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In video games when you fight the final boss, you kill it, the end. What if that monster was smart enough to run when it would be beat? Even if it meant being hunted to the ends of two worlds, what if it was determined to win at any cost?

Joel Grace, a part time gamer and full time loser has nothing special in him. That is except the one thing that makes him the final boss.

 

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RationalMind
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The MC is an Idiot. Like a child in an adult's body. And his idiotic acts are not something special but just plot devices to move the story forward.

If you can accept that as a character trait then you will greatly enjoy the story. For me it was painful to read as I like smart, pragmatic and rational protagonist. Everyone has their own tastes but you can give this story a try.

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Jean Fere
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Painful. I think the author was going for comedy and failed badly.

The POV character is like chalk on a blackboard. The rest are nealy as bad are nearly as bad. The big problem is that are that bad for the purpose of allowing the author to be lazy. Need something to go wrong ? Have the MC throw a petulant fit, 

TLDR ABOID

Wayne
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Have read all chapters currently available (8) and seems like an interesting story so far, though admittedly I'm not sure where it's going yet.

Grammar is perfect as far as I can tell, no major typos or confusing turns of phrases.

Characters seems decent so far, with what little screen time they've had as of the moment, decent character development with a mix of narrative and flashbacks.

Nothing as of yet to complain about, looking forward to seeing where it goes.