An Old Man's Journey Vol 1 & 2

by Allanther

Original ONGOING Adventure Comedy Fantasy Satire Dungeon GameLit Harem LitRPG Magic Male Lead Portal Fantasy / Isekai Slice of Life Virtual Reality
Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Traumatising content


Charles was an old man.  A widower.  Retired.  He spends his days watching old movies and waiting for his kids and grandkids to call.  And doing that is all he wanted to do in the short time he has left.

Then his long-time friend Bert, one of the last living ones he has, reaches out to offer him a chance to play a game.  A virtual reality simulation that could give him another way to spend time with his family.  So he seeks to find a place within the game, a place for his family to visit.

With a magic stick levels above what any starting player should have, Charles sets out on a journey to find the perfect place to entice his family to visit. But the game and the players have other ideas.  Set up as an NPC quest giver to some, and antagonist to others, how will Charles find his place and what will he have to do to get there?  


This is a work of fiction, any similarities between etc. etc. etc.  Please don't sue me.  


This is Vol 1 and 2, it intended as a series of Novellas and a light read.  Thanks for checking it out!


Temporary coverart from pixabay. 

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Have read up to chapter 10.

The writing is easy to read. There are some grammar and spelling issues, but nothing too egregious.

The story is fun, old man casually messing with other players and

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 I really like Bert

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(which of course is vital to the plot).

Might want to add the Short Story tag, and unless there's a major change in the last few chapters I'm not sure Villainous Lead is appropriate.

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This story reads like a fever dream. It's extremely fast paced with a bunch of plots at once.

It's an overall humorous story with an unique main character.

You should read this in one sitting and at as high of a pace you can. 

If you do not like the main character in the beginning, you will not enjoy the rest.

If you like world-building, I do not recommend this.

Please don't read below spoiler if you are interested in the story. This story does have its merits and I don't want to poison your perception of a story that should be read as a fun romp.

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 You should read this in one sitting and at as high of a pace you can. (So important, I said it twice.)


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Absolutely beautiful. A wonderful comedy that has gotten me into some nice laughing fits. 

Tired old man just wants his family to visit him. In trying to get the rest of the world to leave him alone, he creates never ending cycles of get off my lawn and senile rants. Perfection. 

Please send comfortable shoes.

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 Its soo hilarious imagining an old man hitting people with a walking stick.

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GameLit from a completely different perspective.

Reviewed at: 47

The MC is an old man in a sci-fi era. He's lived long and has nothing to prove, only enjoy life.

The satire tag is wrong. It pokes fun at some of the more popular tropes like harems, Rambo wannabes, ascendent warriors fighting armies alone and that kind of stuff, but it's not portrayed in a mean way.

The Game "reads" the players minds and offers them quests suited to their personality. For the MC?

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Simple wants. Simple needs.

Reviewed at: Vol 2 Epilogue

An enjoyable story that falters due to a lack of focus.

The first arc where an old man just wants to settle down and meet his family in a VRMMO is brilliant. The juxtaposition of this simple desire with the outrageous plots the game tries to entice him with is good. Combine that with his deft deference of those plots to other people and a supporting cast of younger more typical VRMMO players as foils for his major skepticism and you've got something great.

Where things start to take a turn is when that supporting cast leaves and new ones start rotating in. They aren't as good as foils towards the MC and they aren't as interesting as characters in their own right. I wish the reincarnation side plot wasn't retconned, it had a lot of promise. It was an interesting twist on my preconceived notions of what a game like that in a genre like this could do. It's the far future, make it how you want to and explain it (predictive AI or whatever) if you like. More importantly it looked to be a fun setup for character hijinks where they know and are unfazed by some things and are flabbergasted by others.
Charles actually does become a dungeon master which is less interesting to me than having him be a fulcrum that chaos spirals around. It's funnier to me when he is less oblivious and more just unimpressed. There's a lot of plot threads in the second half where he's more oblivious than anything else and the story just kind of jumps around.

The originals do come back for closure on their story and it does feel good. Missing hours of climactic action for your scheduled bathroom break is pretty funny. The troll thing I could've taken or left. I would've rather had the squid mess things up and have Charles shake his stick at it providing an opportunity for the people to take it down. It would've made a nice change of pace with him taking action instead of passively reacting to it.

Finally I'd also like to mention something I wish was in the story. Charles uses quests to get rid of his problems and he's usually fairly indifferent about it. When he was with his family I would've loved to have seen him try to lean into that ability to help his grand kids (in a way that the game itself hasn't already done.) Maybe give a rebellious grandkid a quest to fish with their parents that ends up becoming a good memory or a shy grandchild a quest that'll have her come out of her shell a little bit and make some friends.

All said it's still a great read I'd recommend to most people.

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Story overall is great. Lots of clever humor, but (spoilers for chapter 22)

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This wouldn't be an issue in a "gamer lite" magic world, but this is a video game.

Even with time compression, game time and real world time both progress in parallel, in a linear manner. The story is good without this gimmic, and this confuses the setting.


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Very funny and surprisingly entertaining even if it is sort of slow/slice of lifey.

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story has a lot of promise, fun to read

Reviewed at: 37

really entertaining MC, old man just wants to be left alone but ends up trolling the hell out of everyone he meets.  probably one of the more realistic fivr litrpgs I've read yet here on RR.

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Few Things Better

Reviewed at: 33

Your looking for something to read undoubtably. 

You've read the greats of Royal Road, the greatly good and the greatly cringe worthy.

More importantly you hunger for something to fill the time between chapters of whatever you read.

This fits like a well made glove, a custom cobbled shoe, or that last piece of pie after thanksgiving.

Its funny, witty, and most importantly short. 

I normally don't like short chapters, they leave me wanting. Here a short consise story lets me fill in the details, and laugh at the poor abused fools Charles gives quests to.