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In the country of Lutesia Graith is a simple farmer who discovers a dying dragon in his barn. While others would have killed the monster, he doesn’t hesitate in doing his best to aid her. Before Zel is even fully healed, she wants to get back to her cave, and to her waiting clutch of eggs. Graith, worried for her well being decides to join her.
 
In the country of Situra where the future ruler is chosen by a dragon hatchling, Nerie is a 16 year old girl, raised in the middle district of the capitol Roria. During the hatching, Nerie is chosen by Kiriga, the golden dragonling. Learning that she is the king’s bastard, she is thrown into a chaotic palace life where she has to balance learning to be queen, being bonded to a dragon, and where she fits into the royal family all the while trying to keep true to herself. 

Note: I just wanted to let you know, that going into the holiday season I will be slowing down my posting from daily to a MWF schedule. In concurence with this, I am also launching advanced chapters on my Patreon, with 3 advanced chapters for my Hatchling Tier [5$] and up.

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Top notch character writing; feels like it should be 2 different stories

Reviewed at: Chapter 16.1 - Graith

Top notch character writing. Both main characters are sympathetic and likeable. Their backstories and settings are also very compelling. The world building is top notch and the character interactions are excellently done.

That said their is something that many readers may find extremely offputting:  it feels like 2 different stories that were pulled apart chapter by chapter then had their chapters evenly mixed together in alternating order. Both are well written, but the vast majority of readers (upwards of 75% according to a poll the author did) find the farmer's story more compelling, myself included. 

This might change in the far, far future, but the two MCs are in different countries, different socio-economic castes, and have absolutely jack all to do with each other. In fact, there is no evidence they are even in the same continent or time period.

Characters from the princess's storyline say that all dragons but 2 died about 100 years ago, and then names all of the existing dragons (the 2 survivors and their subsequent children).The farmer's dragon is not one of those named, nor are the other 2 dragons that show up in a flashback/dream sequence from the farmer's dragon's past. The two really do have absolutely nothing to do with each other and should not be in the same novel. 

So every time you go to the next chapter you feel like the flow is being disrupted by a chapter about an unrelated event, involving an unrelated person, in what might as well be alternate dimension. It's really annoying if you're the type of reader that enjoys following the exploits of a single main character.

Every time you finish a chapter, you'll be jarringly pulled out of the narrative by a chapter about the other MC. You'll shake it off read that new chapter, and part way through it you start getting pulled into that MC's story... only to be pulled out once again when the chapter ends because it's swapping back to the previous MC's story. This is exacerbated by the fact that each chapter of a given MC's story often picks up moments after the previous chapter from that same MC's story left off. So basically every chapter is a cliffhanger that's youll have to wait 2 chapters to continue with. 

I eventually started just skipping the princess's chapters with the intent to go back through and read them all at once when the current book is finished. I suggest all new readers do the same:

Read the first two chapters. Decide which MC you like best. Then just read only that MCs chapters until book 1 is done. Then go back through and read exclusively the chapters from the other MC all in one go. 

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So, I should the big bug bear here. This is just a pain in the ass to read, and for no particularly good reason. Each chapter is really quite good. The problem is that reading this story is like reading two separate stories simultanously and switching between them every chapter.

Every time you start a new chapter you have to do a context switch. Put away the chapter you just read, and try to remember what was going on in the one before that. It takes far too much mental energy to be doing this so often. It might work if these were gigantic chapters, but they aren't. For a RR story they are mostly decent sized, but a few are smaller. So effectively in physical terms, every handful of pages you're putting your book down, and grabbing a different one. And that's the experience of reading this. It sucks. So hard.

The anticipation is gone. The author is quite careful to have each chapter finish on an interesting-ending-bit that you want to see resolved. But before you've even finished digesting that, you're immediately trying to forget it and recall the other story.

The satisfaction is also gone. That start-of-chapter resolution of the interesting-ending-bit is ruined by the simple fact you're trying to recall what the heck is being resolved in the first place, while simultanously trying to stop thinking about the new interesting-ending-bit that's just been presented to you.

So... yeah. It takes a lot of extra mental effort to read. It makes you actively supress interest in what's going to happen next, and then it goes ahead and ruins what happens next too.

Have I made it clear yet just how much I hate this alternating story business?

As for fixes... If it really must be one story and not two, then the simplest way of doing it is to bulk up the content between switches. It wouldn't be so bad if we got a solid more or less contained chunk of story at a time. It would greatly reduce the number of switches, and allow some sort of coherent thread to follow between each switch. Of course, this is easier said than done, at least if you want to keep up with the quality of the rest of the work. But if you wanted a quick and dirt solution, just grouping up related chapters into blocks (5 or 10? I have no idea) would at least make it substantially less taxing to read.

Now, as for everything else... it seems pretty great. Which is a shame. At least if everything else was awful I could just ditch this story with no regrets.

But I want to read more... but it's just so damned exhausting.

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Heart-filled Tale about the Hardships of Being Bonded with a Dragon

Reviewed at: Chapter 8.1 - Graith

TL;DR: Good story, good writing, great characters…and dragons, of course!

