The Last Time Loop: Max of the Rebellion

by TheClockworkOrange

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The Last Time Loop: Max of the Rebellion is one of the top-rated sci-fi LitRPG novels in Russia.

The series is now available on Amazon.

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Max finds himself in a time loop. Any kind of death annuls everything except his present knowledge and returns him to the past. This is a good way to test all sorts of things. That is, it would be, if not for one little thing... This loop has real lords and it’s unlikely that they’ll be happy to hear about an uninvited guest.

And that isn’t his only problem — all of his memories of the last year have simply disappeared, but the world around him has changed in the meantime. Earth has been seized by the Velly clan and is now part of their Star Empire. Max has also discovered his gift. He’s a psychic.

However, his power isn’t that big of a deal.

Everyone can be a level one “battery.” To do anything else, however, you need to have some talent, money, and connections, which only complicates things further.

A whole new world, great opportunities, and lots of chances to get into trouble... Welcome to the Last Time Loop!

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Banks94
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Every time I try reading this story the author or translator does something to piss me off. I started paying on patreon and was supposed to get 10 chapters ahead but he just stopped adding any chapters. So wasted my money there. Then he puts up all the chapters on here only to take them down a few hours later when I'm halfway through. Now I have to pay more money in 4 days to read it. Fuck off scam artist, story isn't that good.

Kikanolo
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Interesting Premise but Convoluted Plotting

Reviewed at: Max of the Rebellion on Amazon

 The Last Time Loop is a time loop story with an interesting premise but convoluted plotting and one-dimensional characters

The basic premise of the story is that a human suddenly wakes up with amnesia and discovers that Earth has been conquered by aliens and a new society has been established. The MC tries to fit back into his life and discovers that he has somehow been added to a time loop with a number of other aliens and humans engaged in an ongoing conflict.

The premise of the story is interesting, with the concept of all humans having psychic capabilities enabling them to be power sources having solid potential. However the story very clearly draws heavily from the premise of the 2014 scifi/action movie Edge of Tomorrow (invading aliens use a time loop to ensure victory and correct failures, then the human MC gets added to the time loop). 

One of the biggest problems with the story is its convoluted plotting. Almost all the MCs problems stem from the inexplicable way that he tries to keep his amnesia a secret. There is no actual justification for this in the story, and no apparent reason why the MC couldn’t just tell everyone that he had an accident and has amnesia. This story choice leads to a bunch of drama that serve no real purpose and doesn’t really lead anywhere. Because the MC is tied up pretending to remember things, the plot is only advanced by coincidences or by having information drop into the MC’s lap to progress the story.

The characters in the story are all fairly one-dimensional, with the MC being the main issue. The author uses the MC’s amnesia as a way to avoid crafting a complex character and developing them. The side and supporting characters are entirely defined by their interactions with the MC, which are themselves largely interactions devoid of depth or nuance.

The story is well-edited and translated.

Overall, I don’t think I’d recommend this story.

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Additionally, while this didn’t impact my review/rating, it is worth a mention. Authors removing their work from RR to publish on Amazon is a standard thing, but this author did it very differently from most. Over a month or so, the author posted chapters until half the book was on RR. Then the author didn’t post for a while, before suddenly uploading the remaining half of the book over a day. The author then stated that the chapters would be removed when the book was published to Amazon in about 6 days. 2 days later, most of the chapters were removed from RR. I feel that telling people they had six days to read the story on RR if they wanted then removing it in two is deceptive business practice. I finished the story over those two days, but I’m sure many people had planned to finish before chapters were removed and were unable to, forcing them to buy the book if they wanted to continue. The author had every right to do this, but I consider it to be in slightly bad taste and just wanted to mention that here in case the same thing is done in book 2.

Ben Ornau
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Are we a community or a target public ?

Reviewed at: Max of the Rebellion on Amazon

I discoverd the story yesterday (7 december) and only 14 chapters are available or to be more accurate, everything above had been deleted. The story stop the second the famous loop starting (call it a cliffhanger will be an euphemism).

I do understand why people who invest time and effort in their work try to make a living out of it but having a transaltor using the site and the community to pull out some advertise bullshit manuveur seems really dickish.

I think giving people the opportunity to support you by giving them access to early release is fair but tricking them to buy something after giving a test sound more like a drug dealer way to do things.

I gave a bad score not because the story is bad but because it's not good enough to justify asking for your hard-earned money.

DeadlyMK
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Story is great, but the publishing practices are terrible.

While many complained, I myself had no problem with the author deleting vol 1 to publish on amazon. I get that their t&c forces you to do this, and I appreciated that I got to read the story while it was up. 

Vol 2 is a whole other beast. Rather than post the whole thing, the author posted like half the story then deleated most of it on release of v2 on amazon. This isn't amazon forcing him to take it down, this is the author baiting us with half a story, then putting the rest behind a paywall. 

