Earth's Second Evolution

by kleimore

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy LitRPG Multiple Lead Characters Post Apocalyptic Urban Fantasy
Warning This fiction contains:
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What would a normal person do if they found themselves trapped inside a magical barrier with monsters and floating blue screens ordering them to fight those very monsters? What if there was the incentive of becoming as strong as a superhero?

Elan was a kid living a regular life, studying hard, getting bullied sometimes—the usual—until a purple asteroid fell on Earth and turned everything upside down, forcing upon him that exact question.

With only a healing skill at his disposal, Elan will have to find a way of overcoming the trials brought by the asteroid and survive in what became of the world. A place where countries have crumbled to pieces and evolved individuals with superhuman powers claim those pieces as their own personal kingdoms.

And if that was not enough, unearthly powers loom over the world, vying for its control while humans, unaware of their growing influence in society, bicker and kill each other.

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Quick disclaimer as usual. I'm not a native English speaker, so it'll be really appreciated if you can point out any mistakes you find.

This will be a slow-paced story where mc does not equal god's chosen child. I like an op MC as much as the next guy, but only when it makes sense. That is what I'm trying to create here.

Thanks for reading!

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Claw out my eyes: And why that's not a bad thing.

First things first: I HATE teen drama. It makes me wanna run away screaming or tear out my own eyes so I don't have to be subjected to it. The fact that I managed to read as much as I have is an excellent sign.

But, on the flip side, if Teen Drama Tropes is what you're into, this thing has it in spades.

It's got all the ingredients:

Us Vs. Them mentality with the big mean adults who just don't understand how much smarter the MC is than them.

Bitchy teen girls who snub at the drop of a hat.
Bitchy teen MC who snubs back rather than ask questions.
Bullies.

He said, she said.

Who's dating who.

Wanting to score points with pretty girls.

A very strong self-deprecating internal monologue that truly captures the conflicting insecurity/superiority complex of a teen boy in a way that made me highly uncomfortable (I was never a teen, I skipped straight from adolescent to fully formed adult in my sleep.)

Style's alright, feels kinda of a frankenstein between post apoc survival and a Y/A novel.

Grammer's decent. better than some native speakers.

Story is a hodgepodge of things I've seen before a million times. More of what you came to royalroad for. That's not a bad thing, but I'm not giving it more than half stars.

Characters: While they constantly irritate the hell out of me, they are consistently constantly irritating the hell out of me, and the following of the Mc's train of thought is tight, so I guess I gotta give a pass for that one. They're acting like kids the whole time, though. Freakin' teens, man.

Althayas
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Review (as of chapter 2)

A pleasing new take on the arrival of magic on our Earth. As of chapter 2, the writing, spelling and syntax are correct. For the moment, the MC don’t seems overpowered. I am curious concerning the synopsis announcing “with only a healing power”.  Will Elan be forced to use physical force for killing the goblins and other menaces, or it’s a provisoire case.

I will follow this story with interest, and eventually make an advanced review.

xenotrap
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An MC who doesn't just roll over and let people step on him, what?!

When the MC is screwed over by others he holds a grudge and tries to get back at them.

He is not some dumbass paragon of virtue saved by plot conviniance he actually cares about his life and wants to get stronger so that he won't get screwed over in the future.

His actions make sense and the supporting characters act like humans I have met (Some are dumber than others, but I have met people that would act like that before) and feel real. None of the humans are black and white, good or evil, sure there are naive nice people and weasley bastards ready to betray everyone to survive but newsflash that is how humans act.

nathanv70
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Great Start, good potential

As of Chapter 26, this story has the foundations of what could be a damn good story. It does take a while to get off the ground (what awesome story doesn't?) and is written in such a way that the choices are believable on the personal level. It is LITRPG in the post-apocalyptic way which is one of my favorite veins. The MC's personal power isn't instantly op, and there is plenty of room to grow and expand which is keeping me hooked. I do wish the author would release more often, but I don't so it's hard to ask that of others, but I do enjoy the story and simply want more of it. The grammar and spelling is kept relatively neat and the overall flow is quite nice. Stay tuned for more as I check daily for more chapters.

trollet
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Read up to chapter 18

Well written post app story.

I decided to drop it beacause the protagonist feels like an unrepentant asshole.

Other than that I liked it.