as the author said, it is only the second draft of the book so there is going to be way more room for improvement.

Keep up the fantastic work, can't wait to read it on Amazon!

 

Vambient
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Enjoyed the romance

Reviewed at: Epilogue

I enjoyed the interactions between Duran and Eris. Author makes it very believable and very personable within the setting. Felt like a wholesome slice of life mid-way into the story, with jovial banter and a budding love relationship. Then it turned a shade darker with acts of violence and suspenseful world building.

Overall 5/5, thanks for the read. 

EtherSolution
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Holy hell that was dark!

Reviewed at: Epilogue

When the Mc died in the first chapter, I expected the story to be dark, but Jesus. I wasn't expecting it to be this dark. This story deals with a whole host of dark themes all weaved into a complex narrative. dealing with things like loss and suicide in a believable and very natural way.  I was very impressed with this story and eagerly await to find out what happens next. That freaking cliffhanger!

KRDimmick
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Very enjoyable grim dark fantasy adventure

Reviewed at: Prologue

Love this story! The author really gets you into the character’s head so you can see their struggles. Duran is a warrior with a haunted past. The post-apocalyptic world the story starts in is described vividly. They move into a virtual fantasy world, which is quite dark, but you have a romance thread throughout to provide the hope. Great story! Get reading. You’ll love it.

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This has to be one of my favourite books on RR. I'm a bit of a sucker for romance/adventure but when it's combined with a good plot, top notch grammer, consistant pacing and a thouroughly entertaining story it easily beats out most other similar stories. 

I would definitely recomend this to anyone who is looking for an interesting read. My only complaint is that there isn't more.

OfOldGodsandNewMen
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I wasn't expecting much from this story given its on RR, but I'm pleasantly surprised and so glad I gave it a shot. It's definitely one of the darker stories I've read and I loved the human aspect of it. Duran is a very human character. He makes foolish mistakes in the best of the moment, but he can be clever and utterly badass too. The combat was fantastic and visceral. Though as others have pointed out, the stakes kept ramping up as the story hit its stride, but it never felt like too much. 
I didn't really like Eris at first, I was actually hoping for a relationship with Evelyn, but within two chapters I loved Eris. The relationship between them is forced, but that's the point and made abundantly clear from the beginning, though they grow to love each other over time in a very realistic way. I greatly enjoyed this story! 

JacksonImSorryMrs
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Found this entirely by accident, but I was pleasantly surprised by it. It was dark, almost too dark for me, but I stuck through the parts that were tough to read, the torture especially turned my stomach. but undernead the darkness was a fantastic world and a touching relationship. All of the characters have depth to them and real emotions and touching moments. Its a great read!