To Play With Magic - A Forerunner Initiative Story

by Draith

Original ONGOING Adventure Fantasy Psychological Female Lead GameLit High Fantasy LitRPG Magic Portal Fantasy / Isekai Supernatural
Warning This fiction contains:
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"Hi, my name is Alexis," I say into the camera, as I attempt to calm my nerves. 

"And I'm Sab," I hear my best friend say from beside me. 

"I'm trying to focus," I tell Sab as I look into the camera. Will anyone even watch this? 

"What, just cause I didn't get sent to another world, where magic and dragons are real, I don't get to be a part of this?" she says. I can hear the hurt in her voice. I really wish she'd been there. Things might have been... different. I can't believe I thought it was a game. If it had been, she'd have been the better choice. 

"I said I was sorry. It's not like I knew I was going to be kidnapped by the system," I lamely apologize. She deserves more, but this is important. 

"Coming soon, to an earth near you," she might be making light, but I can hear the fear in her voice. 

"It's not funny Sab. It really is coming," I can't help but reply to her words, even though I know she didn't really mean it. 

"Come on Lexi, it's a little funny." she says while chuckling nervously. 

"Sigh. Look, can we just get back to telling them?" I ask, pointing at the laptop. 

"Sure, but first you should show them some magic," Sab says while waving her arms around. 

"I told you. It's not that simple. I only showed you because you could tell it wasn't fake. They'd just think it was special effects," or come after me to try to lock me in a basement. 

"Yeah, well they're not going to believe you anyway. It sounds pretty crazy, even to me. And I've seen what you can do," she proclaims. I didn't think it was that special, but she was really impressed by my magical abilities. 

"Maybe, but I have to try. We don't have much time left," I state as I stop the recording, before starting a new one. 

"Hello, my name is Alexis," I say projecting as much confidence as I can at the little camera. 

"Remember, the world ends on a Tuesday."


*This is a litrpg, with attempts at humour, a bit of psychology and a lot of magic. This is a "System apocalypse" novel where the protagonist is sent to another world prior to the apocalypse. It will almost exclusively follow the perspective of Alexis as she makes her way through her journeys. 

Guaranteed updates on Friday. 90% chance of updates on Tuesday. Occasional random updates due to user error. 

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Journeyman_Mike
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 So, I like this so far. The story looks like it's going in a good direction with a relatively common system vs everyone else theme. The writing is good and it all flows well.

Now, I just hate the MC. She's supposed to be pretty smart, based on her stats, but makes stupid decisions and has very little self awareness. At least that's what I get from what I've read (1.04). I have to walk away from this story for a few days, I just so frustrated with the MC. This could be one of the best on RR but needs some serious editing around the characters.

MarkM
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Interesting beginning

Reviewed at: 1.14 My Shinies

So far, I am very impressed.  The systems are relatively unique, the setting feels right and the grammar is very good indeed.  The only weakness is we are spending a bit too much time in the MC’s head as she learns magic and the rest of the party is not well fleshed out yet.  Still, a tremendous and strong start.

demion
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Really like the story so far! Interesting growth system

Would love to get a little more in depth knowledge about the others. Maybe short passages from their sight while she is looking for them.

bob925
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Enjoyable story so far.  Seems to be a slow-paced story, not a whole lot of plot progression, but we're all of 14 chapters in at this point.  

MC is decently fleshed out and we're learning a little about some of the others as well, mostly the one she's known from prior to the system implementation.  

I would add that the author's blurb about the story doesn't really fit that well; while there's some humour, this is not a slapstick story.  Don't let the blurb scare you away. 

Note to the author: maybe think about a better blurb to pull in readers based on what the story is actually like so far?

MC and party are exploring the system, their capabilities and environment so far.  MC doesn't necessarily seem OP compared to the other characters we've met so far, but we don't know a whole lot about what they can do yet.  

All around, just an enjoyable read; wish there was more to read!

Link2999
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This story is a gem.

It’s rare enough that we find an Isekai with female main characters, and this story does the main character some justice. Once she finds out she’s in another world, her main thought is to have some fun with it, because “magic”. Her magic isn’t anymore OP than other characters, but it’s still the beginning, so I can’t say that with certainty yet.

We haven’t seen much of the world yet, but from I have read it’s pretty vivid. The descriptions aren’t long and drawn out, but they accurately get their points across.

Update speed guarantees Friday updates with a more than likely Tuesday chapter. Twice a week is pretty good for Royal Road novels, but the author has been updating even more frequently than that as of late. Very pleasantly surprised that this is the case and hope it continues.

The Almighty Lord of Rodents
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Great Writing, Great MC, Many Readers Offended by MC

Reviewed at: 1.23 Connections

5/5 

I honestly don't get why so many people are so offended by the MC in this. Yes, she's a bit antisocial; and yes, she intially refuses to interact with one of the her fellow isekai victims in an entirely illogical manner. And guess what? Both of these interactions were portrayed in a very realistic manner, such that it was very easy to see things from her perspective. This is true even though we had not been given a particular rationale for her behavior, which in my opinion makes it far more of an accomplishment, for it is usually not easy to make apparent the internal logic of a character without resorting to some concrete explanation, as has been done here. It seems that many people are in denial of the fact that there is no universal logic and best choice, because such things are entirely predicated on perspective and purpose, which are ultimately a product of the type and ego of the written being. 

Remember, this is ultimately about a girl who finds herself in a magical world, and spends her time playing with new possibilities (magic), rather than worrying herself and confining herself to old possibilities (social relations/obligations, friendship, teamwork, long term survival, blah blah blah). So please, author, don't bow to the wishes of those demanding clear and logical (whatever they mean by that) decision making at every turn, and just have fun.

 

Commando2342
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Intriguing start with excellent characterisation

Reviewed at: 1.17 Uthica

I've not read a story with such engaging character or teasing worldbuilding in some time. I think there's the makings of an absolute standout story here.

As of this review, the most recent chapter titled Uthica is what truly sold this story for me. I'd advise people reading this in future to give it until that chapter before deciding to stay or not, although I also think it would grab your interest much earlier than that.

Ulvlar
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 Fun to read, nice system and good mc

so read it my dudes

DressedUpToParty
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Do you like magic? Do you like nice MC's with good character? This is a fic for you. It reads fast and goes down easy. No real grammar or vocabulary issues, and the plot seems mostly coherent at this point. 

It's great! Wish there was more.

mike karr
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How are there any positive reviews?

Reviewed at: 1.04 I believe in magic

I honestly don't know what to say about this. Legitimately the worst written mc I've read in a while. Female character that unreasonably demonizes a male character because he isnt an adult with the sleep ware of a child. Honestly i think this says more about the author then anything else. Actually just disgusting.