Is this royal road or Quidian

 

Johnna
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Time Travel and the Star Wars

Reviewed at: Chapter 16. THE EXPERIMENTS

For the last few years I have developed specific tastes, you know like a craving for a specific type of book. I even have been told I can be overly critical. But who cares if I prefer mature characters that make sound decisions based on their characters and experience; I'm always looking for a book with an intricately woven plot.

This story gave me all these things and more, with all its coming star wars and time travelling. I read it straight through. And I can not wait for the next chapters and look forward to a well written, well paced, and well told story as good if not better than what has already has been published.
Despite only being 16 chapters long as of writing, there's plenty to get you almost instantly hooked, so go read it.

Fastus
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Really much better than I expected.

Everything is really good, especially the memory loss which makes it way more interesting, the world building is original, he has good writing style and i haven't noticed any grammar errors.

The only thing that feels slightly off is that, in my opinion, he reacts a bit too calm and logical after the memory loss, managing to find snippets of his past and interacting with people without making them even a bit suspicious(for now).

That said I really enjoyed everything else.

P. S. I really can't wait to find out how he entered the time loop and a bunch of other things.

RadthorDax
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Great setting and plot, saddled with a poorly considered MC.

Reviewed at: Chapter 11. A PLEBEIAN

Review of up to Chapter 10. I will not be reading further.

I'll start the review with what I liked.

The Story and world-building is pretty darn good, though I dock a star because it is hamstrung by the main character.. A whole new world order with tech to boot. An excellent implementation of the trope "the more everything changes, the more everything remains the same." Aliens have invaded, and taken over, yet bureaucracy, self-interest and injustice are as prevalent as ever. I will say that 8 months is probably a very unrealistic timespan for the vast majority of the human race to have capitulated and adjusted so well and so thoroughly to the their new reality and the new regime, but all-in-all it's not too hard to suspend that particular disbelief. There are occaisional contradictions, but they could just as easily be a result of Grammar and/or Style issues outlined below than specifically a Story problem. I didn't get to the time loop part, even with 10 chapters read. If it's in the title, find a way to introduce it pretty early, otherwise everything before just feels like thinly veiled exposition, even if it isn't.

Grammar-wise, there aren't many spelling mistakes and in general it's standard is fairly good, but now and then the sentences and occaisionally entire paragraphs are difficult reading, spending 5 times as long puzzling out what the author was trying to say as you spent reading it.

The Style could stand for some improvement. Some of the statements come off as pure blunt exposition without much effort to integrate them with whats currently happening. Other things are glossed over where a bit more detail would be really quite helpful. In those cases I get the impression that the author knew exactly how something worked or happened, but didn't quite manage to translate that into the text. Some of the fallout from the character section ultimately affects the style as well.

Lastly, Character. Main character, Max, starts out with amnesia, a tired cliche itself, but might pan out if handled well alongside the time looping that I assume actually happens later on. The world has changed drastically in the 8 months he's lost, but what in the nine hells possessed him to decide that his amnesia was a deep, dark secret that he needs to keep hidden at all costs from everyone and their mother for fear of what? Capture, improsonment, torture and experimentation? He acts as if it's almost a guarantee that'll happen to him as soon as he admits to anyone of having bog-standard memory loss.

He then proceeds to bungle through everyday existence, with no clue what he's doing, raising eyebrows, because the author decided he wanted to do the mc-has-a-secret at the same time as doing mc-has-amnesia. I reiterate: as far as Max should know, there is no sane reason he should think his memory loss needs to stay hidden. His excuse is people will think he's weird, or doing it on purpose to be disrespectful, or something. That is a super weak justification for actively not seeking any sort of assistance, simply to perpetuate the two tropes I mentioned earlier.

I should also note that the author occaisionally railroads the main character through deductions of intent and purpose that he has no insight or context for being able to deduce. These happen lightning fast, often in the span of one or two short sentences.

Other characters seem alright, though not much time is actively spent engaging with them. But as the particular tropes the author is trying to shoehorn onto the main character don't effect them, I would be just as inclined to believe their characters are fine because they aren't having their strings pulled and judgement impaired by the whims of their overgod.

 

Overall, a low score, but with a lot of potential after considerable editing. I'd suggest the author let the character make more context-relevant decisions either by altering the secret MC is hiding, by not hiding his amnesia at all, or at least confiding in someone and getting advice/help.

Wilberforce
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Why can't the mc use his knowledge before the amnesia to figure things out?!

Reviewed at: Chapter 38. ORE

This is a good story and I've enjoyed it. But I find it hard that the mc can't use his knowledge (the few things he remembers) before the amnesia to figure things out. Good work. Wish you the best. 

Tini Joxy
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I am intrigued by the title. Waiting for the other shoe to have dropped.

I also like the world building. The aliens, the technology, the reputation tracking... all weird without getting too weird.

Keep it up, author!

myxir
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Enjoyable story. MC acts reasonably. There is no moral preaching so far.