    Style: I originally read a lot of this story on Reddit, before it had been edited and revised. It was good then, but after getting some feedback it improved a lot (especially the first few chapters). The writing style, especially choice of words, is reminiscent of Anne McCaffrey. It was also originally posted as two sperate stories that were occurring simultaneously, and I think that the combination has helped a lot in making it an interesting tale.

    Story: Like any start, the first few paragraphs don’t begin as the most intriguing in the world, simply because it’s laying the base foundation, and the main male character is just that – normal and boring, with no interest in others (loves animals though). Or at least, he’s boring until you get to the end of the first chapter. From that point onward, the intrigue only grows, and the switching between characters really weaves an interesting story, with the female main character having her own challenges to deal with.

    Grammar: Overall, the grammar is good. There are a few random mistakes here and there, like a missing period or comma, but that’s super easy to happen and is easily fixed. Honestly, even mentioning those it just nitpicking. There’s nothing that hinders the story at all.

    Character: In my opinion, this is where the story really shines. You’re probably going to really like the kind of person Graith is, and Nerie is a lot of fun too. Not to mention the dragons! All of them have very endearing personalities, that will likely make you feel their pains and joys both. It is also important that character reactions and interactions be logical, and the author does a great job of that.

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A tale of humans and dragons

Reviewed at: Chapter 1.1 - Graith

This is a rather premature, and thus story review, with the story only having near 100 pages at the moment of writing the review. I can say i have been pleasantly surprised at just how nice this story was to read overall.

 

Both main characters are quite well written, and im not sure which one i do like more. Both of them are just normal characters, that share the fact that their life got suddenly changed by a dragon entering it, even if the circumstances are different.

While they are already good, they arent much yet, but thats more due to the fact there have been only 7 chapters of them, and that further development is bound to come, for them and for the dragons.

 

The story and setting are rather standard in how they are written, not that it is a bad thing at all. Its all together a well constructed world, but in the end not actually special or original. As it is early in the story so far, its hard to have any actual opinion about the story and the world it takes place in. But for now i have no problems at all with it.

As said the story features two main characters, and their paths are very different from eachother. Its quite clear that Nerie's part of the story wont feature much action at all, rather more calm compared to Graith's story. 

 

Near flawless grammar in the story,  noticed just one typo in the story so far, maybe there are some sentences that could be restructured for a easier reading, but it is not that much of a problem. With a extra editing round to remove any remaining flaws this story could be ready for amazon publishing.

This story is just easy and pleasing to read, it did read very smoothly, with no bumps at all. The pacing has been good so far, though its quite different between the two different types of chapters, one should rather consider those as two different stories, that will eventually come together in a future book.

 

The story is already finished on the author's site, and this is just the edited version with the vast majority of grammar errors fixed. There is book 2, the sequel of which not much has been written yet.

 

Just give it a try, its just a nice fantasy story of the MC's and their dragon companions, overall its promising and solid, with no clear problems.

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Dragons are a human's best friend!

Reviewed at: Chapter 8.2 - Nerie

This story plumbs the depths of heartbreak, treads the winepress of fury, courts the peril of love, and soars with the wings of joy.

This story has brought forth the carefully measured and rationed praise of this lurker.

To elaborate, my browser has 40 tabs on RRL at most given times, for the past aproximately 3 years (I only made my account here after about a year of lurking). During that time, I have posted 9 reviews, this being the tenth.

This story is simply that good.

daspablo
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slightly split personality

Reviewed at: Chapter 15.1 - Graith

I love the happy farmer roadtripping with a dragon but found myself rapidly loosing interest in the princess to the point of skipping them outright.

I want to rate higher but only half of it clicks for me.

tarakis
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The story is very engaging and makes me want to read more. The style and grammar are well done.The characters have some depth and personality. LadyLuna21 has written an Excellent tale. I just want to break out my traveling gear to help Graith and Zel, I want to be a person with access to the Palace to watch Nerie and Kiriga learn and grow. 

:D CHEERS (c)

Techman
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Really enjoying it so far

Reviewed at: Chapter 3.1 - Graith

Early yet, only 6 chapters so far, but shows great promise. The blurb for the story spells it out pretty well. Alternating chapters with the POV of the two main characters. I'm assuming that they'll meet at some point in the distant future.

Can't speak to the plot much at this point, but the initial world building is well done. Characters and dialogue are realistic, and the writing style flows smoothly with no grammar or spelling errors.

Overall, solid start to a promising story. I've given it a follow.

Stevenson1211
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As of chapter 10.2 Im loving this, it follows 2 stories at once and it can be janky swapping back and forth between them but both are well written and really fun to read.

LordofVoids
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Slow, even for such a fast update schedule

Reviewed at: Chapter 16.1 - Graith

A nice story, but much too slow for me. It's been 16 chapters, and I still don't know what the plot is for Nerie. As for Graith, he's a farmer, pretty much the bottom of the foodchain. He seems to be let off the hook by a lot of people who are higher up than he is on the power ranking scale whenever he talks back to them or asks them too many questions.