Mindflaying Rebirth

by Shiroun

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy GameLit Grimdark High Fantasy LitRPG Magic Non-Human lead Portal Fantasy / Isekai Reincarnation Villainous Lead
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

Maximilian was incredibly happy with his life, he worked at his dream job, had enough money for everything he wanted, an octopus pet that he loved dearly and a loving fiance. Atleast that is what he thought she was. One specific friday he came home and saw something horrible. Something that he didnt think would ever happen. While he was despairing, they laughed loudly and even killed him after they had their fun. In death, his immense hatred for everything only grew stronger and stronger until a mad god found him in the infinite void. Did the god feel pity? Or did he simply rescue this soul because he was in a similar position once? One thing is sure though.. the god reincarnated him in a different world. Since that day, max wants nothing else than achieving his vengeance and he will stop at nothing to get it.

This is his mad story.

 

 

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Disclaimer: This art is 100% not mine. If you are the artist and want me to take it down, pm me. (You must submit proof that it is yours of course)
Ps: Although this story has the 'sexual content' tag, I dont know if I want to do much with it because I dont enjoy writing such things that much.

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Branded-Tier
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The characters are flat and unnatural, none of them are believable in the slightest.

The story is cliche and badly paced.

The writing itself is bad, the dialogue is stilted and unnatural and the entire story is a pain to read with the author telling and not showing in an awkward and blunt way.

All around just not a well written or thought out story.

balloon rouge
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When i read the first chapter i was like edgelord incoming but then i saw that it wasn't just a boring edge fest 

daspablo
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temp review. will alter later

assuming the author has the same mind flayer head cannon in me head this could be a perfectly lovely mindfucky giggle fest.