Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Romance Anti-Hero Lead Grimdark Harem High Fantasy Magic Male Lead Non-Human lead
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An ex-salaryman had made deal with a mysterious entity, and now he was in the other world. He was told that he wouldn’t get any special powers but he wasn’t worried. A little science and his rough upbringing should be enough for him to survive whatever thrown at him. The man didn’t want any glorious adventure or anything to do with great romances. He just wanted to have some fun, as long as it lasted.

 

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- The English might not be perfect, but give the story a chance if below notes are agreeable.
- Aimed for adult audiences, but focused on plot rather than just getting laid.
- Fast-paced but the litrpg mechanics, plots, etc are revealed in stages.
- Characters will die as the plot sees fit.

*cover art source is not mine*

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The Infinice
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Not so advanced review, just some tips I wanted to share.

Reviewed at: CH 5 - Ruling Class

Its a good read.

 

Characters aren't too unbelievable for a fantasy genre focused book, with decent enough development as the story progresses.

 

Style, while slightly generic, isn't done in a boring way. It is essentially an isekai story with a non-human male character, so some tropes are expected to slip in. The take on science being used as a magical field of study is not unique, but it is done well enough to not matter in the long run.

 

The story has a small issue with lack of lore, but that's not much of an issue depending on how the author wants to carry out his world's plot. 

 

Grammar, however, is a small issue. Overall, no glaring errors except for the switching around of words and awkward sentence structure. Its not common, but its not rare. I cant remember an exact example to give, but a small tidbit of it would be "...when even how...". Again, I don't have a specific example, but you should be able to catch the gist of it.

 

Overall, not bad. Give it a try, but I still recommend the author try and go back through the chapters to fix the minor errors when possible to keep story flow from feeling awkward.

some_total_kretin
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Bad english mucho macho harem

Reviewed at: Ch 15 - Humans

 Needs work, but is basically functional. Like a toddler in a fully loaded nappy (to quote Ben "Yahtzee" Croshaw).

TL;DR: Macho human reincarnated/transported to another body in another world with system and a LOT of harem development. The english is bad, but the point is - barely - getting across. It's the wish fullfillment LitRPG without much suspense.

If you like your hero to be a little bit OP and so macho he can, in this case literally, make any woman/female have an orgasm by smelling him, then you're in the right place. It's the supermacho litrpg with some sex wallowing comfortably in bad english like a pig in a pen full of excrement.

There is no long exposition, you're just thrown into the story and left to piece everything together as you go. I'd write more, but the author does not like to bother himself with setup, so I ain't bothering either.

P.S.: In case you can't tell - I ....didn't hate it?

P.P.S.: Oh, yeah! Almost forgot. I read it up to chapter 15.

Fastus
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There are several grammatical mistakes but it's readable.

The style is good though i find the mc has it too easy figuring out magic (if he just decided to sit down a day or two and give it a try he could become invincible, instead he only did it 2 times and for what? 1 or 2 hours? And he already got 3 advanced magic, super healing and magical weapons etc...) and it could use a bit more details sometimes, in particular the fighting scenes.

And Istill can't understand his view on relationships.

As for the rest I think he did a good job, i liked it.

Crazy117
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Good, Interesting and Engaging

Reviewed at: CH 12 - Cassy

Very interesting and engaging the story also scratched an itch I rarely get itched of the main char being nonhuman but humanoid in a notable way.

Spoilers Ahead!!

I mean he’s got a tail, scales, pointy retractable teeth, and is larger and stronger than human normal and it’s noticeable in the story not just forgotten or glossed over like it is many times in othe books I read.

Andar
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Missing a Story Concept

Reviewed at: CH 21 - Young & Naive

It isn't too badly written and has a number of nice ideas in the small area, but the longer it goes the more obvious it becomes that the author is missing a concept of where the story is supposed to go.

He jumps from one place and idea to the next without really fleshing anything out - for example it would have been nice to have one or two chapters describing how he learned of the world and the person who thaught him, instead of just a few side-sentences.

Or the current change (chapter 21) that finally made me drop it:

A while back a a girl swindled him out of a big sum. Some unidentified business men used that to get the girl sentenced to make her a slave, and to keep her out of their hands he accepted her as a slave, wanting to find out why they were paying 20-times her value to gain control of her.

Now he meets a supposed family member where she was supposed to have been abducted from as a baby, and he simply let them take her without a comment on her care despite planning to train her a few sentences before.

And that is not the only such case, characters get introduced to be ignored just two chapters later etc.

 

RazerFin
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This was pretty bad and sorta offensive in some parts. Grammar is bad which was expected with the disclaimer. The one sex scene I was able to read was was not done well. I’m usually not one to get offended by cursing but the amount of times this Mc refers to his companions as Bit** sluts makes it sound like the most chad teenager that ever existed is giving me his inner dialogue. This could potentially get better with a good editor, but it will mostly appeal to to young men who want some wish fulfillment.

kao
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MOIST and SWEET with a TANGY Salty Flavor

Reviewed at: CH 18 - Causality

Yes. 

All those good things come across this Mature and Explicit story. 

So be warned. 

Overall I liked it because it has the right blend of mature+explicit+Litrpg+solo badass MC. 

Can't wait to see how this all ends. (full on women at his beck and call and a family to raise that he sires with them)

Plus...this reminds me of Randi Darren's "Wild Wastes" series...(so if you liked his novels...give our write a read too) 

 

termac
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Underappreciated Isekai with rare Insight into human nature

Reviewed at: CH 1 - WildTail

I would describe the premise as such:

The MC was (before the story starts) a married middle-aged office worker until his employer fired him and his wife left him. He somehow (not explained in the first 21 chapters) met a homeless man ("crazy hobo") named Valen Alaster, who previously lived as a lizard man (by the same name) in another world, before "world-travelling" to Earth. With little to lose, and little to live for, the MC gets trained by Valen, while Valen lives with/mooches off of the MC.

He chooses the name Kubo Alaster and world-travels to Valen's world to live as Kubo Alaster, 18-year old lizard man. With decades more years under his belt than his new body shows (and all the wisdom and painful life lessons that come with it), plus Valen's training, he wants to simply live a good life.

But when people in around him are in harm's way, he's forced to choose to either let them die, or draw potentially dangerous, unwanted attention.

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The flashbacks to Valen's training of Kubo are a little bit confusing to follow: It was initially unclear to me that "Valen" and "the crazy/stab-happy hobo" were the same person, and the flashbacks are also not as well marked (visually) as they probably should be.

The grammar/phrasing is poor in places, e.g. "Had I died?" instead of "Did I die?"

 

The story develops at an appropriate pace, and the characters are suitably complex and believable (within the fictional culture). I've thoroughly enjoyed the story (as much as has been written so far).

 

Frankly, I'm baffled by some of the other reviews (and chapter comments). It's not a typical harem isekai (he doesn't want much of the attention he gets), it's not a power fantasy (he's forced to conceal much of his skill, and isn't strong enough to bear the consequences of fully revealing the skill he has), and the reason for his skill is explained (Valen's training, earthly scientific knowledge, and kendo).