The Broken Realm Online

by Hakurai

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Unexplained incidents are occuring around the world. Banks vaults being cleaned out while still sealed shut. People dropping dead suddenly without any signs of illness or injury. When Jaese witnesses his partner and several officers killed by a man shooting ice from his palm, he fails to convince anyone what had happened and thus sets out to prove that there are those out in the world able to use unnatural means to commit crimes.

Darith, A high school student and avid gamer is suddenly invited to a game through his phone, and when he accepts he finds himself transforming into his character, gaining video game like stats and the ability to level up. As doorways open between the real world and the fantasy game world that only he and other players can see, the lines between reality and game slowly begin to blur.

As Darith begins his new life in this fantastical game world and Jaese begins hunting down those that play the game, it's only a matter of time before their fates cross paths - and what starts as an innocent adventure into an unbelievably immersive game may quickly turn into a life and death battle for the fate of the world.

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Jason M
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The story starts off somewhat confusing, however after reading past the

first 2 chapter you start get to know what each character are with their

pov, and the flaws in which they show slowly through the story.

The author did a good job writing and showing the realism in which, if

this game were real and the possible things that it can change in socity

and ones self if one where to obtain power.

Hashthree
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The story so far is following 5 characters who are all pretty unique and interesting on their own. At first it was hard to see what purpose  each character had in regards to the plot but as their paths begin to cross it gets pretty exciting.

The Game world and power system is awesome, wish it was real. The story isn't about the mc being op but rather him just playing it smart, and his flaws make him more relateable and believable. Another good point is that the author establishes an antagonist right from the beginning. It does take a bit of time for the isekai and game elements to jump into the story though.

Has some typoes and grammar mistakes,but nothing distracting, so far the updates are frequent. Can't wait for more!

 

 

KoboldPatrol
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unique blend of reality and game-world, very interesting

Reviewed at: Chapter 29: Nothing is Normal

(as of chapter 29)

Darith, a fat and socially awkward but smart gamer nerd (i.e. the standard RRL MC), gets invited into a strange and secret full immersion-like fantasy MMORP"Game" that is running parallel to the real world and at the same time blended into it, with stats and abilities useable in the real life. That's fun for him, but some "players" take it seriously and for nefarious purposes: Officer Jaese sees his partner and colleagues killed by what can only be called a bank-robbing magician, but as magic clearly doesn't exist, his boss thinks he's taken drugs. Read the story to find out how Darith learns to take the "game" (is it really a game when people die for real?) seriously, how Jaese searches for the killer and how former gang member Gabriel wants revenge for losing (spoiler) to a clearly un-natural turf war mass murder!

Style/Grammar: The story is told in third-person internal style from five different points of view. That's more than usual and while often a bad sign in a RRL story, after a few chapters those plotlines are starting to converge and it's not difficult to see where the story is (probably) heading Spoiler: Spoiler

so it is fine here. The descriptions and word choice are okay but didn't strike me as exceptional. Grammar is good and there are few typos.

Story: On one hand, this is a classic "fight and train, explore and do quests, get XP and stats and skills" fantasy LitRPG story. On the other hand, the game has far-reaching consequences also for the lives of the real "NPC" people. These multiple layers make it a bit difficult to really put a label on the story as not everything about how the game works and how the game ties into reality is explained (the "City Guard" can somehow undo damage done in the real world and wipe the memory of the non-players, but at the same time Jaese still remembers how his partner was killed). The combination is really fascinating though and the plot development is captivating. Pacing is good, with the exception of stat/skill leveling which is unreasonably fast even for a grinding montage.

