Thieves' Dungeon

by NoDragons

Original ONGOING Fantasy Dungeon High Fantasy
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

When a Dungeon Core acquires a taste for beautiful jewels, it sets out to become a criminal kingpin, operating from the sewers beneath the city.

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Koronor
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Is it a rat? Is it a snake? No, it's a dungeon core!

Well I can tell from the first chapters (up to 0.5) that this story is a hit! There are a few points in the chapters where I've spotted a few typos, but nobody is immune to those little scourges.

[Insert dungeon name here] is a core that was inspired by the ring he adorned to make his dungeon sssssssssnake themed. So five stars, because snakes are awesome. Though ironically, the nameless dungeon core has named his followers.

And it's weird that the author can convey the personalities of simple creatures like rats and snakes with no dialogue. Impressive, to say the least. I've grown attached to the characters in the short amount of time I've known them, and I'll definitely be favoriting this one.

If you're a fan of in-site references, ingenuity, and originality, then this is the dungeon core novel for you. A good start for anybody who hasn't read a dungeon core novel before, too, since it's explained well enough for both beginners and veterans! It's also very well paced, so you don't find yourself getting bored at all. In fact, it makes me want to write my own novel... I'll be back!

Zethuron
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A dungeon story that differes from most, come read!

Well, now this is a different and very promising dungeon core story, definitely a fresh breath of air on this site. It is simply better than most, just with how the pacing in this story is handled. Definitely worth a read and one i will enjoy for sure.

By a series of events, involving the city underworld's leader comissioning to create a special ring with a mana source embedded in it, he gets the jeweler killed to keep it a secret, but in turn gets killed himself, and the ring is hid in the sewers, from the sight of everyone, a dungeon core finds itself awaking in the sewers of the city, the fresh dungeon core quickly gathers minions from the existing fauna of the sewers and builds his dungeon, but then finds himself in danger, for his envivornment is not friendly to dungeons, and the city's underworld hasnt completely forgotten that something valueable disappeared months ago in the sewers, and many are interested in claiming that for themselves, faced with such threats, the core has to adapt, or be either enslaved or destroyed.

The MC (who has no name yet) is a sentient dungeon core, who became such by special circumstances surrounding his creation, this leads to a different type of MC, one that is not afraid to do every trick required to survive, to remain as a independent dungeon core making his name in the underworld of the city, he is not afraid at interaction with humans and other races, to the point of having subordinates like a crimical gang, but still is cautious of them, because they can form a threat to himself.

A thing i rather liked is that this story gives basic dungeon monsters like snakes, rats a personality through just their actions and interactions. Its rather novel.

This story does the dungeon trope better than most dungeon stories i have seen so far. Having the MC not being a person reincarnated as a dungeon core helps a lot, since that generally comes with morality baggage. There is also the fact that this story generally skips most of the dungeon building, spending far fewer words to it than usual, it rather goes for the action very fast, with the MC interacting with the outside world, in part this is due to the circumstances around the creation of his core, and the location he is in, so he is basically forced to do so, still quite the fresh breath of air.

The dungeon system is a bit different, with few stats being used, and the 'generic' upgrade system for the dungeon is barely used at all in this story, rather the MC can choose traits when levelling, or could get a randomized one, with no way to predict what it will be. The monster choice is also nice,, with the MC going for something different for his dungeon monsters.

Not much outside of the dungeon has been shown so far, i know thats eventually set to change, especially due how the MC interacts with the world.

Flawless grammar overall, maybe noticed only one typo in this story, the author really thoroughly checks the story to make sure almost nothing slips by. And even if one does, those generally do not bother reading at all.

The writing style here works very well for the story, overall its easy to read, with barely any parts where the reader is left confused as to what is happening in the story. The pace is rather fast for a dungeon story, leaving much of the usual dungeon stuff out of the story, thus in my opinion, improving the overall quality of the story by a huge margin.Making it overall one of the best written dungeon stories on this site.

