That Boy Hare [On Hiatus]

by Commander Kane

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Comedy Fantasy GameLit LitRPG Magic Multiple Lead Characters Non-Human lead Portal Fantasy / Isekai Reincarnation

Somewhere in the Falcon Plains, a hare is born. He opens his little eyes for the first time, eager to see the world. But to his surprise, he’s not with his brothers and sisters in a litter.

No, he’s flying! Flying!

Imagine the wonder of that little hare; his first moments were spent in the air! The wind rushing through his fur, lesser birds beneath his paws. It was...magical! Then he looks up and sees the sky. The sky! What a mystical thing!

And then he sees the monstrous brute that’s carrying him and similar things drawing closer.

“Yo! That boy hare lookin’ real fine!”

“Hey, you, Brutus! Don’t ya wanna share?”

Thus begins the story of a very special hare.

{ Credit for Cover Art goes to Daicelf, on Deviant Art}

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ilikecakesoyeah
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This story is very cute, but also very confusing.

It moves incredibly fast, and I have a bit of a hard time understanding what this fiction is trying to achieve. Sometimes, it feels as if I missed a chapter because everything is so fast paced.

The chapters are short, and leave me hungry for more, in a sense that there is simply not enough.

A fun read, but I would not recommend for a person to read this until it has at least 40 or 50 chapters.

Overall, pretty average.

Have a lovely day, and I wish you good luck.

Taykaim
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Sat down to read one chapter. Read all 35 (currently) of them.

Reviewed at: Chapter 35

The style fits the character. Fast, a flighty and light hearted.

The story manages to feel optimistic even when the MC's death appears very imminent.

The main character is fun, if a little dense, which fits it being such a young one.

Mixed feelings about adding humans to the story, was plenty fun without them.

The story and world of animals evolving into other creatures, and generally existing in a "system" world is both a fun read, and hints of something more coming along.

JeanDRacc
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This is a serious advanced review. 

Summary of the story:

Rabbit Rabbit Rabbit Rabbit Rabbit Rabbit Rabbit Rabbit Rabbit Rabbit Rabbit Rabbit Rabbit Rabbit Rabbit Rabbit Rabbit Rabbit Rabbit Rabbit. 

Advanced review. 

Style: Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit WabbitWabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit WabbitWabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit WabbitWabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit WabbitWabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit WabbitWabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit WabbitWabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit WabbitWabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit Wabbit.

Grammar:
Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney Cottontail Coney 

Story: Bunny Bunny Bunny Bunny BunnyBunny Bunny Bunny Bunny BunnyBunny Bunny Bunny Bunny BunnyBunny Bunny Bunny Bunny BunnyBunny Bunny Bunny Bunny BunnyBunny Bunny Bunny Bunny BunnyBunny Bunny Bunny Bunny BunnyBunny Bunny Bunny Bunny BunnyBunny Bunny Bunny Bunny BunnyBunny Bunny Bunny Bunny BunnyBunny Bunny Bunny Bunny BunnyBunny Bunny Bunny Bunny Bunny

Characters: Fluffle Fluffle Fluffle Fluffle FluffleFluffle Fluffle Fluffle Fluffle FluffleFluffle Fluffle Fluffle Fluffle FluffleFluffle Fluffle Fluffle Fluffle FluffleFluffle Fluffle Fluffle Fluffle FluffleFluffle Fluffle Fluffle Fluffle FluffleFluffle Fluffle Fluffle Fluffle FluffleFluffle Fluffle Fluffle Fluffle FluffleFluffle Fluffle Fluffle Fluffle FluffleFluffle Fluffle Fluffle Fluffle FluffleFluffle Fluffle Fluffle Fluffle FluffleFluffle Fluffle Fluffle Fluffle FluffleFluffle Fluffle Fluffle Fluffle FluffleFluffle Fluffle Fluffle Fluffle Fluffle

OVERALL: 5 for no Jack nor Jill in this story. Author, it is all in your hare.