Characters: The characterization of the people is "good". Quotation marks because many of them are high school teenagers with a heavy helping of teenage drama. As that is a standard trope seen in every teen movie ever (I really don't know how much of that is taken from real life vs being exaggeration), I'll tolerate it even though I personally don't like it (Stupid kids nowadays... *shakes walking cane*). Apart from that, the central characters are written in a mostly consistent way, with believable strengths and flaws and not always acting in an optimal way (although Darith is carrying the idiot ball for much longer than believable, a pro gamer should get his shit together much quicker when he realizes that the game affects reality). While the players quickly get stronger, they are not OP. The bad guys are rather cliché though and some side characters are very stupid.

All in all, this is a very interesting story with a unique blend of reality and game-world. I'm enjoying it very much and I think it has the potential to reach the top part of RRL. What are you still waiting for, start reading!

Andross Guile
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This is a great low fantasg soft litrpg. Its a coming of age story with its tropes and a few clichés that are actually done well.

There's the Mean Girl and the well-meaning but broken little sister of the Mean Girl etc. The MC is not OP, he merely knows how to play MMOs and thinks in battle. He's actually a smart character, which can be quite difficult to write. The other characters who have POVs are 3 dimensional and act well enough though you can skip their POVs easily enough, if one has read a couple hundred litrpgs because this might be well written but, if one has read enough books in this flavour of gamelit one can understand the story well enough.

Now, this isn't perfect. There are some minor issues and one major one. The grammar has some issues. Things like "too much stronger" are an eyesore but easily fixed. The major issue I have is that the characters level up way too quickly, not because they're broken but because the skills level up far too quickly. That is a personal preference though, so you may disregard this major issue.

The style's gripping and the combat is fairly decent. The magic system is intuitive and the litrpg is soft. For initiates that means we don't need spreadsheets to understand it.

In summary, read it. It deserves to be in the top 50.

Kap
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Soft litrpg where the world didn't end... yet

Reviewed at: Chapter 29: Nothing is Normal

Imagine a world where people could be their mmorpg character. Simple enough concept. Our cast of characters deal with the various implications of this idea.

Characters are given their own identities and personalities. MC is skilled but not God tier right out the gate and is prone to human screw ups. Warning the  majority of the cast are teenagers, including teenage drama.

There are some grammar issues but nothing story breaking. Great Story for fans of video games.

MooshieD
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i wasn’t thrilled with having multiple povs going on - but the writer really pulls it off nicely.  This is a fantastic story - read and enjoy!

reliczexide
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I like to consider myself a veteran reader with a lot of experience and while this novel has flaws (minor ones only) it does the majority (98%) of thing correctly if you compare it to the same novels of this genre.

I will recommend it 100% if you're looking to read.

Vuj
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Truly amazing read. I just want to see this novel getting more attention, it deserves it. I don't usually like multiple povs, however here it only makes it better. I can't wait for more chapters.

 

pato
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I want to like this story but every important character except Gabriel and Liana pisses me off, and that's because both of them are understandably ignorant enough that they can't be expected to do much about what's going on in their respective situations.

 

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 Anyone who's stupid is irredemably stupid, and anyone who isn't stupid doesn't have the knowledge or skills to do anything about the irredemably stupid people. This is so bad that it goes beyond what can be covered by the "people aren't perfect" excuse. I find myself wondering between every paragraph how the hell any of these folks managed to survive beyond age 5 without tripping on flat ground and dying of head trauma. Feels bad, man.

Pal
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Made account to boost the novel

Reviewed at: Chapter 1: An Invitation
 

 Made account to review this.  It's very good and deserves recognition.  It must never be dropped.  The few grammar errors I notice don't interpret the flow of the story, excluding the occasional use of the wrong gender pronoun or calling gabriel gabrielle. Characters act in a way believable for their age and they use strategy! They think! What a novelty.  Progression for the most part isn't luck driven, and I have never wanted to stab one of the protagonists for being stupid.  All the stupid is done by side characters or in moments of emotional difficulty.  It's also not lewd. Keep it that way. Biggest gripe is characters multiplying their strength tenfold in a single chapter or in a time skip, but there's alot of progress to be made and the book just started, so there's that. 

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