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Humanity has discovered the jump drive and is beginning to explore the stars. Captain Slater of the USS Franklin is assigned to protect a research expedition as it travels the unknown regions of space, searching for habitable planets and exploitable resources.

The expedition makes an important discovery...they discover that we’re not alone in the universe and our neighbors are hostile. The expedition is destroyed and Slater wakes from the destruction to find that he has changed. He is something new, he is no longer human, he is a Dungeon Core, he is a Derelict. Slater must learn to fit into his new existence quickly as other forces seek his destruction for the second and final time.

 

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Zethuron
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Better than a grounded dungeon, a spacefaring dungeon!

Was simply looking through new releases, and came upon this story, expecting just a standard dungeon core story, even if the synopis looked a bit odd. Now i can say i have been pleasantly surprised by how this story turned out to be, even as short as it currently is (at time of review), i will certainly be following this story, and maybe even loving it.

Humanity has gone beyond the bounds of the solar system, and is now exploring distant stars, for habitable planets and signs of life. On one of those expeditions is Captain Slater of the USS Franklin, the expedition goes will, until eventually a first contact happens and ends up in combat between the two forces, with all human ships expect for the Franklin being destroyed, as a last resort, Slater overloads the reactor of the Franklin and is killed in the following explosion, only to wake up changed, with a unknown voice greeting him, then he discovers that he is now essentially a dungeon core and that the universe is far more than he thought. Now he has to adapt to his new nature, or to die once again, for the final time.

Slater is a good character, and well written overall. He is also competent at what he does, and that is shown pretty fast. While Slater may be thrown in a new, unknown situation, he adapts quite fast to it, while also not being naive at all.  I just wonder how the dungeon will treat sapients, especially if he meets humans, atleast the MC being from the navy helps a bit with this, but it still remains to be truly shown.

The first couple chapters may seem a bit weird at first, especially the rather long first chapter which also contains a lot of information about the setting in general, at least as percieved by the MC at that time. Those chapters may seem a bit redunant to some, but actually do matter as setup for the story and later on, as events in those chapters are brought up again, and the story only gets better after those first chapters.

Well, i have been simply blown away by the unique setting, it is simply so great, and totally different from the vast majority of dungeon core stories i have read so far on royalroad. At first i had expected it to be a standard reincarnation into fantasy world after the MC was killed, but this is so much more, and it honestly makes this story great and show a TON of promise. The author does use the usual dungeon core tropes, but adapted to a sci-fi setting while also keeping fantasy elements, i especially liked the way the author handled how dungeons, or rather Derelicts are shown, with a explaination for how Derelicts come into existence, this story features a twist on the normal dungeon guide (sometimes shown as pixies), and handles that in a great way.

This story is even trying to go in a rather unique direction for a dungeon story, with the past allegiance of the MC actually mattering instead of being straight out invalidated just because he got reincaranted and is with new instincts.

Near flawless grammar in this story, with maybe one or two mistakes to be found in a chapter which usually get corrected when pointed out, and those do not hinder reading, the editing in this story is very well done, i have no complaints at all in this aspect.

Excellent writing style, the author has a good grasp on his prose, it is simply enjoyable to read. Great pacing also that switches speed when required for the plot. Good descriptions also, and information is delivered in a nice way that doenst hinder the overall plot at all. Maybe some minor problems with repeated information, but that doenst matter even.

I was quite surprised by the overall quality of this story, though that was to be expected after finding out that the author has wrote Limitless Lands (on Amazon), this is only a sideproject of the author, with updates atleast once a week.

Considering this story is still fresh, much of this story is subject to change, most likely for the better as more of the story is released, i have quite the high hopes for it.

Come read it, its by a skilled author known for creating quality stories, it is also a fresh kind of dungeon story, one of a kind that most likely has not been done yet on royalroad, i can simply recommend this to all fans of dungeon core stories, even those who still have to read their first one.

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The story is a refreshing take on the common dungeon story, with interesting mechanics and concepts that open up limitless potential for creative direction.

The story kept me in its claws till I finished the last chapter, and still had me hungering for more.

I just really hope the author doesn’t fall into the same trap I’ve seen almost every other dungeon story fall in:  DONT LOSE SIGHT OF YOUR MAIN CHARACTER.

Remember to show his personality, his quirks, what makes him unique and fun to watch. Very quickly these characters turn into mindless robots that react predictably to every scenario, follow the same thought cycles, and the entire story becomes a straight line of power ups. 

 

Anyway, loving it! Keep up the amazing work!

anubis228
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Great Story New Variation on an existing theme

Great Variation on a common theme.  Incorporates both Sci-Fi and fantasy into a single realm.  The story does not get bogged down in the minute details of events and actions.  Flows and keeps you interested with just enough of the background system.

McVerisimilitude
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Newbie review more of a thank you.

Dean,

Thank you for a wonderful story. This is a very good Syfy/space twist on a dungeon core. I read through the first 15 chapters in a couple of hours and was hooked. 

😊

Almarna
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As of chapter 10

Dungeon stories have been done to death and back again, get it cuz reinkarnation...

But seriuosly there as set theme in them

A theme this story seems to Challenger. I like it a lot

Killer_Whale
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Shaky start, but gets better

The first 3 chapters of setup for the setting and dungeon are convoluted and often feel forced, but once you get past that the story is decent.