An Old Man's Journey Vol 1 & 2

by Allanther

Original ONGOING Adventure Comedy Fantasy Satire Dungeon GameLit Harem LitRPG Magic Male Lead Portal Fantasy / Isekai Slice of Life Virtual Reality
Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Traumatising content

 

Charles was an old man.  A widower.  Retired.  He spends his days watching old movies and waiting for his kids and grandkids to call.  And doing that is all he wanted to do in the short time he has left.

Then his long-time friend Bert, one of the last living ones he has, reaches out to offer him a chance to play a game.  A virtual reality simulation that could give him another way to spend time with his family.  So he seeks to find a place within the game, a place for his family to visit.

With a magic stick levels above what any starting player should have, Charles sets out on a journey to find the perfect place to entice his family to visit. But the game and the players have other ideas.  Set up as an NPC quest giver to some, and antagonist to others, how will Charles find his place and what will he have to do to get there?  

 

This is a work of fiction, any similarities between etc. etc. etc.  Please don't sue me.  

 

This is Vol 1 and 2, it intended as a series of Novellas and a light read.  Thanks for checking it out!

 

Temporary coverart from pixabay. 

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Shimdom
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Absolutely beautiful. A wonderful comedy that has gotten me into some nice laughing fits. 

Tired old man just wants his family to visit him. In trying to get the rest of the world to leave him alone, he creates never ending cycles of get off my lawn and senile rants. Perfection. 

Please send comfortable shoes.

Fox_spirit
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 Its soo hilarious imagining an old man hitting people with a walking stick.

magao
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Enjoying a lot

Reviewed at: 14

Have read up to chapter 10.

The writing is easy to read. There are some grammar and spelling issues, but nothing too egregious.

The story is fun, old man casually messing with other players and

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 I really like Bert

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(which of course is vital to the plot).

Might want to add the Short Story tag, and unless there's a major change in the last few chapters I'm not sure Villainous Lead is appropriate.

theLegionWithin
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story has a lot of promise, fun to read

Reviewed at: 37

really entertaining MC, old man just wants to be left alone but ends up trolling the hell out of everyone he meets.  probably one of the more realistic fivr litrpgs I've read yet here on RR.

mad-ness
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Very funny and surprisingly entertaining even if it is sort of slow/slice of lifey.

Killer_Whale
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Story overall is great. Lots of clever humor, but (spoilers for chapter 22)

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This wouldn't be an issue in a "gamer lite" magic world, but this is a video game.

Even with time compression, game time and real world time both progress in parallel, in a linear manner. The story is good without this gimmic, and this confuses the setting.

 

Seadrake
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Few Things Better

Reviewed at: 33

Your looking for something to read undoubtably. 

You've read the greats of Royal Road, the greatly good and the greatly cringe worthy.

More importantly you hunger for something to fill the time between chapters of whatever you read.

This fits like a well made glove, a custom cobbled shoe, or that last piece of pie after thanksgiving.

Its funny, witty, and most importantly short. 

I normally don't like short chapters, they leave me wanting. Here a short consise story lets me fill in the details, and laugh at the poor abused fools Charles gives quests to. 

JeanDRacc
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An old-man's companion book

Reviewed at: 34

Ever wondered what you would want your father or grandfather to read on a birthday? Well, this is what you need to read before you have to explain the book. 

You get a wish-fulfillment story for an old man.  However, this old man is playing a VR game. And this my friend is were things became totally enjoyable. 

Just imagine it: 
Old man lv 1
Weapon of choice: Stick. 
Class: Harem slayer and the honorable guy behind the library. 
Attitude: Teachy, doesn't want to hear about the game, grumpy about others messing with his tranquility. 

If the above isn't enough to get you to know Charles. Then let me add how he progresses in the story and survives the pokes of the damn system that is made specifically to trouble him... Ok, its a game, the system is made to make the people that enter it play, right? there is nothing wrong with that, right? The old-man a slayer, the system a stalker, and the reader the observer. 

And thus, you get a story that deserves a five in every aspect. Since the style and the grammar are well-done enough for that. 

Thanks for the story, dear author!

ReneeWolf
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I would read again

Reviewed at: 44

I like the character, even if he isn't the most exciting. I like how old he is (don't see many old people), and how that is convied, I like how you made him a person.

For the first book. 4star

The grammer doesn't have any glaring issues that caught my attention. 

For the second book portion for a bit it was around 3 now that the pacing iszue seems to be en route to being fixed and some of the off the wall bits are turned down, I am going to say it's around 3.5. I might increase it again later but for now it's somewhat good. Though not sure how Not-Unicorn applies to the story.

Skyguy345
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This is really, really good. I could easily see this going into the top 3 stories on this site.