A additional thing is that currently the pace of releases is very fast, 3 a day, which i consider a big bonus, and a handy treat for people who want to read more chapters. However it remains to be seen if the author can keep writing this story.

Certainly a story i can recommend to many readers, this is simply perfect for those who want a different kind of dungeon story, veterans of the genre, who have read many dungeon stories, with that often leading to disappointment as the story bogs itself down, will really like this. Also recommended for readers who want to try their first dungeon story, this is simply easy to read and doenst have much of the complicated mechanics other dungeon stories have.

 

verycoolname
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Every once in awhile I find stories on Royalroad that are head and shoulders above the rest for one reason or another. This is one of them. It has tons of personality and imagination, something vital for any story but dungeon stories in particular. I was drawn in almost immediately and am looking forward to more.

Althayas
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Initial review (as of 1.9)

My first critic was after 3 chapters. Now, as from chapter 1.9, I must admit that the development of the story has surpassed my first impressions. I read these last years many tales of dungeons, this one is apart and above others: the first originality is the emplacement of the dungeon, in the sewers of a big city, the Unnamed has thence many interesting possibilities of interacting with persons others that adventurers and has also access at all the ressources from a city.

The second has I said in my initial review is it’s search of the beauty ( and accessorily jewels.

The third is his choice of close supporters : serpent, rat and golem and their evolution.

InitialReview

I read the first three chpters just after publication. I will wait to make an advanced review until a dozen of chapters are available

First impressions : A dungeon interested by beauty residing in the sewers of a town is a new variation in the dungeon stories. Spelling or syntar errors aren't apparent

A little critic on the story : the core benefits of many blessings at first, don't overpower him.

Initial conclusion, I woill follow and favorite the story after reading hree chapters.

 

 

 

Soufdeboef
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Like an adventurer is attracted by glittering gemstones, i am attracted by good stories. Thieves' Dungeon seems to have the potential to be one. 

This opinion isn't based on its plot, characters or themes (we are only on the 3rd chapter so we don't have a good feel for those yet), but on how it manages to avoid many of the problems dungeon stories have.

The beginning of dungeon stories are always hard to get trough. This is mostly because they all begin in roughly the same way only really deviating when other characters are brought into the mix. 

Thieves' Dungeon cuts out much of the usual fluff in the beginning (waking up, learning about itself and its powers etc etc) and progresses the story at a fast pace giving us the stuff we actually do care about (cool powers/setting, interactions with other characters etc etc) in a way that makes sense, managing to catch my attention right from the start. 

I also have to give a nod at the authors good writing, managing to make the internal mologuing of the dungeon entertaining to read. 

I don't know how good this story will turn out to be, it still has many hurdles to climb, especially since it is writing in a hard genre. I will say however that it has begun very strongly and is heading towards a good direction. 

Long story short; i will be following this story and i think you should too. 

 

Smokey
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While not being the best thing ever written, it still has a certain charm about it. It uses an old theme to make a unique, captivating story.

I usually, with the style, character and whatever, include the feel of the story in the overall score; and I could not resist rating this one more than it maybe deserves. Compared to some other novels, this one is objectively worse, but I just want it to be read. 

Thieves dungeon has a lovely feel to it, and I loved it. The characters are, despite being mostly compromised of animals, memorable and unique. The bit about the dungeon pissing off the gods.. All these little things make this story great.  Good work.

MichaelTheWizard
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This is a interesting book. It is very different from most Dungeon Core books. There are two common faults that this book doesn’t have: The dungeon doesn’t just hunker down and roll with punches (I feel like a lot of dungeon book authors tend to make their MC unwilling/unable to send minions outside, which throws away the opportunity for interesting side POVs and worldbuilding), and our dungeon core doesn’t act like a adventurer casino, with the dungeon actually trying to kill the people that enter him. In addition to that there is solid grammar and an interesting style.

Seventh Sage
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It’s a good take on dungeon genre. Does well to show the character of the dungeon’s more intelligent monsters.

 

magical heart
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this story is quit enjoyable and I can't wait to see what happens next.